NEWCOMER: Little Loo!

by heavy weapons brony

Title bout! Doña Rareza!

Loo chewed on a chocolate bar recently purchased from a nearby convenience store as a means of getting a extra boost for the title bout.

“Hmm,...wanna bite?” Loo offered Rainbow through a mouthful of candy.

“Na,...you know those things are just empty calories right?” Rainbow explained while pulling a bottle from her cyan tracksuit and taking a healthy drink.

Loo raised and eyebrow to Rainbows large form, then she elected to return to her “Empty calories.”

When Loo finished her candy the an Official came into the locker room in the usual fashion and handed Loo the profile of the major circuit title holder.

The fighter’s name was "Doña Rareza” from Madrid, Spain. She was a tall, light, Marshmallow colored unicorn (Annoyed grunt) with a extravagant looking mane, it was a deep blue and purple and curled around her face.The accompanying pictures depicted her in a traditional spanish “Andalusian” blouse, above a bright green pair of shorts. In the first picture, Doña Rareza was holding a bright red cape in front of a gigantic bull. In the next the bull charged, in the one after that Doña Rareza had pulled on the cape to reveal a huge boulder was hidden behind it. In the last photo Doña Rareza was nuzzling the boulder with her nose and a rose in her mouth while the giant bull lay unconscious in the dirt.

Loo didn’t know what to think, “How good can a bullfighter be at boxing?.”

Loo and Rainbow left the locker room to find the crowd had already begun cheering, Doña Rareza had already took her corner and was showing off her moves to the cheering crowd.

“¡Gracias gracias, mi adorado público!” Doña Rareza yelled waving her hands to the stands.

Loo and Rainbow took their corner a little more humbly than their opponet

Loo got her gloves on as the ref walked into the center of the ring to announce the contenders.

“LLLLLLAAAAAAIIIDDDDIIEEEEs aaannd gentlecolts! In this corner weighing 1,....”

“¡Detente! ¿Nunca os dijo vuestra madre que nunca hay que decir el peso de una dama?" Doña Rareza interrupted, Then she gave the Ref a deadly glare.

The ref was taken back, and looked liked he was a little afraid for his life.

“UMMm *Gulp,..Doña Rareza., and Little Loo” The Ref managed with his voice quivering a bit.

The ref signaled both fighters to the center. “Okay same drill, keep it clean and come out boxing, bump gloves and wait for the ding.”

Doña Rareza huffed, the stuck her nose into the air while she held out her gloves, as if Loo wasn't worthy of her eye contact, Loo frowned and begrudgingly bumped gloves with her uptight opponent.

“Hoy lucho por mi amor!, Tom!” Doña Rareza exclaimed.

*Ding

Loo landed a quick uppercut on Doña Rareza ’s face who hadn't lifted her guard after her little speech.

Doña Rareza took a few steps back holding her jaw, She looked at Loo with a look of unquenchable blood lust.

“¡Oh! ¡Ahora.Vas.A.Pagar!” Doña Rareza yelled banging her gloves together and re-entering the fight.

Loo went in for another uppercut, which Doña Rareza dodged easily, then immediately countered with a jab to Loo’s face.

“OLE!” Doña Rareza shouted when her jab connected.

Loo Stood back and waited for an opening.

“¡Venga, venga!” Doña Rareza taunted with her gloves.

Loo went in for a body jab, which Doña Rareza blocked then countered.

Loo quickly dodged the counter and uppercutted Doña Rareza , It connected and stunned her.

Loo get a few good jabs in before Doña Rareza recovered.

Doña Rareza jumped backwards, out of Loo’s punching range.

She clapped her gloves and counted.

“Uno,..*Clap...Dos,.*Clap....Tres! *Clap”Doña Rareza yelled as her horn began to glow.“

Loo picked up her guard and prepared for any tricks the unicorn may be packing.

From behind oña Rareza a huge boulder engulfed in unicorn magic came flying from the stands and headed towards Loo.

Loo Gulped and dodged the incoming projectile, the rock slammed onto the canvas hard.

“Uno!” Rareza shouted.

The boulder flew back up into the air and dropped for Loo once again, Loo dodged to the left just before the rock crushed her.

“Dos!” Rareza yelled with a bit of strain

Instead of climbing back into the sky, the boulder came for Loo from the side, It slammed into her before she and time to react causing her to fly into the ropes, bounce off of them and fall face first into the ground.

“Tres!,.... Magnífico!”Doña Rareza yelled, she floated the rock up to her face where she kissed it, nuzzled her nose against it ”gracias mi amor” she whispered just before she replaced it among the crowd.

Loo got to her feet before the Ref could count to 5.

*Ding!*Ding!

Both fighters took their corners.

Rainbow Splashed a bottle of water over Loo’s Face.

“Come on kid! what was that!?’ Rainbow yelled.

“She has a flying rock Rainbow, a flying BUCKING rock!” Loo exasperated.

“Okay Loo, you gotta rock just as much as her, when she attacks, you got to find a way to counter it, bounce it back Loo, bounce it back.” Rainbow explained.

“Bounce it back,...rock just as much as her.” Loo thought as an idea formed in her head.

*Ding *Ding

“¡Venga, venga!” Doña Rareza taunted.

Loo went for a uppercut that Doña Rareza blocked, then countered.

Loo dodged the counter and went for a body blow, it connected, but it felt strange. It was like punching a hand full of rubber bands, after the hit a “TWANGGG!!” erupted from Doña Rareza, then a collection of shredded nylon bands slipped from under her shirt and her belly bulged from her petite hourglass shape, into someone who spent too much time in front of the T.V.

