Different world. Different rules. I am percived as an animal, A beast who is nothing but food or decoration for rich griffons. But still, I have a friend... whom may be able to help me reach my salvation... I just hope there is one to reach for.
It went to quick. Withing about 3000 words we were already at the Princess. which is pretty bad pacing In my humble opinion. I think showing what Victor is experienceing in the facility is worth mentioning too. Gives more story content to write about too
Yeah a bit on the short side. I really wanted to reach 10 K words. But I am having a test on thursday and I won`t have time to write for at least 3 or 4 more days so I wanted to get this one out to you guys. Can you forgive me
3925801 YOU ARE FORGIVEN CHILD (*high and mighty sound of god*) it's not that it was bad, just short... we have the "alpha" part then... i don't want to die, i am not an animal, i'm a human (smart human)... save me.
you get a huge up vote from my for taking the whole story and this verse to the griffon side and not pony
3941265 Working on chapter 3. Gotta warn you tough, this feels like the worst/ most boring chapter / (most poorly written but can't help it) yet. So i think i will try to make 2 chapter release to make up for it. No promises though!!! Thank you though for the compliment.
Besides several spelling errors (i assume your trying to say "though" or "thought" instead of "tough") this was a pretty good chapter. Out of curiosity what fighting style does Victor know, if any? I'll be whatching. myehehehe
ok why does everyone get this wrong. the right word is sentient not sapiens. sapiens refers to the human scientific name "homo sapiens". sentient means we are intelligent. I'm not trying to be mean but everyone seems to get this messed up.
M... nice one. A bit short
Well, this is a good story line too. (you should keep the original anyways cause I thought it was pretty interesting)![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
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It went to quick. Withing about 3000 words we were already at the Princess. which is pretty bad pacing In my humble opinion. I think showing what Victor is experienceing in the facility is worth mentioning too. Gives more story content to write about too![:scootangel:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/scootangel.png)
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Yeah a bit on the short side. I really wanted to reach 10 K words. But I am having a test on thursday and I won`t have time to write for at least 3 or 4 more days so I wanted to get this one out to you guys. Can you forgive me![:applecry:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/applecry.png)
3925796 I agree with this expansion of the story. Kinda interested in the Alpha arch since well females are literally laying before him while he did next to nothing lol. mylittlefacewhen.com/media/f/img/mlfw2885-I_Aint_Even_Mad.jpg
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YOU ARE FORGIVEN CHILD (*high and mighty sound of god*)
it's not that it was bad, just short... we have the "alpha" part then... i don't want to die, i am not an animal, i'm a human (smart human)... save me.
you get a huge up vote from my for taking the whole story and this verse to the griffon side and not pony![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
p.s.
good luck in the exam
I must say, I like this alot more as the first version. I hope there will be more to rtead in the (very) near future.
3941265 Working on chapter 3. Gotta warn you tough, this feels like the worst/ most boring chapter / (most poorly written but can't help it) yet. So i think i will try to make 2 chapter release to make up for it. No promises though!!! Thank you though for the compliment.
Very good!
Besides several spelling errors (i assume your trying to say "though" or "thought" instead of "tough") this was a pretty good chapter.
Out of curiosity what fighting style does Victor know, if any?
I'll be whatching. myehehehe
3954269 No fighting style. he just improvised and with what he tought would knock him out. So it was just a brawl really,![:applejackunsure:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/applejackunsure.png)
ok why does everyone get this wrong. the right word is sentient not sapiens. sapiens refers to the human scientific name "homo sapiens". sentient means we are intelligent. I'm not trying to be mean but everyone seems to get this messed up.
hummm![:heart:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/heart.png)
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4004287 Actually a few different kinds of animals on earth can be considered sentient, I think what the author means is "sapient".
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Sapience is the ability to contemplate your own existence.
Sentience is the ability to feel or perceive.