I like this a lot. For one, there isn't enough good or even decent vore on this site. For another, this unfolds very realistically, all things considered. The couple is trying an experiment that one party is clearly not comfortable with, but is muscling through for the sake of love. It has a realistically natural level of awkwardness that makes me eager
he would’ve told her be to be
the first "be" can go.
every flic shen shockwaves
Every flick sent I put stuff on Microsoft Word to catch a lot of these little typos. I also use Natural Reader to read the stories out to me which catches even more errors. I only say this because I hate to see good stories get bogged down by typos.
does the predator what his prey
predator DO WITH his
After some time, she deciding that
she DECIDED that
starting to stoke at a faster
to stRoke at
Cadane moaned and
CADANCE
Shining was both embarrassed by both the joke
You say "both" twice. I'd recommend losing the first one.
else we can do”
Period at the end. You have this issue a lot, but this was the most blatant.
...ok, now I'm curious as to what sounding is.
Good chap.
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This is Cliff Hanger, hanging from a cliff
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Sticking something up your urethra. In this context, I believe that something will be Cadance.
I like this a lot. For one, there isn't enough good or even decent vore on this site. For another, this unfolds very realistically, all things considered. The couple is trying an experiment that one party is clearly not comfortable with, but is muscling through for the sake of love. It has a realistically natural level of awkwardness that makes me eager
the first "be" can go.
Every flick sent
I put stuff on Microsoft Word to catch a lot of these little typos. I also use Natural Reader to read the stories out to me which catches even more errors. I only say this because I hate to see good stories get bogged down by typos.
predator DO WITH his
she DECIDED that
to stRoke at
CADANCE
You say "both" twice. I'd recommend losing the first one.
Period at the end. You have this issue a lot, but this was the most blatant.
neat an update ^^ , and yeah i haven't seen a reluctant predator role in this kind of fic that stayed reluctant all the way through either....