Sweet Apple Nightmare

by Awesome

Nightmare's can't be Real?

Authors note: RED is Applebloom dreaming

"Ya hungry?" Asked Big Macintosh, he just finish cutting Applebloom's tongue out.

Sweetie Belle shook her head no.

"If Rainbow Dash was here she would kick the crap out of you, you... you maniac." Scootaloo said angrily, Big Mac shrugged.

"Well she ain't, an' anyway I wouldn't be so sure about. Rainbow Dash ain't as tough as she like's to make out." He shoved the tongue in to Scootaloo's mouth putting his hoof over her mouth, Scootaloo had no choice but to swallow.

"Don't you go trying to spit that out now."

Applebloom woke up panting and sweating, "It was just a dream." She said to herself. This nightmare was recurring, it was the third time this week she had this dream. She had tried to avoid her big brother at all cost's. She would try to go to bed, but she would end up having the nightmare AGAIN, she went back to bed, but couldn't sleep. She just thought about if this dream was a sign, or if it was just a normal, ordinary, dream. Applebloom shuddered and got up to go down stairs. She walked passed her brothers room, seeing that he was asleep, "Phew!" Applebloom was relieved, but went downstairs, and out the door, in a rush. She could see so many apple trees in the moon lit night. "Meh, i'll go back to bed, I don't feel that bad anymore." Applebloom went back upstairs, to her bedroom,got and bed, and went to bed. Luckily she didn't have the nightmare, thankfully she slept well.

She woke up feeling like today was going to be a good day. Actually today would be awful or scary, but she didn't know this yet. (Please don't assume its the "events" in Sweet Apple Massacre.) She went down stairs for breakfast, ate up an apple fritter, some apple cider and an apple. (DUH!) She walked only a few yard's away from the house, and heard a scream. She could not tell if the scream was of terror or enthusiasm, but after having the dream's she's been having she ran to the source of the sound. Unlike her dream the sound was coming from in the apple trees. She was in a clearing and saw Sweetie Belle and Scootaloo horsing around. "Phew! y'all girl's scarred mae!" "Um... why?" Replied Scootaloo, "No reason." "Okay then... what will we do to get our Cutie Marks this time?" Asked Sweetie Belle "Background dancing?" "Gardening?" Scootaloo chimed in with her idea, "Hey Applebloom, can we help Applejack and Big Mac make that cider?" Applebloom hesitated to answer, "Um.. nah, they don't need any help." "Oh, why not?" Applebloom kept a blank expression "Ah dont wanna talk bout' it." "Why not!" Scootaloo was curious. "Well... ah rather talk to Applejack bout' it first and its none of yar buisness!" "Okay geez, no big deal." Said Sweetie Belle, "We'll let you talk to Applejack about it, then you tell us about it, deal?" "Yes!" Applebloom was relieved, "So we gonna get our Cutie Marks or what?" "Yeah lets go!"

Applebloom had finished crusading for her cutie mark and was ready to talk to Applejack about the nightmare. She walked into the barn and happened to see Applejack "How ya doing Applebloom!" "Um.." Applebloom shuffled her hoof "Can ah talk to you bout' something?" Applejack could only wonder what it was "What is it kiddo, you can tel me anything!" Applebloom was nervous to talk about it "Well its kinda, yah know... private." "Well then lets go into my room." Applebloom follow Applejack to her room, they both sat upon her bed "Applebloom, you can tell me now." Applebloom began to tell her story from the time she was bound and gagged, to raped and murdered. Applejack was absolutely speechless at what this filly had just told her "W-well Applebloom I don't know what to say." "Well I was wondering if it was a sign or just a normal nightmare?" Applebloom was curious. "I think its just a bad dream" But Applejack knew it was to detailed to be a bad dream. "All talk to Big Mac about it, your not scared of him right?" "Yes." Applebloom said quietly. "Well I understand, but i'm still talking to him." Applebloom already worried about running into her brother, but if Applejack told him the story, she would be even more frightened.

