Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon mess around with Snips and Snails after an afternoon of drinking—but only after the boys have showed off with each other for a bit first. It's not gay if there are girls there... right?
So far, the characterization is a bit lacking. I don't care if they're older, Diamond Tiara's way too kind, and the thought of her being drunk only makes me believe she'd be that much more of a complete bitch, especially if she's a teen.
Silver Spoon pauses a lot. I mean, a lot. The elipses in her quotes are just too much. A few times, I felt like I was reading this in Fluttershy's voice, but for what it's worth, I'm liking the overall story so far. I'll read on, and collect my thoughts for the next chapter as I read.
From Twist,...... When I Saw Dis I Made My Soda Come Out Of My Nose.THAT IS NOT SUPPOSED TO EXIT OUT OF MY NOSEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE.
Out of the entire chapter, the thing that caught my attention the most was Diamond Tiara's attitude toward using sex to get things from her father. I found that... disturbingly arousing. It felt the most interesting aspect so far, even more so than the coming boning. She seems willing, almost eager when it comes to sexing up her dad. Is there going to be a side story in the regard?
Snails nodded and followed without objection, giving a dull wave in Silver Spoon’s direction. She returned it with a bit of blush and a small smile. That was adorable as fuck.
Oh diamond, you are the perfect bitch. Liquor cabinet keys...
hue
Chapter 1:
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So far, the characterization is a bit lacking. I don't care if they're older, Diamond Tiara's way too kind, and the thought of her being drunk only makes me believe she'd be that much more of a complete bitch, especially if she's a teen.
Silver Spoon pauses a lot. I mean, a lot. The elipses in her quotes are just too much. A few times, I felt like I was reading this in Fluttershy's voice, but for what it's worth, I'm liking the overall story so far. I'll read on, and collect my thoughts for the next chapter as I read.
Yeah, you lost me at the big-screen tv
I realized I never actually left a comment on each chapter as I normally do...
Time to fix that.
Ok, so far, nice build up.
~Skeeter The Lurker
Tiara and Spoon used nasty plot!
Evil thoughts come closer...
A fun start.
3183525 Whatchu talking about, that was one of the best parts.
From Twist,...... When I Saw Dis I Made My Soda Come Out Of My Nose.THAT IS NOT SUPPOSED TO EXIT OUT OF MY NOSEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE.
Out of the entire chapter, the thing that caught my attention the most was Diamond Tiara's attitude toward using sex to get things from her father. I found that... disturbingly arousing. It felt the most interesting aspect so far, even more so than the coming boning. She seems willing, almost eager when it comes to sexing up her dad. Is there going to be a side story in the regard?
3239837 I know! Right?
3256252 coming from someone who's name is daddy's girl, that is ironic
When I read twist's comment... my nose blew soda.... not good, fuzzy nostrils
Snails nodded and followed without objection, giving a dull wave in Silver Spoon’s direction. She returned it with a bit of blush and a small smile.
That was adorable as fuck.