"You've forgotten."
Hi guys! Before we start I just wanted to let you know that I'm still using my style of writing despite the new story! This means that I'll still be using links as references, just not as much. This chapter was made because I got a few messages about people wanting to know more about Aegis, so here you go! If you want a description of what Aegis sorta looks like, I'm a bad artist but I made this!
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Chapter 2: "You've forgotten."
Darkness.
Something I usually didn't see.
It was something the bright shining orb of Celestia's always fought away, until it was the moon's time to shine. If you need clarification, yes. It is the sun I'm talking about. The thing was, even if it was night out, the moon shun almost as bright as the sun. Only it had a serene glow to it. Rather peaceful. I knew it was time to wake up, but I'd rather stay in my nice warm bed...
Wait, bed? I hadn't slept on a bed in years. I was always eating dirt during training sessions.
"Hey look, he's waking up!"
That most certainly was not my little brother, as feminine as he was that was downright just plain a mare's voice.
I forced open my eyes slowly to see my captor, as soon as they had been cracked open a bright light forced me to shut it back down. Nope, I wouldn't be having any of this. They said time waited for no pony. Well I was sleeping in a nice warm bed, so time would wait for me. So help me Celestia I will find Starswirl the bearded's book and personally stop time.
"Is he...Is he getting up?" One of the voices asked hesitantly. Obviously they weren't aware of my own decree to sleep.
"Nope, he just sorta attempted to open his eyes...But then didn't." A scratching noise could be heard from the direction of the voice. "You think he needs more rest?" The same voice questioned, I could almost see the raised eyebrow even if my eyes were closed.
"Pinkie, it's been a week. I think that's more than enough nap time. It's more than I get to sleep!" Well, I sense jealousy. This voice was rather raspy, clearly a female's still. She'd make good for an alternative rock singer though. I'll give her that.
"Magical backlash could kill a pony, to top that he also has magical discharge AND magical exhaustion. He should be in a coma for months actually. We're lucky to have gotten that brief waking moment!" A month...Wow, that didn't sound fun. But in all of this, I wonder who exactly were they talking about.
Wait, they were talking about a sleeping pony. Which I currently was. They were talking about me?
Sure enough I felt a prod against my forehead, and on my horn apparently. Snapping open my eyes I glared at the offender who dared to touch me while I was sleeping. Which caused me a lot of pain by the way, you know. I was just surrounded by darkness and all that. I bit my lip to silence myself from cursing.
There was a group of ponies infront of me, all of them mares. I had seen them all somewhere, but...where?...
I slowly turned my eyes to the daring pony who touched my horn without a second thought.
Only to see two ocean blue eyes staring into very soul, as if judging me. They were full of joy and life, two things I joined the Royal Guard to protect. However having them dead in your face was another story. Strands of dark pink cotton candy looking hair fell into my vision. It was then I noticed that these eyes belonged to a pony, said pony was a mare who was violating my personal space Her muzzle was pressed against my own, so we were snout to snout. She was violating my personal space like it was nopony's business! I, of course, as a Royal Guard am used to the antics of curious and playful ponies ignoring my personal space. But this was a little bit different. The mare was grinning widely at me, her teeth were pearly white, flashing the sun further into my already scorched eyes. I could have sworn there was a little smoke coming from them.
"Hi!" The Pink Menace chirped at me joyfully. My eyes twitched as but a few mere moments ago I was resting blissfully in the cold embrace of unconsciousness. Now I was muzzle to muzzle with a maniac who was grinning quite broadly. Once I directed my eyes to the area on the side of the mare I could see a rainbow maned mare who was attempting to hold the pink pony from getting to me, but it was all for naught. The mare let a nervous grin spread on her face, as if silently asking me not to flatten the pony before me. I directed my searing eyes back to the pink one.
"...Hello." I greeted her back. What? I wasn't impolite. Being a Guard meant you had to be professional. "Please retrieve your lost face from the lost and found." She tilted her head, forcing me to tilt mines as well.
"Lost and found? Why would my face be at the lost and found?" She blinked slowly at me, I kept my piercing half lidded gaze on her, searching her eyes for some sort of seriousness. And found none.
