They say that any civilization is build on the corpses of others. Is Equestria and it's neighbors any different? Did they have to trot upon others to get where they are?
Yes, someone else writing warhammer fantasy. I'm somewhat concerned with the spelling here, there's a lot of grammatical errors too. You clearly haven't proof read your writing which is a shame. Beyond that I don't have much to say, i'll form a better opinion once there's more content but in the mean time i'd suggest editing this chapter since I found it very jarring.
I am a big fan of the idea of other reptilian races than dragons on Equis, but adding Warhammer Fantasy to MLP tends towards grim-darkness very quickly.
But, I used to have a Lizardman army, so I gotta follow it for that reason alone!
Lizardmen? YES! I'm not really big on warhammer fantasy, but the lizardmen are my favorite race. {It's also nice to see more warhammer fantasy crossover fics here.}
Hopefully, this won't become grim-dark {like it's 40k equivalent}. Actiony, possibly, but not grimdark. I'd probably prefer exploring the lizardmen's backstory and culture and how they interact with ponies and the other races. It's a good place to do some world building.
Overall, it's a very good start. {Though the intro paragraphs could use a little work.}
Well this was received far better then I had thought ! From now on I am going to go over my chapter furiously to make sure they are nearly perfect for you guys. Also on another note if any of you can think of a better name fore the story please let me know .
Hmmm... I was trying to read this and I liked the idea of lizardmen, but there is an absolutely STAGGERING amount of spelling and grammatical errors in this fic. You really ought to get a proofreader/editor to help you with that.
Liked for Lizardmen!
Yes, someone else writing warhammer fantasy. I'm somewhat concerned with the spelling here, there's a lot of grammatical errors too. You clearly haven't proof read your writing which is a shame. Beyond that I don't have much to say, i'll form a better opinion once there's more content but in the mean time i'd suggest editing this chapter since I found it very jarring.
Somewhat curious to see where this will go.
I am a big fan of the idea of other reptilian races than dragons on Equis, but adding Warhammer Fantasy to MLP tends towards grim-darkness very quickly.
But, I used to have a Lizardman army, so I gotta follow it for that reason alone!
Lizardmen? YES! I'm not really big on warhammer fantasy, but the lizardmen are my favorite race. {It's also nice to see more warhammer fantasy crossover fics here.}
Hopefully, this won't become grim-dark {like it's 40k equivalent}. Actiony, possibly, but not grimdark. I'd probably prefer exploring the lizardmen's backstory and culture and how they interact with ponies and the other races. It's a good place to do some world building.
Overall, it's a very good start. {Though the intro paragraphs could use a little work.}
Keep it up.
Well this was received far better then I had thought !
From now on I am going to go over my chapter furiously to make sure they are nearly perfect for you guys.
Also on another note if any of you can think of a better name fore the story please let me know .
Hmmm... I was trying to read this and I liked the idea of lizardmen, but there is an absolutely STAGGERING amount of spelling and grammatical errors in this fic. You really ought to get a proofreader/editor to help you with that.
Update
Ya the title made think it was a soul caliber crossover. lol
LE GASP
Is that.........?