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Well, funny you should say that . . .

wow, just discovered this moments before you updated.
lol, twilight having chronic wet dreams that are developing a mind of their own...... persuming the gory stuff is still within the realms of her dreams, as whatever is causing this strange string of erotic narratives of the mind to continue grows...... worse maybe. also opens a lot of weird and or sexy scenarios to happen too.
clop with a narrative.. interesting.

actaully this reminds me of a narrative i was working with some time ago. it had pinkie pie beginning to have nightmares of her basically acting out pinkie pie slashfics. the grow icnreasingly more and more horrific to the point that she becomes convinced she will kill someone. she eventaully tries to kill herself, unwilling to let anyone harm her friends, hrself especially.

either way, very interested in how things progress. and figuring out why she is having strange, random wet dreams.

also like how you described luna's dream walking powers. while incapable of just knowing all the dreams, but able to sense the emotions of the dreamer. pretty how i understood it from that episode. like it.

I know the Romance tag isn't there, but I'm still pulling for a Twiluna

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There are Reasons! that have been worked out. I'm not sure how long this thing's gonna be, but I'm hoping to reveal most of the Big Reasons later in the game.

I'm glad you like it!

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Another excellent chapter! (Though I am disappointed twilight chose to end the dream)

I'm aiming this towards a Spilight.
She moves him out the room and now she's having sexual dreams/nightmares because of it. That and her body probably wants Spike, her mind is in denial to the idea, and her subconscious is like, "Fine! You keep cock blocking yourself, but I'm going to have everyone else you know fuck you in your sleep! Whether you like it or not."

Good and interesting story. Keep it up!

3548947 nifty............

i gotta wonder how her friends would react if theyfound out she almost had a dream of them gangraping her...... noticed that you have also ensured that nothing lasted long enough for anything to happen.

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That won't always be the case. First chapter, my intent was to demonstrate a wide range of kinks were involved and lay out the premise. Second chapter, I needed to finish up with some heavy lifting for the story. Third chapter and onwards, I'm looking at a slower trickle of information about the outside circumstances and more information about Twilight's psyche and sexuality (i.e., more dream exploration).

Hopefully it won't disappoint!

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The NMM dream will eventually happen, but it would have destroyed a lot of tension to do it too early. Don't worry; I've got plenty of plans for awful things along the way.

3549236 when do you think the enxt chapter will materlize itself?

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This was a hard chapter, so hopefully less than a month for chapter three!

I like the premise here, but I feel the story would benefit if the chapters were longer. More breathing room and all that.

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It's a bit of an experiment, so they might get longer from time to time, but mostly I'm just trying to end them when it feels organic to the story.

“ Realization seeped in.

This Quotation mark is in the wrong place.

“ Panic squealed through Twilight’s mind, and her body in the dream responded in kind with little twitches, but her hooves were still held fast.

This quotation mark is in the wrong place.

“However, it might be better than seeing what you think Nightmare Moon is capable of.”

“Luna, please stop the dream. If it comes up again, well, we can let it continue then.”

You raised my hopes then dashed them quite expertly, bravo.

Pinkie’s leg launched across Twilight’s vision only to embed in a wall moments before it too came crumbling down and the entire thing collapsed not down but inward, inward towards the Twilight --

I think this may be a misplaced "the."

I cannot think of anything else to say about this except that I am eagerly awaiting the next chapter. Also, I feel I may be using a lot of Twilight ahegao in chapters to... come. KBO.

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Those quotation marks are actually because of a quirk of mine interacting with GDocs. See, I hate ellipses with a space after. Hate hate hate hates them forevers. This:

"Wait... is that where we're going?" She blinked a few times.

makes me want to stab puppies with knives made of frozen dead baby. I know it's The New Thing, and I know it's for the sake of formatting on the web, etc. etc. etc., but it makes me want to kill kill kill.

So instead I do this:

"Wait . . . is that where we're going?" She blinked a few times.

because the even spacing mollifies my mind and balances it visually for me. I can't handle space-after, but even-spacing, okay, sure.

GDocs, though, thinks it should be replacing quotation marks with ending and beginning quotation marks. So it does, and it doesn't register that ' . . . ' is an ellipsis as far as I am concerned.

I fixed them by copying ending quotations from other sentences. That's as far as that's going to change.

I did strip out the "the", as well. Thank you.

And I'm glad you're liking it so far! I'm definitely planning orgasms to come, hopefully at least one in the next chapter.

One more thing:

At least now I couldn’t possibly end up having a dream about anyone more embarrassing, considering that Luna’s likely to see it all.

With Twilight's idiolect, "anyone" would be "anypony."

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Wait... You don't capitalize after ellipses? I treat them like periods that trail off.

Also, last night I had a very messed up dream about Hitler doing shit to me. Kind of like this, actually, so it was fitting that I read this right when I woke up.

WTF? Hitler???

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From Wikipedia (emphasis added):

When placed at the beginning or end of a sentence, the ellipsis can also inspire a feeling of melancholy or longing. The ellipsis calls for a slight pause in speech or any form of text, and can be used to suggest a tense or awkward momentary silence.

The most common form of an ellipsis is a row of three periods or full stops (. . .) or a precomposed triple-dot glyph (…). The usage of the em dash (—) can overlap the usage of the ellipsis. The Chicago Manual of Style recommends that an ellipsis be formed by typing three periods, each with a space on both sides.

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Yes but Hitler

I enjoy the premise so far, and I can't wait to see more. Keep it up .

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Glad you like it! Hopefully the next chapter won't take as long for me.

I love it so far. how many chapters are there going to be can't wait for completion.

i like it so far, more soon please!!!