"My face, apparently is the lost and found." Yes, I too could be sarcastic. What? Despite being polite, I was also snarky sometimes. "So if you could just get off me kindly." Plus, my eyes were on fire. Suddenly I felt a searing agony that wasn't from my eyes surge through me rather painfully, I forced myself back down on the pillow and grit my teeth.
"Careful! You still aren't better yet! Don't move too much!" The Lavender one barked at me. Agony didn't even begin to describe it, this was some serious pain. My limbs felt like they were on fire, and my brain felt like it was trying to pound itself out of my skull. I let out a grunt, in frustration and pain. Mainly pain. I started the spasm as it seemed to only get worse. The room started to spin violently, my vision became foggy, obscured blocking my sight. My heart was racing, it wasn't a fun feeling in the slightest. I moved my eyes to the mare seemingly calling for somepony. Her mouth moved but I couldn't tell what she was saying. Clearly everypony in the room was worried or something as they rushed out the room. Either to go get help, or they were afraid that I'd suddenly turn into a zombie pony and eat them alive.
"NURSE!" That was the last thing I heard before I fell into the sweet embrace of darkness once more. I had only fainted twice and I was already tired of it.
Clap.
Clap.
Clap.
That was the sound of obviously, clapping from somepony, or someone. Nearby, it sounded of horse shoes so I was pretty sure it was a pony. I opened my eyes, the dark cell NOT burning me. Thank Celestia. But I was already tired of waking up, either stay woke or stay sleep. I glanced up at the cell bars. It was then I noticed, I wasn't in a cell. I was on the other side, somepony else was barred up, not I.
"Geez, you're making it hard for me to properly heal you with all that flailing around you're doing out there you know." The figure in the cage said, I'm assuming that's who was clapping, sure enough, he was sitting on he flanks while on a chair in the cell with his legs dangling, sitting rather oddly for a pony. Though the clapping hooves were shackled together. Who would do this to a pony? And what did he mean by healing me?
"Well, you're the one who's doing it to me, jerk." He sounded like he was amused. I'm assuming he was joking then. "And I mean what I said, you're flailing and making it hard for me to heal you in the outside world..."
Wait, did he read my mind just now? What did he mean by outside world? I better get some answers soon or I might have to smack a-
"Hey hey, this is a children's show. Don't go spouting your mouth off like that!" The dark pony in the caged pointed his shackled hooves at me, shaking them. I blinked once.
"Okay, number one. Stop reading my mind." I raised a brow. To which he just looked further amused. "Secondly, outside world?" I glanced around the rather dark room, trying to see anything but not getting anywhere. "And what in the hay it a children's show?" I demanded questioned. He merely shrugged as much as he could with the shackles on.
"Well, you see, uh, anyway-" Wait, did he just avoid all my questions in one shot!? Son of a- "Stop flailing you!" He flailed around in his chair to prove his point about my non-existing flailing.
"I'm not-...You're not getting me off subject." He rolled his eyes at his bad failed attempt to change the subject. He flashed a grin at me then. It was a turquoise color for some reason. His one eye that was glowing was the same shade of green, the other eye looked to be covered with his mane.
"You win. If you really wanna know, we're inside your head, get it?" He tilted his head, and I blinked. We were in my head?
"What're you a parrot?" His facial expression didn't change but he did sound amused. I actually let out an irked glare for once, we were in my head so it's not like anypony would see. I wasn't angry at what he said, but rather he was beating me at my own game of being witty.
"Yeah yeah, laugh it up. Now, how are we inside my head? And if we are, why are you here?" I raised a brow. Then paused. "And how are you reading my thoughts? Some sort of spell?" I asked him cautiously. A sigh came from him this time, apparently not really wanting to explain it.
"In order, it's because you passed out from all the pain. And now you're flailing around making it harder to heal you by the way." He quickly added on. I cut him off before he could continue.
"Then why did you keep asking me to not flail if I can't control it?" I frowned deeply. He looked at me for a second. Like really looked at me. It was if just like the Pink Pony he too was staring right through me. Seconds ticked on by as he just stared. Before he seemed to come back to life.
