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I'm no gonna lie, I like it, a lot. but you need an editor and pronto.
*Seeing characters tags*
I can understand Cherilee but Mrs.Cake?
i could proofread it for you. just PM me your e-mail or something so i can send it to you when i'm done.
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*spoiler alert*
The mrs cake tag is there becouse she will come in later
about three chapters from now
3382626 Three FUCKING chapters?! How long do you plan to keep this going?!
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have up to chapter 14 in mind as of now
will see if I can add more
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I belive he did...
Well...
Getting help now with it so hopefully, the story will be more fun to read in the future
I'm definitely going to hell for reading this... meh, who cares.
This story needs a serious run-through for spelling & grammar errors. There's at least one or two in every sentence. Your verb tense constantly changes, there are spelling errors everywhere that should have been caught by any spell check, including the chapter title which is a very bad indicator.
As it is right now, it's practically unreadable because all the time I'm forced out of the story in order to figure out what you meant to write instead of what is written. At the very least you should put this through a word processor and do a basic spelling & grammar check to fix the most glaring mistakes.
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Please fix the spelling and grammar mistakes. It takes away from the entire thing.
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Yes english is not my first language and know of the error and gramar mistakes
trying to find an editor or two
talked to Xunsusp3cted anomalyX, send him a chapter to edit, but have been some time now
have some chapters in wait but will not post them until some had have someone take a look at them so that it will not be an error nightmare for you readers to experiance
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Trying but it is taking it's sweet time
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Have someone from Canada helping me now
I loved it all I hope all the main six ,Zecora,and both Princesses join to.I can't wait to see what happens next.
Note-to-self:
Fuck Ponyville! Never visit anytime near estrus......
None of them reacted in the slightest to him saying he didn't know he was herding either?
Or the fact that he was essentially raped?
I'm surprised Applejack's not getting fucked herself.
That's what we're been waiting for
How many times has he came today? He should be empty by now.
So he and a child, or four, fucked, and he gets a pat on the back? Okay.
3383009 Um Just a comment on the picture and its this
Watching Paint Dry, Its some Crazy Shit Man
After this chapter, I'm not sure I'm comfortable with the fact that he just got gang raped by 4 ponies that are the equivalent of 10 year olds, and the worst part is that hes OK with this or that hes just letting them use him like that. If I was in his position then the second I got free, I would have dropped kicked all of them from that tree house to canterlot. And I think that's what any sane person would have done because you don't just walk away from something like that as if nothing happened.
I looked past the spelling and grammar mistakes because I know English isn't your first language. And even then your writing stile is really good, but the story like just took a nose dive into the dirt for me in this chapter.
just want to say how the hell is this niggas dick not rubbed raw after hours on end of fucking and then working on the cmc? and im pretty sure that he would be shooting blanks after a while even if he could keep getting hard again and again for hours? (how is he not died form dehydration? and why did he just go with being raped by 4 kids )