She was looking for the other crusaders to tell them her story, if they had the stomach. "Applebloom!" Cried both of the other crusaders at the same time. "Are you ready for the story?" Applebloom wasn't eager to tell it, but she would. "Yes!" Shouted Scootaloo. "Okay, here goes, hope you got the stomach." Applebloom told the story the same way she did to Applejack, when she finished the other crusaders were shivering and shaking in fear "T-that was d-disgusting and v-vile!" Sweetie Belle was looking for a better word to describe it, but couldn't. Scootaloo vomited without warning. "Gees I didn't think it was that bad." Said Sweetie Belle, who had stopped shivering "Yeah I don't think I've ever heard anything worse then being dismembered, and raped by your brother, and that's putting it lightly." Scootaloo was sickened. "I thought you had the stomach." Applebloom rolled her eyes. "Applebloom! its supper!" Shouted Applejack. "Okay guys, gotta go!" Applebloom ran to the diner table Big Mac was at the table with Granny Smith and Applejack. Applebloom was reminded of the dream and was sick and scared. "Applebloom would ya stop pickin' at your food!" Big Mac said in his characteristic voice .

"AHHHH!" Applebloom screamed, she had just woken up from a horrible part of her dream. No one heard her, expect for Big Macintosh, who went into her bedroom to see what was up. Applebloom was shivering "It's all right." Said Big Macintosh in a soothing voice, he knew what was wrong. "The dream isn't real, you'll be okay." "G-g-go away." Applebloom was frightened. "Don't worry Applebloom, ya safe." He was trying to keep her calm. "O-okay Big Mac." Applebloom was calming down. "If your still scared, ah can lay in here with ya." "Really, then that's a yes." Big Mac got on her somewhat small bed. Applebloom felt safe with Big Mac.

Big Macintosh woke to a faint sobbing. He got out of the bed to see Applebloom rocking back and forth curled up into a ball, crying. "I cant take the pain anymore, I-I wanna just disappear, or die." Applebloom said this in a demented voice, she was going insane. He was going to the doctor "Applebloom we goin' to the doctor's!" Applebloom didn't notice him at all. Big Mac threw Applebloom up on her back and took her to Nurse Redheart. Her office was empty, so there was only a 5 minute wait. "Big Mac, what is the problem?" Applebloom got off his back "She's been actin' crazy doc." "Ok. let's let her wait out here, we can talk inside."

Comments

[Nonagon]

Haven't read this yet, but that unnecessary apostrophe in the chapter title is already turning me off it.

[SirusAstro]

Good start!
I have read the fanfic and let me say it is very disgusting

But keep up the good work!

I think you should try to weed out at least most of the typos before posting, it would be more enjoyable to read. The dialogue was also a bit boring, you could try to improve that.Also, you lost me for a moment when you basically told us "Apple Bloom was eating and then she woke up". I mean come on... At least tell us she went to bed before you have her wake up. I'm also a bit disappointed. You told us this would be sort of like Rocket to insanity, but this is not even close to that level. And one more thing. Please don't add your own comments to the story. I mean the ones you had in parenthesis like that (duh). It really distracts the reader and it makes the story seem like it doesn't take itself seriously. Sorry if I sound harsh and overly negative but I do think this needs fixing. Also, these are just my opinions and might not be the Truth. That is all.

One more thing. I think this has promise, it just needs to be given a bit more work. I wouldn't bother commenting on hopeless fics after all. :) Good luck with this one!

[PegaSister]

Good start, but please start a new paragraph after someone new starts talking. It gets rather confusing

[Awesome]

Let m,e check my next one better, I'll edit some of the typos, but this is one of my few fanfictions i'm working on. Thanks for the support.

[Awesome]

24853
What did ya expect? i'm an amateur at these things.

[PinkiePieisbestponya+100]

This is really good so far. I can't wait to see where it will lead! You've done a great job! There were on a few typos. I've read Sweet Apples Massacre and found it disgusting. Hopefully you'll be able to dispell that story's vileness from our hearts and minds with this story. Keep up the good work!

[RainbowSonicx399]

What's with all the low ratings?

[ThisIsMe95R]

*Shudders* ugh sweet apple massacure the only parts I could NOT stand were the tounge eating and sweetie belle having to shouve her hor up scootaloo!!!

[Dark Colt Sabata]

Please make more, I beg of you! please?

[MINELILPWNY]

This story is a great sequel to sweet apple massacre i luv the fact applebloom has gone insanei want to see more if u do make moreYAY! if u dont FFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU!

[The Seneschal]

That description escalated quickly

[The Seneschal]

And I haven't read sweet apple massacre because I can't EVEN FIND IT!

[Indeliblink]

2283206
If you still want to read it, go ahead. Be warned though, it's probably worse than... that other fic, and not very well-written.

[2022cstephens]

YO IM GONNA FLARFIN