"Huh, oh uh, that. I don't know. Just seemed like the right thing to do at the time." Wait, was he doing just staring? He reminds me of somepony I used to know.
"I...see. Well, anyhow I won't interrupt again. Please continue what you were saying." He smirked, apparently that's why he had stopped. He didn't like being interrupted. I sighed.
"Good, now then. I'm here for...several reasons, most I'm not telling you. But I can say that I'm your conscience, in a way." He explained, almost to himself. As if going over it.
"I see." I was short and to the point, seeing as he didn't want me to talk. He nodded.
"And to that last question...If you look around you, you'll see the answers." He slowly pointed a hoof behind me. Which I turned around to look and see what he was talking about, I could now see that everything in the place was bright, at his will apparently. My very thoughts were just floating around, frantically and in, I hate to say it, chaos. They were everywhere.
"I see you were being quite literal." I pointed out to him. He continued to grin. But there was something else I needed to know. "Why can't I see you though?" I turned to him, he was still cloaked in shadows with the one creepy eye staring.
"Come closer and you'll see..." His grin became wicked, I leaned back for a split second. Did I really want to? Well, I think I should give him the benefit of the doubt seeing as he seemed friendly. Weird but still. I trotted closer to him, he got out of his chair, slowly walking on his hind hooves to get to me. He was hunched over, creepily so. I reached the bars, where he met me back, the shackles scraped against the them. Suddenly I could see him.
"...It's you." Said 'you' pressed his face against the bars breathing heavily, I could feel the cold coming from him, I almost want to call him an it. He was completely a teal color, seemingly his skin was formed of a solid liquid that showed up as that color. His breathing didn't sound like it would come from a pony, no it didn't sound like it would come from anything. It sounded like the combination of noise to make a monstrous groaning sound. His breathing heavy, he laughed loudly, a loud echo bellowing from him. The combination of many voices.
"Yeah, it's me." He smiled widely, abandoning his grin. "And you still need to fulfill your promise." I swallowed lightly, I had not forgotten. I didn't go one day without remembering.
"If you're still here doesn't that mean-" He cut me off with a piercing scream.
"WAKE UP!"
Darkness.
Darkness.
No seriously this was getting very old, really quick. I sat up slightly without opening my eyes this time, peeking open them lightly, the light scratched at them, wanting to put me through more suffering.
"Oh, you're awake." I curiously shifted by now half lidded vision to the nurse on the other side of the room. Or who I thought it was at first, until my vision cleared up and I wasn't just guessing. There was Princess Celestia standing over Twilight, who was in a bed herself. Twilight's gaze turned to me.
"Oh,um, hello there Aegis." She smiled gently at me with a tint of pink in her cheeks. Probably because I made direct eye contact with her.
"Guard." I told her evenly. If I get attached, I'll start to answer her more. And I already disliked talking. That and she seemed to be socially awkward. I couldn't be called socially awkward, I was just being silent like I should as a guard, there I had an excuse.
Twilight blinked at me. Then tilted her head. Cute.
"Guard?" Her face was scrunched up in confusion. She turned to the Princess with a gaze as if asking if she knew something that she did not. Celestia raised a brow. amused.
"He's saying that he wants to be called Guard. Which shall not be happening." She said almost as if talking to herself. "But I'm glad you're awoke Aegis. You were throwing quite a fit with all that flailing you were doing earlier." She smiled gently at me. That's right, joke. Joke away at my agony. Someday I'll be laughing at you. On the outside despite my rather fueled and justified rant, I still wore the same expression as always. Truthfully she could call me whatever she wanted to, she could get my name changed to Idiot and she'd get away with it too. "So how are you feeling?"
"I made a new friend." I said without changing my expression. She looked very curious. As did Twilight, I'm just about sure she was wondering when.
"Oh?" She raised her brow as if gesturing to continue.
"Yes, his name is Pain. Pain Hertzalot." Princess Celestia blinked at me. As if questioning the name. She shook her head and smiled at me once more.