Doña Rareza doubled over in effort to conceal her paunch.

Loo saw it as a opening and landed a powerful right hook to Doña Rareza’s face.

Again, this impact felt off, it was like punching a doughnut covered in glaze.

When Loo brought back her glove, she found it covered in a collection of rogue, foundation and a fake eyelash hung on her glove by a strand. Loo looked up at Doña Rareza and nearly jumped from her skin.

The right side of her face had been untouched by the hook, so it retained its artificial beauty, but her left side was a horror show of pale skin, saggy eyes and crows feet.

Doña Rareza roared and jumped backwards and began counting.

“Uno,..*Clap...Dos,.*Clap....Tres! *Clap” Doña Rareza yelled as her horn began to glow.

Loo cocked back her signature uppercut.

The boulder being held by Doña Rareza’s magic came careening towards Loo.

Loo preformed the uppercut right into the boulder with such force it broke it from Doña Rareza’s magical grasp and send it careening into it’s former owner.

“¿Pero que...?” Doña Rareza squeaked just before the rock collided with her with the force of a semi truck, the boulder pushed both itself and Doña Rareza into the ropes, causing them to snap, the rock ultimately crushed Doña Rareza under itself and the far wall with a horrendous BOOM!

There was a moment of silence

The Ref just shrugged.

*Ding*Ding “TKO!!” the Ref called waving his arms in the air.

The crowd erupted as the Ref threw the Major circuit belt over Loo shoulder, and Rainbow lifted Loo onto her own shoulders, so Loo could brandish her new belt for all to see.

Then a shooting pain erupted from Loo’s Right wrist. “Ow!!” Loo cried as she dropped the belt. Rainbow loward Loo and took a look at her wrist.

“OH no kid,...we better get that looked at” Rainbow with concern.

Author's Note:

Okay two circuits down

only the world to go,....(OF COURSE!)

anyway, i really like this chapter, and i hope you do to

i've managed to afford my internet, for now.

as far as who's pinkie pie gonna be, its getting to the point where she standing in the way of the development of the story, if i don't think of anything soon i'll have to cut her from the main story, and put her on the back burner for a bounus fight (SHE WILL BE IN THIS FIC DAHMMIT!) my orininal idea was to have her be Von pinkamienia, but its a bit late for that

anyway, like fav, follow please.
translations

“¡Gracias gracias, mi adorado público!”
thank you! thank you! my adoring crowd

“¡Detente! ¿Nunca os dijo vuestra madre que nunca hay que decir el peso de una dama?"
STOP! didnt your mother teach you never reveal a ladies weight!?

“Hoy lucho por mi amor, Tom!”
Today i fight for my love! Tom!

“¡Oh! ¡Ahora.Vas.A.Pagar!”
OH, IT, IS, ON!

“¡Venga, venga!”
COME ON, COME ON

”gracias mi amor”
Thank you my love.

“¿Pero que...?”
What the?

and special thanks to superpinkbrony12 and supervg for their awsome ideas and to anyone else who has commented, liked, or faved this fic.

thank you guys so so so much!

and a extra one to Hywther for helping me with the "spanish" aspect of this fic

Comments

[Khenlos]

Great chapter, but I cringed a bit with the translations this time, since I am spanish and some of them didn't make any sense, so here's how they should be (at least how I think they should be):

“¡Gracias gracias, mi adorado público!”

thank you! thank you! my adoring crowd

“¡Detente! ¿Nunca os dijo vuestra madre que nunca hay que decir el peso de una dama?"

STOP! didnt your mother teach you never reveal a ladies weight!?

“¡Hoy lucho por mi amor, Tom!”

Today i fight for my love! Tom!

“¡Oh! ¡Ahora.Vas.A.Pagar!”

OH, IT, IS, ON!

“¡Venga, venga!”

COME ON, COME ON

”gracias mi amor”

Thank you my love.

“¿Pero que...?”

What the?

Keep in mind that some of the more colloquial expressions like "it is on" don't have literal translations (this one in particular doesn't have anything nearly remote to it in spanish), and doing so will result in... well, odd phrases and nonsensical expressions . It's better to find other colloquial expressions in that language that try to send the same meaning, and that's what I did in that case for example.
Just my two cents, if you want to use this to improve the chapter then awesome, if not well I'll still keep reading the story, this was just to fix those phrases.
Again, keep up with the story!

EDIT: Now that I saw the title of the chapter again maybe, and just "maybe", you can think about putting "Doña Rareza" instead of "Don Rareza", given that Don is for guys and Doña for ladies. Sorry for the long comment

[SuperPinkBrony12]

You did a great job with Rarity in this title bout.

What's the matter Rarity? Hair get in your eyes?!

[heavy weapons brony]

4107314 thank you
i value you imput very much

when a put a diffrent language in my fic i go to google, type in somthing, and use that translation
i hope i didnt offend you or anything, and yes because you where nice enough to give me the correct translations, i willl fix them

[Khenlos]

4107340 Glad to be of help! And you didn't offend with them in any way, don't worry!
I mean I used to do the same when I started to write in english but I quickly found that most of it was pretty much unreadable (romance languages don't mix well with languages from other cultural regions I'm afraid ). Luckily I'm a very avid reader so I started to read more and more in english 'till I learned from those mistakes. I think that now I'm a little better writting in english at least .
Since spanish isn't a language needed to international sites like this one I'm glad to help those that allow me to do so when it comes to spanish
Again thanks for making this story, keep up the good work!