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6464138 Oh my god.
6464142 Incoming comments, brace yourself
6464143 Let 'em come, I'm about to cry.
6464154 I'm sorry, your reign was short lived, king.
6464231 At least I know I have a chance. And it did bring more readers anyway, so I'm happy.
6467708 Nope.
6468176 Before I begin my reply, I would like to say thanks for reading the prologue, and thank you for your criticism.
1. I won't disagree with you about the weapons, that's my fault. In fact, I might use that bit of information about the hunting rifle in the future. To be quite honest, I literatly picked out the first hunting rifle that wasn't computer generated. No I'm not a gun nut, I couldn't tell the difference between pistols for the life of me.
2. Yes I can see where your getting at about the first person perspective of the story. However, I did write this at two the morning, so that may have affected my style of writing.
3. Refer to number two.
4. Refer to number two.
5. That is my own fault, I'll go back and fix it when I have the chance.
You know what I just realized how unbelievable the prologue is. I might have to go back and rewrite some paragraphs, and add some new ones. I'm sorry that it took me some time to respond to your comment, and I am sorry if I come off as a bit angry. I just got through playing The Last of Us on Grounded difficultly and I might still be a little pissed off that it took me three hours to finish the last level.
But still, thank you for your advice, and I hope that I'll be able to 'fix' the prologue. Again I thank you, and hope you have a nice day.
I'll keep my eye on this for now, it seems promising.
6485065 Thank you.
This is interesting. I'll give this off and follow this story. Hope to see more later on. Keep it up.
6528422 Thanks, it's a shame that I have to take leave. For the moment anyways.
6558006 no prob
How did I miss this update?
Either way, the story is fantabuloustastic (?) and I'm eager for more.
-Starry Dash
6576100 Thank you for your kind words, Starry Dash.
He didn't think about dysentery? Man, he really IS messed up.
A Police Detective failed to notice that there was ONLY hoof tracks?
It should be 'input'.
7015038
At that point he probably didn't care.
He probably thought the "horse" was being ridden.