"Very good." She said without missing a beat. "I look forward to meeting them." On the inside I smiled evilly. On the outside I did nothing.
"You do that." I nodded. Suddenly a cough was heard from the other pony in the room. It was a forced one, but with a slight pain behind it. You could tell from the gasp that was being held back. Princess Celestia turned to her faithful student with a concerned frown.
"Easy Twilight, you know what Nurse Redheart said." Both of them sighed, one louder than the other. Twilight from the pain she was in and Princess Celestia from worry. "You have cracked ribs, you have to be careful. You're lucky that Aegis here was able to heal what he did. From his field experience with medical spells, he didn't really pass any of them." Ow, right in the pride. Princess Celestia as if somehow sensing the insensitive words suddenly, turned to me with a disarming smile.
"I mean nothing by that. Some Ponies are good with medical and some are not." She appeased my non-existing hurt feelings. Pride in my opinion wasn't an emotion...It was just as physical as my hooves. And twice as powerful, or was until Princess Celestia shattered it. I grunted.
"Yes, Sir." I nodded to my superior. What? Once again I am polite, especially to someone who can send me to the moon at any minute.
"I've seen all of your files though after some research. You had a chance to go to my school when you were younger, and the chance to go to the Wonderbolt Academy not but a year ago. Why did you turn them down?" She asked with a brow.
Oh, now this was a story. Both of these are indeed true, but the problem was not if I wanted to go, it was a matter of what I had at home.
I'm the second youngest in my family, with my oldest brother becoming Celestia's personal guard, my second oldest becoming a healer for her and my sisters becoming part of the Wonderbolt's military flight squad. My younger brother was barely old enough to go to the bathroom on his own, let alone be by himself. My mother and father had died gruesomely in a tragic accident with a Manticore at a young age. None of the other members of my family were happy enough to get up and do anything, let alone take care of the younger siblings. Somepony had to take care of the family, and so I did. I pushed them to get a job, find something they liked, somepony they liked, and made sure they led a successful career. It was only recently my younger brother wanted to go to the Wonderbolt academy, he was a Pegasus unlike me. But they don't have just Pegasi there. All type of ponies who loved speed go there. So over the years, yes. I cooked, I cleaned, I worked, I did everything around the house. Pushed everypony to their limits. They pretty much sucked the life out of me with all the worrying I did. I pushed them to the top, and now I'm here at the bottom. Just a scout. Don't get me wrong though, it was worth it.
"Family issues." I explained to her, a look of confusion splashed upon her face. Before she looked surprised. Then understanding. Then confusion once more.
"I'm aware of the tragic event regarding your parents, but with all your siblings, wouldn't you have still kept going happily? Why stop?" She frowned. "Soothing Mist and Great Wall are outstanding ponies. Surely they pushed you to become something correct? Great Wall is the captain of the Pegasi squad. A great leader and role model, I'm sure for his younger brother he's even better!" She exclaimed. Well, she knows about that. But what she got wrong , was who had been pushing who.
"With all due respect, you've got it all wrong Princess." I slowly explained to her, drawing my words out. She waited for me to further elaborate. I took a deep breath, preparing to talk more than usual. When the Princess wants something you give it to her regardless. Before I could start I saw Twilight's ears flattened. She she feel excluded? I gazed at her, looking for an answer. Her cheeks grew slightly red again.
"Oh, um. I'm sorry, I was just thinking about how it must have been to..." She didn't seem to want to finish that sentence. But I know what she meant. I grunted at her, not really wanting her pity. Celestia brought her hoof up, patting Twilight gently on her head, to which Twilight gained a small smile from the motherly act. A small twinge of envy wormed into my being before I squashed it just like the anger.
"I agree with you. They are outstanding." I once again started slowly. Absently I noticed that I was giving out information to the Princess. "But, they weren't MY role models." Celestia carefully listened to my words, as did Twilight. Celestia decided to speak up.
"I'd let you continue but..Once Soothing Mist and Great Wall heard you were in the Emergency Room they came as quick as they could." Slowly, I shifted my gaze outside the window next to me as I heard a ton of stomping. "The only problem was that they were both training their squads and couldn't very well leave...So. They brought the training. Well..." She paused.
