Earlier (as in before it was deleted ) I posted that I was starting a story and was requesting editorial help. While I did find an editor, I am now looking for some quick help with somebody to read over a sectiona and answer a relatively simple question. I am really only looking for one person, so I would appreciate a volunteer.

Edit: does anyone know of a free and easy online phito editor? I want to take the cover art for the story that im going to use and edit it to look black and white/ acid burned.

HEY, HEY, I WANT TO READ AND
ANSWER QUESTIONS!

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okay, ill send a PM. Does anybody else want to look, I'd like 2 opinions.

1459497 I like to answer a question of yours.

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alrighty bro

I guess I am a little late to offer my help? Still, good luck with your story knives!

1460229ill call if i need ya. ;)

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Dance if you got what you need I will be locking this thread by 8:30 CDT, and then deleted by 10.

1502930im just using this to ask for help so i dont have to keep making new threads. As you can see, i just changed the name according to whT i need.

Ill get tid of it as soon as im done with the story, which should be soon.... (As soon as washingtonian gets back to editing)

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Alright I'll let it stay, but it will become a general help thread for everyone to use.
Oh and if you are still looking, GIMP is pretty much Photoshop but free and InfraVeiw is one I've used.

1503003 oka doke.

Ps, do i have to download anything or is it like a website?

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You will have to down load them, look them up and see what you need. GIMP might be overkill for most

Alright everyone I have decided that this thread is now for general help on fics that you are writing. Same rules apply as is it does for the rest of the forum, keep the language to a minimum, and the fic should be one that could be added to this group.

1503156 wait.... There was restrictions on language?

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Hard to say since the rules are more or less unwritten but keeping profanity to a minimum is always a good idea.

1503347 oh, i thought that meant you wanted us to keep the threads in only a few languages, like we couldent use German, or Cantoneese, or Mandarian, or french, or Tacobell, or Martian, or Scandanavian, or Jeff goldbloom.

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No we have to use Latin and Esperanto

1503408 fuck that!
Ill keep the rest of my forms, like all of the others, in straight Thug.
(I couldent even type that in a straight face).

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Un uh... you have to speak Jive... Concordia in heaven I can't keep a straight face

1503485 did you just call me a jive turkey!

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Ok, ok lets stop before we die laughing. Now is there any more help you need?

1503558 just that ill mention i used an app on my phone to edit the fx and will upload it to DA and then ask people for feedback.

P.S. i hope you know Semipro was filmed ON LOCATION in Flint, Michigan.

1459451 Paint.NET works very nicely for me, it is easy and light. Oh and it has many user made tools too.

1503683 ill like to show everyone what i did tomorrow. Thanks anyway.

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what do you guys think of this Vs. its original version. I have more directions and questions in the DA description.

I promise this isn't a link to a porn sight.

1509019 It looks nice.

1509019 I think the effects look good in general, but since the original uses color to separate objects, now they blur with each other a bit. Maybe you could delineate the parts where characters and things touch, it would look a bit better?

1509019 I like it, I really do, but I didn't even know there was an original.

1459457>>1509720>>1509048>>1503558 I need another editor, Washingtonian went dark on me and ill be done by tonight, so I'd like someone to work on it. Password should be the same.

Okay, this is a question that has been going on in my head for sometime. If any of you have been following me, I've been posting chapters of the Incredible Flutterhulk recently. This is not because I have hit a writer's block on Princess Celestia's story. I know exactly where I want to go with it and what I want to do.

Now, here's the problem. If any of you know the lore of Dr. Steven Strange (which is the character the story is loosely based off) than you know he was an arrogant, selfish jerk who eventually learns that his ways were wrong and that he needs to change to better both the lives of and his own.

Celestia's story is going to mirror that story, in which she becomes selfish, but eventually grows into the caring pony we know and love.

So, here's my big concern. What is going too far? There are some scenes where she will be a down-right mean and cruel. Nothing like Molestia.

But more Trollestia the way most fans portray her. She would think herself above those her serve under her and that her title of princess allows her to do whatever she wants without getting in trouble. Which of course would get her in trouble and force her on a journey of redemption.

Again, the big question on my mind is; how far should I go? How far should I go to show her being a mean pony? My thing with why I think I should go as far as this is because, the greater the climb, the greater the glory.

In other words, the farther she has the go to change her ways, the more we cheer for her when she finally succeeds.

What are your thoughts on that? I would really like to hear your voice. As fans of Celestia, you guys would know what's going too far and what is being respectable to the character.

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It's a hard line to draw. My question would be what time-frame you're putting this in. You have more artistic liberty with the character the farther back you take her.

If you're drawing a parallel with Dr. Strange, you'll want to focus on all things selfish. Because she's a ruler (presumably, depending on how far back you go) this could manifest itself as either starting a selfish war and getting ponies killed, burdening the ponies with taxes, tribalism/racism, etc.

