Different world. Different rules. I am percived as an animal, A beast who is nothing but food or decoration for rich griffons. But still, I have a friend... whom may be able to help me reach my salvation... I just hope there is one to reach for.
D'aaaw, it's like reading about two siblings fighting when victor and Elpis jibe on each other, I'm really curious about Elpis's home status now. I hope she isn't being physically or emotionally abused or something. Keep it up!
I've read all three chapters, and it intrigued me enough to favorite it. I'll also add that you need to get someone to go through it and pick out every incorrect use of "tough." It's easy enough to figure out what you're saying, but it's so consistent that it's actually kinda irksome.
3968766 Thanks for telling me. I will try to improve my writing some more, but that must come over time since im relatively new to writing stories still. Thanks for feedback, I am currently trying to get an editor to look through my story.
4004287 That is actually not true. Sentinent refers to being alive, meaning you have the ability to breathe, feel emotion, follow instincs and small consepts like those. Sapien however means "wise" meaning one can think beyond the instict and emotion an can lay plans, think out theories, and other things that needs high intelligence.
long story short; sentinent means simply alive with simple needs and feelings while sapien means smart individual whom can think of complex ideas.
And no, sapien dosen't only work with homo sapien. If i say "Castor canadesis sapien" i say Wise bever or bever with a somewhat human intellect.
well if you need help with ideas I could help, but don't ask me how to write cause well, I can't lol
It's been three chapters. I don't care if English is your second language, just please get an editor.
I think the word you were looking for was "Skinny", not Skimpy. Skimpy implies that you are wearing revealing clothing. Not that you're underweight.
3962235 working on it now =)
D'aaaw, it's like reading about two siblings fighting when victor and Elpis jibe on each other, I'm really curious about Elpis's home status now. I hope she isn't being physically or emotionally abused or something. Keep it up!![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
Looking forward to more.
Keep up the good work. Deus tecum.
I've read all three chapters, and it intrigued me enough to favorite it. I'll also add that you need to get someone to go through it and pick out every incorrect use of "tough." It's easy enough to figure out what you're saying, but it's so consistent that it's actually kinda irksome.
3968766 Thanks for telling me. I will try to improve my writing some more, but that must come over time since im relatively new to writing stories still. Thanks for feedback, I am currently trying to get an editor to look through my story.
Very nice, i like the idea of the Classic "human in Equestria but is considerd a beast of burden" storyline from the Gryphons perspective.
4004287 That is actually not true. Sentinent refers to being alive, meaning you have the ability to breathe, feel emotion, follow instincs and small consepts like those. Sapien however means "wise" meaning one can think beyond the instict and emotion an can lay plans, think out theories, and other things that needs high intelligence.
long story short; sentinent means simply alive with simple needs and feelings while sapien means smart individual whom can think of complex ideas.
And no, sapien dosen't only work with homo sapien. If i say "Castor canadesis sapien" i say Wise bever or bever with a somewhat human intellect.
sorry for any typos, writing on my phone.
hummm and good chapter![:heart:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/heart.png)
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This reminds me of another story a lot. A story about a human and you twilight. The same writing, In a cell, hoof language. Did you base it off of it?
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Max is a gay peace-loving hippie :p