In the distance I could see a bunch of Pegasi moving all as one. Kicking up dust as they did so. There weren't nearly enough to even be a portion of the kingdom's guard. But there were still about forty. I'd guess, the kingdom's best of the Pegasi squad. Which means my brother was worried out of his mind. In fact, at the front of them all was my first oldest brother, or should I say Captain Great Wall? After all, I was only a scout. Just making my way out of Private not too long ago. He had the most stern face on I've ever seen him wear. They all stopped right infront of the hospital. He glanced up at the window I was looking out of, and right into my eyes.
"Here." Celestia finished lamely.
It took him a moment to register me, as he hadn't seen me in over ten years. My half lid gaze peered right through him it seems, this was because he was slightly shaking. I looked the other way, changing my gaze from him, looking forward. I didn't want to scare him away after all. It was at that point I realized I wasn't wearing my armor anymore. I felt naked without it, it grew to be a part of me. Silver hair blocked my left eye, obscuring my vision. My right eye was the only one that was actually able to see anything.
"Brother!" A voice called out, it seems Great Wall had mustered the courage to speak up. Princess Celestia walked over to the window. I decided then to look back over at him.
"Speak your peace." I greeted him with my normal tone of voice. He winced.
"May I come up?" I glanced around at all the guards with him. That was too many ponies to fit in here.
"No, I'll be right down." I got up, taking off the blanket on me and gently sitting it aside. I hopped off the bed and onto my hooves. The Princess was watching carefully.
"I see you're all better." She smiled at me. I simply nodded.
"Excuse me Princess, but I must-" She held up her hoof, and gestured to the door. I nodded, accepting her silent understanding.
As I stepped outside the hospital (after consulting the staff about doing so, which required another check up before they let me free.), I glanced behind. Princess Celestia followed me wearing the same smile, Twilight didn't come with because she still needed rest. Turning back around and looking up though, I saw Twilight in my bed giving me a small wave. I nodded at her. Upon reaching my brother, he bowed his head to Princess Celestia. "Good to see you in fine shape, Princess." He smiled at her, Celestia nodded back to him with the same smile.
"It's good to see you little brother." He flashed a nervous smile. I stood at attention and saluted.
"Good day, Captain Great Wall. You wanted to see me?" He lost his smile and frowned.
"Aegis, I know I messed up. You don't have to pretend like I'm not your brother." I kept my face straight.
"Captain Great Wall, what do you need?" I asked him once more. He sighed. Rubbing his snout, he turned toward his platoon. Which consisted of mainly mare. About ten out of the forty there were stallion. He smiled once more.
"This, is my little brother. Cute huh?" This gained a few snickers from the crowd, most of them remained stern, like myself. "I've been away from him for a long time. This child right here is what pushed me to become the soldier I am today. And for that, I am grateful." His smile broadened.
"Oh did he now?" Celestia muttered under her breath, which received more than a few glances. They turned their attention back to the captain. Who looked at me, shaking his head.
"Brother. A request?" He looked at me pleadingly. I nodded, stoic as ever.
"Sir."
"If I challenge you to a duel and win, you must forgive me. How does that sound? If you win, I will give you the map to mother's attic which held something in there for you. What? I don't know. But it was supposed to be until you were older. Maybe about twenty. Currently you're sixteen, you have a long way to go...So how about taking a chance to shorten it, hmm?" He flashed me a grin.
Now you have to understand, he was a captain of one of the most powerful squads in all of Equestria. There were thousands out powerful ponies out there who trained on a daily as hard as they could. He was so sure he could win. Even Celestia looked surprised. And I had just gotten out the ER. The whole guard was glancing between me and my brother. Citizens were curious as to why the guard was here, and so many. What was once fear of trouble, turned into curiosity as they saw him engage me in conversation.
"I accept." Two words that meant a lot to my oldest brother. He couldn't have grinned any wider.
