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Muy bien, keep up da good work
Really good chapter! Hope to see more soon!
4063026 I don't know, do you see a sex tag next to the teen tag? your question is self answering...
I don't see if there is anything wrong with the chapter. I mean the only thing that is confusing is the cliffhanger from last chapter then it suddenly shifts to the train ride home. Other than that, maybe the pace of acceptance Dominic is portraying on the romance front. But that might be explained in more detail later especially since he's about to fall asleep.....
Thanks for the fast update!
~8chill
Rainbow during the day and Luna during the night..... Poor Guy... :^)
Loved the chapter
Loved it. Keep up the good work!
I agree with what 8chill said, all in all a good chapter. Still annoyed about the overuse of stuttering though.
oh and one last thing
sugar is spelt with an a
4063195 Last chapter wasn't a cliffhanger, I was just too lazy to write out everything that happened in his dream that night. I would basically have to rewrite everything again but this time only from Dominic's perspective, that's why the chapter ended like that.
4065634 My bad on that. I am more of a romance writer, and having Dominic constantly being 'forced' to show affection just wasn't what I had originally planned for the story. I hadn't exactly figured that part out, so what I wrote just came to me. As for the stuttering, I will keep that out of any further chapters. (I don't stutter, but I do need to stop and reword my entire sentences when I speak. Spend more time typing than actually talking nowadays)
4062739 ... I can understand that, and even can respect that sense for the story that you were and are playing for, and it does add some sense of difference and divergence from the standard story line. HOWEVER, that generally doesn't mean that most people, even if they were all stuck in that sort of position, would let themselves become an almost-literal doormat to be trodden over. I also understand the lack of thought for readers looking for full realism; and even if I do seem it, I'm not trying to be - I just honestly do think that any self-respecting, prideful human being would not really proceed to up-chuck everything that made them who they are/were in an event like this.
Heck, with him now dating Dashie-boo (lol), you might want to have him work with Twilight for something that he could use to allow him to spend time with her up in the sky - maybe either something as small as a wing-suit and a self-sustained, auto-refueling engine system (like a series of smaller turbo-jet engines that provide enough power to let him fly semi-normally in the air, either gaining or lowering altitude and having the power to sustain level flight), all the way to something reminiscent of making a smaller, V/STOL / VTOL aircraft that can be modified with magic to allow it to land on clouds when he wants it to, yet interact with them normally (from a Terran-born/Earthborn standpoint) when not desired for their solidity. Hell, you could go so far as to have him work with Twilight on creating Equestria's first commercial aircraft, which would reduce some-of-to-most-of their dependence on lighter-than-aircraft like the zeppelins already confirmed to be in the show. You could also go so far as to let him have a tilt-rotor craft for his own use that he obtained through useful application of Plotinium, per chance being something anywhere from the modern CV-22 Osprey or direct equivalent.