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Oh, that was good!!!
4162721 I thought you might like that! Game-set-match!!
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Actually, the pacing in real life makes sense because it's real and has logical reasons to be paced the way it is, as per the rules of causation. This story just feels like you're rushing without any logical reason to do so. You're skipping a lot of narrative that could explain why things are happening the way they are.
——Why are Rainbow and Fluttershy infatuated with our main character? There is no explanation behind their romantic (or at least sexual) feelings for him. There was no development between the characters that would have naturally lead to this outcome. Because of poor pacing, you skipped right over any of the necessary character development to get to the conclusion.
4162836 Ah, okay, I get you now. Hmm, in hindsight, I should developed that some. Thank God for an Edit button!
4163239 She could wish but it's never gonna happen.
Not sure how much longer I can follow this if the quality doesn't improve, man.
4166231 That's exactly what I meant.
Challenges is her weakness.
4585870 That they are. And unfortunately for Rainbow Dash, Steve is a challenge she is destined to lose.
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