Throughout my life, I was never happy and always felt lost. But last summer, I had the wonderful opportunity to be happy for once. I had the wonderful opportunity to have people-or ponies who care about me. I had the opportunity to live in Equestria
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Whew! Just got done reading your story so far.
And now...
My opinion on this story
Duuun duuun duuuuuuuuun *add dramatic music*
Nah! Dont worry.
Im a nice person Most of the time
This story had a very rocky start. However! I stuck with it.
Once it got to the later chapters I started to like it more and more.
I like how you added Blaze and Spark. They add a certain charm to this story
Most HiE fics focus on one person/pony. I like the fact that you have other humans for our main character White Flash to relate to. And now that you revealed why Celestia brought them here, everything is falling into place. I also liked the fact that you included some intimate moments. Like with Flash and Dash. I also like the fact that you did not go overboard with writing multiple intimate moments in detail. Because of this, they have more of an impact when they do happen.
The biggest plus ( and this is the main reason im sticking with this till the end )
White Flash is now dealing with the consequences of having sex with RD wich she is now
is pregnant with his foal
know hes happy about it. And its nice to see this.
reason? Because it gives the story a more realistic feel.
In my humble opinion.
And now... the other side of my review ( sweep this under the rug lol )
The only thing thatis bugging me is that Rainbow Dash seems a little bit out of character.
Hold on though... please do not be upset because if you read it again I said 'a little bit'
It was mostly in the beginning of the story and you have been getting better and better as the chapters progressed.
I the reader understand that this is your story and that you will write it as you see fit.
and leaving on a positive note. I enjoyed reading this. Thank you for sharing this with us.
Overall. This is a good story and I encourage you to keep writing
Dude what's taking so long on the next chapter?
Are you stopping the series? I stumbled onto this story when it only had like 7 chapters and ive been hooked ever since. Itd be a real shame.