"Good. Meet me over there." He pointed with his hoof at an area in which one of the Pegasi flew over and made a circle shape in the dirt. It was roughly as wide as a small cottage. Celestia looked skeptical but said nothing. Twilight from the window couldn't really hear everything but heard more than enough. I trotted off to the circle without turning back. My brother stood at one part of the circle, while I stood at the the other half of it. A Pegasus flew down, a flag in hoof. She raised the flag in the air before speaking.
"This is a one on one match between Captain Great Wall and Scout Aegis Barrier! Whoever gets knocked out first loses and has to abide by the bet without question, you must both swear on your military status to keep your oath!" Ah, an Oath Duel. Anypony who tries to break this promise loses their status gained, and right back to the start of their career. If you're at the bottom you're out of the guard and back into Military Camp.
"I swear on my title as Captain of the Royal Guard, Pegasi branch that I will keep my oath." Great Wall bellowed out, they both turned to me.
"I swear on my title as a Private of the Royal Guard, that I shall keep my oath." I spoke without hesitance.
"Then you may begin!" She signaled us to start with a wave of her flag. My brother quite easily flashed over with speed to my area with a trail of stone springing out the ground at his wake, kicking dust everywhere. He started to spin rapidly creating a small tornado, using his wings as blade he charged at me.
"Give up, and it'll be painless!" He bellowed once again, only to me this time. I answered him with a quick teleport spell, appearing to where he first started. His tornado died down as he snapped his head to my direction, glaring at me, we stared at each other for a moment, his heated purple eyes staring into my half lidded, uncaring amber gaze. Due to the shading in the area, the tree blocking the sun slightly my eyes had no light in them. Just dark amber orbs.
"I see. However..." I activated my magic, holding out my hoof, a blade made of magic was created. "I don't plan on losing." He grimaced and took a step back, he found his courage and took his stance. He obviously didn't want to hurt me, being captain of the guard and all. However, there was something else in his eyes. Doubt. At what you ask? Why it's simple.
As I had stated before, I was the one who pushed my siblings to become what they are today. No matter what career. I was the one who did everything around the house. I did everything. everything. All in all...
"Have you forgotten?" I quietly asked him from my side of the circle. He scrunched up his snout, furrowing his brows.
"Forgotten what, brother?" His ears were improved from a regular pony, being Captain of the Pegasi branch, and being a Pegasus in general.
"I see." I started slowly, like usual. "You have forgotten." I held up my blade.
Suddenly, wind shot down from my direction blowing over some unexpected ponies.
I narrowed my eyes, suddenly my brother's helmet, the top part fell off. Then a mark appeared on his chest. Then several more. It was then he blinked. Suddenly, I was standing a few feet behind him, my back turned. I held up a locket, which held a key. That went to our old house with the map in it.
Great Wall touched where the necklace was, trying to find it. It was then it occurred to him why he didn't feel it. He turned to me gritting his teeth in pain. I held my blade up, which was still just as powerful and bright as before. My back was still turned. As I was said before, he was indeed the captain of the royal guard Pegasi. But... I swung my hoof down, dissipating the blade into small spheres of amber magic. At the same exact time my brother yelped in pain and fell to the ground, on his side. All of his soldiers gasped. A few "Captain!"'s were heard.
My eyes darkened further, and I narrowed both of them, my silver hair blocking one side. Turning my head to him so he could see me from his view on the ground.
"You've forgotten, who taught you everything you know." I slowly turned my head, trotting off, leaving my brother on the ground in pain.
Yup, that was why I wasn't afraid. I couldn't beat an Alicorn, no. But I like to think that I was slightly good at fighting. That and my brother was completely unprepared for that. His arrogance was his downfall, he thought I had just gotten weak as he slowly gained power and rankings.
Everypony began rushing to assist their injured captain, asking multiple questions usually entailing "Are you alright?". The few who knew he'd be fine were slack jawed, staring at me awed. I walked past all of them, and back into the hospital doors, where Princess Celestia was watching with both her brows raised in pleasant surprise.
