I took one last look at her disgustingly pink face. “You need to go. Now.”
She sneered. “Is that so?” Trotting away from the door, she stuck her nose into the air. “Well, I don't think so. I'm having a great time with all my friends.”
I glanced around. Everyone else had already left the party after seeing what she'd done to Silver Spoon. “Riiight.”
She turned back toward me and smirked. “Not that you would understand. You don't have any.”
“I don't have any what?” I shook my head.
“Friends.”
I glared at her. “Out. Now.”
She took her time, dipping another strawberry into the now-lonely chocolate fountain. “Oh, I don't think so. I like it here.” She bit into it slowly, making a show of savoring it.
“This place is for me and my friends, and if I don't have any friends, then you can't be here.”
She laughed, a cruel, mirthless sound. “No, no. It's not like that. I'm not your friend, but you are my friend. You see how that works?”
I let my frown deepen as my eyes bored holes into her.
She giggled, making my skin crawl. “Good, now, won't you be a dear and fetch me some more punch? It seems like it spilled all over a certain somepony, and now there's no more left.”
I stalked toward her. “That is not how this works, and you can't treat my friends that way.”
“Ooh! What are you going to do about it, go cry to your mommy?” She snickered. “Oh, wait. You can't, because she's been dead for--”
I reached down and grabbed her by the mane and tail, yanking her roughly off of the ground.
“Ouch! OW! Hey, you can't treat me like...”
Taking advantage of my larger, stronger frame, I carried her to the front door. Fortunately for her, somepony had left it open, so she wouldn’t have to crash through it.
“Hey, hey! HEY! Don't you dare even think about-- Aaah!”
I tossed her out the front door, right into the dusty walkway, and I slammed the door closed behind her. Leaning against the closed door, listening to her muffled outrage, I shivered. If I ever had to meat that horrid little filly again, it would be too soon.
Do you think it's wise to release a story at 1:52am?
4004859
Nope.
(Though, to be fair, it's only 11pm here.)
I don't really care that much about garnering views for this particular one, though.
These vignettes are just done for my own practice; if anybody reads them, that's a nice extra bonus... if not, who cares? They're just practice for a big fic I'm planning, helping me get a feel for the characters.
(I'll do one little short for each major character, then I think I might try doing a short 1st person chapter for all the really important ones, to really get inside their heads.)
4004965
Oh okay. Well I enjoyed this story, can't wait for more!
4005105
I should have known someone would find that!
That was rather cute, but who was the pony Diamond was speaking to? Or was it a human? O.o
Odd, cute, but odd.
Also, not sure if overly controlling father who dictates everything his daughter may or may not do or some deep scaring father daughter secret implied...
Vinyl's was great. I still think whoever the other was (Octi) totally fucked the dude. Totally.
Any chance of genre teagging each chapter? I like to have a loose idea ahead of time what i'm going into.
4006374
But... how?
Hm, in future chapters, I'll put author's notes at the top, trying to explain a little. Hopefully that will help.
...and I'm not really sure that most of them fit a genre at all... they're generally just random SoL's with barely any plot to speak of.
(And don't worry, despite the tags, none of them will get more sexual than Vinyl's segment. That's the worst it'll be within these sketches. -- Though the final story will have optional clop chapters.)
4005475
Yeah, 'the other dude' in the story is always amorphous, and pretty much just an avatar of myself. The focus is on the character I'm practicing, so I don't build the other character any more than necessary. He's mostly just a self-insert, occasionally with details changed in order to interact with the character better.
Basically, I'm stepping into my own story world to have a conversation with each character before I begin to really write them in the main story.
It's a great way to get to know and build your characters, and I highly recommend it.
4005475
Oh yes.
Silver Spoon's father abuses her. Physically and sexually.
It'll be one of the things dealt with in the main story.
(But no, the abuse scenes will be 'off camera' and not explicitly described. I'm NOT going to be writing abusive foalcon rape clop. I do have some standards.)
4008004 Short descriptions work too!
OH SNAP