A trio of soft knocks drew Twilight Sparkle's attention from her book. She left her studies and answered the door. Rainbow Dash stood outside, wearing a soft smile.
"What's up, bookworm?"
"Oh, hello Rainbow Dash. I'm just studying."
"Still? You've had your nose in a book for weeks!"
"I'm trying to figure out what's up with Fluttershy. Her wounds don't seem to be healing, but they're not festering, either. Her injuries just stay the same. It's weird."
"Yeah, that left wing is a mess. Did you find anything?"
"No. None of my medical textbooks cover this. It doesn't make any sense!"
"You need a break. Forget about Fluttershy for a while."
"But—“
"Come on! I want you to watch the sunset with me!"
Twilight eyed her friend strangely. "That doesn't seem like you."
Rainbow Dash blushed. "What? I'm a pegasus pony. I'm allowed to think the sky is pretty!"
"Well, it has been pretty lonely here since Spike passed away. It would be good for me to get out for a while."
"That's the spirit! Race you to the top of the big hill!"
"Race?"
"Onetwothreego!"
Rainbow Dash took off in a blur, leaving her friend behind. Twilight closed up the library, then ran after Rainbow Dash. She quickly became winded, but put forth her best effort at keeping Rainbow Dash in sight.
"Rainbow, slow down!"
"No! You run faster!"
Twilight kept her eyes on the blue pegasus and did her best to catch up. Rainbow Dash led her through the outskirts of Ponyville, and then out of town. As the two ponies started up a tall hill, Rainbow Dash sped up and vanished. Twilight Sparkle reached the top of the hill alone and stood, panting.
Suddenly, Rainbow Dash took Twilight to the ground with a flying tackle from behind. She rolled in the grass with Twilight held snugly in her forelegs, giggling like a filly.
"You got here first! You beat me, Twilight!"
Twilight laughed. "Did you let me win?"
Rainbow Dash sat up and feigned indignation. "Me, throw a race? Never! You won fair and square.”
Twilight sat up as well and hugged Rainbow Dash. The two ponies leaned on each other and stared at the sky. The brilliant blue had already begun to pinken. The sky shifted through a dozen shades of red-gold before fading into a deep indigo.
Countless stars dotted the night sky. Twilight searched for constellations with a smile spanning her face. For the moment, all of her troubles were forgotten. There was nothing in the world except for the night sky, and the two mares relaxing beneath it.
Twilight nuzzled Rainbow Dash’s neck and whispered, "You're my best friend, Rainbow."
"Just a friend?"
Twilight gave Rainbow a strange look, and opened her mouth to speak. Before she could say a word, Rainbow Dash planted a forceful kiss on Twilight's lips. Once the initial shock wore off, Twilight leaned in to the kiss and surrendered herself to Rainbow Dash. Time stood still. It seemed that nary a second had passed once the kiss ended.
"Dash, I had no idea!"
"I love you, Twilight Sparkle."
"I-I love you too, Rainbow Dash!"
So many lesbians!
jesus christ can we at least let the FUCKING ROMANTIC LESBIAN RELATIONSHIPS DEVELOP A LITTLE BIT FIRST?!
I like this story, I do! Hell, I don't even care if there's female and female shipping present in the story, but to have them thrown out the door just for the sake of being there for other, more important parts of the story doesn't really work. Also, i think twilight recovered a little TOO quickly from Spike's death. If one of my friends who's been there for me to help out around my house for a large part of my life was flattened by a burning tree, I wouldn't mope around for a day and then just say "Well shit............Aw, who cares! Guess it's time to study for pretty much nothing!"
Other than that, i'm loving this. It's a good premise! It's also dark enough to be intensely epic. Just try not to rush through the slow sections to get to the juicy parts. Not doing that would make this story even better!
3779087 I think my biggest sin is that I'm not entirely clear on the passage of time. There are gaps between (most) of the sessions, but I'm not sure how to directly address that without getting too hokey and expositional.
Spike dies in session 05. Session 06, his funeral, takes place five days later. Session 07 takes place three weeks after session 06. I tried to hint at this ("You've had your nose in a book for weeks!") without making a blatant information dump. I also imagine Twilight is the kind of pony who'd use reading as a coping mechanism; something to keep her mind occupied. As shown in session 12 (a full two months after session 07), Twilight still isn't over Spike's death. It doesn't always show, but it's always there.
I am definitely guilty of rushing through the slow sections, though, and have nothing to say in my own defense there. I didn't even touch the 5 days between sessions 05 and 06 in which the aftermath of the fire was cleaned up, houses were repaired, Spike and Fluttershy were found, Fluttershy was hospitalized, and preparations for Spike's funeral were made. Later sessions even have years in between them. I didn't feel like I needed to depict every moment, but in retrospect it definitely does look like I'm sprinting from plot point to plot point.
I'm glad you're enjoying the story despite its flaws, though! Thank you for the feedback!
ummm? romance seems a little rushed...and rainbow just kissed twilight not even a month after spike died and twilight accepted.
so what? spike just dies, then later that day you kiss RD?
wook dee fook