"...What is...I don't even." One of the less shiny soldiers stuttered out. Probably the lieutenant. "I was pretty sure he said that the kid was only fifteen..." He glanced at my direction, the hospital doors closed as soon as I emotionlessly stared at him, cutting me from his vision.
"Did you see that Fluttershy!?" Pinkie bounced in place excitedly as she watched the whole thing from their place on the tree.
They had been on their way to see how Twilight and Aegis were doing when the whole thing went down, they had came just as Great Wall had been talking about how Aegis was his brother.
Fluttershy looked appalled at the act of violence, her jaw was hanging while her eyes were wide.
"I did see it...How could he do such a thing to his own brother?" She frowned. "H-He just walked away without even checking on him." Pinkie stopped bouncing. Then shrugged.
"I'm sure he's fine! Come on! Let's go see how he is! You'll feel better!" She bounced off happily, leaving a nervous Fluttershy to scramble after her.
"Pinkie wait up!"
I leaned back, I put back on my helmet, making sure it was on correctly I put on my usual blank half lidded gaze instead of cold and uncaring. I looked into the mirror, making I looked correct, nodding I saluted to the mirror. Trotting back out, and slipping on the chest piece. Twilight was watching me carefully, as if studying me.
"That was an impressive display out there, um. A wonderful performance." She tried to awkwardly start a conversation. I kept my half lidded gaze up, nodding and slowly trotting off. I had somewhere to be right now.
"Where are you going?" She questioned. I glanced back. And shrugged before trotting off. I've been much too active today. Tomorrow I was spending the whole day sitting down.
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Why would you even......... If this is on purpose and not an accidental reference to Rainbow Rocks........... I swear to Celestia I will find you.
4087432 Please don't hurt me...
4087436
Oh, don't worry. I'm not that violent. I just want a hug......
Mm, I must say, I am looking forward to where this fic will go. Good chapter; can't wait to see the next one...seriously, I can't wait. Make that shit happen before I turn psychotic. ;)
Personally, I enjoy it so far, though I can see people taking issue with him possibly coming off as overpowered, more specifically in the fight with his brother just now. Also, there are a few misplaced commas [I don't hold those against you, I have a very limited understanding of them myself] and some incomplete sentences.
This is the little brother? Cute, huh?
And for that, I am grateful."
Suddenly, wind shot down
Those are a few problems that I found; there may be more but those were found more from me skimming through after I read it. Nothing particularly major; a light editor or proofreader would probably clear up most of the minor spelling/grammatical errors.
Speaking of Rocks... th02.deviantart.net/fs71/PRE/f/2014/072/f/a/mlp_fim___maud_pie_by_joakaha-d7a0htd.jpg
4087215 Oops. I'll stop.
For a comedy, this suddenly gotten a little dark.
4087517 I thank you for pointing out the errors I don't catch! It means alot to me, as well as your thoughts of my story.
I understand that he may probably seem overpowered, but it's just raw speed with the use of magic in a single burst. 
His brother was also caught off guard. However, the show must go on, if it gets downvoted because of how powerful he is, so be it. I do hope that it answered some of his history though. I hope you continue to enjoy the story as it further progresses.
With love, 5kittish!
4087618 It was just a little history
From this point it should be more comedy than anything else- Or er, I'll try... 
AegisXMaud OTP
I thought he would get a promotion for helping Twilight the way he did....
4089060 I'm thinking that would be quite a loveless relation ship...It sounds so sad. No one smiles, and Aegis doesn't even seem to even want to get close to anyone. Atleast Maud is trying.
4089295 Hey at the very least the brick wall can find solace in being more at home than the rolling stone. As a metaphor/simile I mean.
Interesting to see the beginnings of Aegis' backstory here, as well as his confidence. I'm curious as to how this stoic guard will react to sitting still so long while healing, though something about the interaction we saw in his mind suggests there may be more than meets the eye about our new friend Aegis.
Keep up the good work 5kittish.
The irony is actually not lost to me, I hadn't even known about Maud until
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4089060, above mentioned her! I had gone over it and then remembered a commenter talking about a recent episode...It was, um, oh yes!
4086408! (I'm sorry I forgot your name
Marky asked if it was inspiration from the new episode, I at the time had no clue what Marky meant due to my lack of watching MLP after season 2.
The coincidence however is uncanny. And rather surprising for me, the description nearly matches Maud.
this is pure gold
since someone's gonna say it it might as well be me.
Maud would love Aegis Barrier.
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1) He's been in and out of comas since.
2) He's not actually worthy of that. Leadership isn't about holding your own in single combat, it's about taking care of the people you've been entrusted with. An unempathetic brute like him would make a TERRIBLE leader.
I have an issue with Aegis here... in the first chapter, he was shown to be skillfully using "outside of the box" twists on basic skills to confuse his opponent while playing him up to be Joe-Average Guard Pony. I thought that was rather neat but... Now in this chapter, he's some emotionless 15 year old anime style "shounen badass" using his "secret technique" and spouting off cliche lines like "You've forgotten, who taught you everything you know." *insert speed lines and dramatic camera angles, focus in on the emotionless eyes and hero hair*
I don't say this to mock you or make fun of your OC here, but he's a little cheesy and over the top. Not quite Gary Stu yet, but it could easily happen with the way you are going. It's only my opinion here, but an OC should never start as a badass, especially not one who is both young and got his start in to hero style badassery as a domestic homebody. He even has dead parents and a dark secret already. Just saying that this could go south for you really fast. Again this is only my opinion, but OC's really should have to earn their badass points throughout your story, not start with them.
The description sound like a perfect match for Maud.
Great job
4090110 You are actually very much correct sir, the cards could actually very well line up and be my downfall, however I know where I'm going with the story, after all no matter how once I want to tell you about what actually goes on I can't be because it's spoils.
PLEASE! MOAR! This story is SO AWESOME!
And when I say moar.
I MEAN
MOAR
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Grammar Nazi here to save the day!
Damn! I went to look back at the story and find the errors but they eluded me...
Aegis is pretty awesome, you mentioned he was offered a place at Wonderbolt Academy, I'm interested in how a unicorn or earth Pony would fit in there? And when will we see the rest of his family?
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Yeah but when i say MOAR i mean
MOAR
(it actually comes out of my mouth visibly rainbow)
4093703 Yes actually! And I'll probably be updating the story soon! However in the mean time I'm working on yet another story that I'll need multiple people for, I'll be putting up a thread soon.
It will need some OC's and I'm not too good with them. As well as OC's too follow the plot. 
If anyone is interested please message me! I'm also looking for an awesome editor!
With love, 5kittish!
I think you should basically write the television series, but import him into it.
4107093 That's actually the goal! First I was getting some history out the way!
4107107 holy shit that is awesome, but wait... so are you doing a lot of the episodes like alex
4107152 Most likely I'll be doing a lot of them, I'm currently working on another story though! And even when I'm done with that I have to update a different story first!
With Love,
~5kittish
Hah! Fast, powerful and merciless! Take that you namby pamby lovers and toleraters! Finally, a main character who's soul isn't spit shined to the point of being blindingly pure!
Several more mistakes this chapter, but they were worth it!
The thing was, even if it was night out, the moon shone almost as bright as the sun.
I checked several places in case I'm wrong, but I've never seen 'shun' used in place of 'shone' like that. If I'm wrong, I apologize. In any event, there was also a double space just after 'The thing was,'
Dat wrong tense and missing comma.
But I'm glad you're awake, Aegis.
Surely they pushed you to become something, correct?
Did she feel excluded?
Double space after 'I swear on my title'
No mistakes found in this sentence.
4112480 Thank you for pointing out the errors! They'll help me so much in the future! And I appreciate that you actually took the time to read my story, and even more that you like it!
You're awesome, really. Thank you for the feed back! If you ever need anything just PM me!
With Love,
~5kittish
Just wondering how the next chapter is coming
4129770 Soon, I just finished updating one of my other stories, so now I have to get around to updating this one!
With love
~5kittish
4090110 I second this man.
Because it took me over three weeks to remember that this was in my Read Later list, thus preventing me from making an identical comment in a timely manner.
When shall there be another update? :D