Dr. Strange was never evil, he was just completely self-centered, ignorant, and arrogant. Though, to be fair, he remained somewhat self-centered, ignorant, and arrogant even after becoming the Sorcerer Supreme; that's a big part of the fun with his character.

Things to consider.

Cheers,

-Comrade.

1594042 The timeframe would be before she becomes Sorcerer Supreme, before she can become queen of Canterlot. In the story, the queen, Celestia's mother, is aging and dying. (Alicorns don't have extended lives in this universe, but there are ways to break that rule).

She needs to find a new ruler to take her place. Luna was sent away, but she has been out of contact for months. Fearing that Luna is gone forever, the queen is forced to hope that Celestia can be a proper heir to the throne.

However, because her mother sent Luna away, Celestia has built an intense anger towards her mother. Which has spilled out to encompass her servants and subjects as well. She mistreats them by belittling them, openly insulting them, and stating that she cares nothing for their problems.

In the story she is asked to help a village child with an illness, but she openly states that it is not her problem, believing that they do nothing for her, and why should she do something for them.

Her mother is forced to cast her out when Celestia's actions start to cause disorder within the kingdom.

I hope that explains a little bit more of what I'm thinking. Based on what I've heard, I think I'll be okay. Let me know what you guys think.

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... you are asking a tough question Spidey. I think one of the big things is that she is never malicious in her actions, or purposely going out of her way to make ponies' live miserable

1595348 I know. And that's the thing that worries me. I want to develop her, but I'm just not sure what is going too far.

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So... I got this alert of someone making a "Celestia is Comstock?" thread, likely in effort to sway people to view Her Sun-Shiny Majesty as a tyrant, and I was curious to view it... only to see it deleted.

... Did I call it right in this post?

1691050 nah, some chick member was talking to john about Bioshock and she saw that there was a few simmilairities in the name, like it started with a C, was 8 letters long, Etc.

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Ah... well, that was pointless.

1503156 Well, this is more of an idea that I came up with rather than a story I'm currently writing, so I hope that counts. But I have a feeling that once this quandary is answered, it'll work.

The story is a sequel to my previous work, Deserts and Dragons. But instead of the CMC and Braeburn, the focus is going to be on Celestia. Without going into spoiler territory, the basic plot I have in mind is that Celestia takes a trip to Appleloosa in order to establish diplomatic relations with the dragons that live there (remember, the buffalo have a great respect for dragons). The guards escorting her are not too keen on the idea, so she ends up ditching them and follows a ragtag group of bandits who claim to know a group of dragons who might be open to diplomacy. Oh, and then the guards panic and go out looking for her while Philomena tries to keep them from interfering.

I feel that the setup is alright until that last part. It's not so much Celestia ditching the guards I have a problem with (she'd leave a note and all that), but the fact that she thinks they're too preoccupied with protecting their beloved princess to understand why she's going on this quest. I dunno, I think Celestia would have more respect for their intelligence and rationality. So, here's my question: Is the idea good as it stands, or do I need to tweak it?

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1862690 Yeah, I figured. Celestia wouldn't see her guards as a liability like that. But as far as tweaking goes, I could use some ideas.

See, this is supposed to be a comedic adventure, similar to the prequel Deserts and Dragons. But without the guards falling over each other while Celestia holds her own, the story is pretty much played straight. I'm not sure how I would go about making this funny.

Sorry to be a bother but... does anyone know how to describe Ceelstia;s chariot?

I mean look at that thing! It's cool, but not easy.

Here's what I have so far.
"It was the traditional royal carriage, there was no roof or even walls to speak of, the outside coat of paint was an interlay of gold and white, with sun, moon and star decorations flowing up around the edges of the royal purple throne. Celestia's own carriage possessed an intricate golden frame work with a royal purple carpet and cushioning that flowed into creating a resplendent curved throne for the princess, topped off with a golden diamond and a complicated..."

Sorry again.

1985068 Question: Why do you need to go into so much detail about the sky chariot? Unless the protagonist is seeing one for the first time (and I can't really imagine how that would be possible), there's really no need for it. Just say it's a sky chariot. Trust me, we'll know what you're talking about.

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I suppose, it's mostly that there's a few different chariots and I really wanted to specify that it was this chariot. Mostly because it was the first one I picked. Still you are probably right, TY for the advice.

Well, I came up with another crazy idea, but seeing as the portrayal of Celestia is going to make or break this story, I'm gonna need an opinion on this.

The concept is simple: Lyra makes a deal with Discord and gets sent to the Equestria Girls universe. However, she doesn't change shape when she gets there, and yet everyone thinks she's human. So the hall monitor takes her to Ms. Cheerilee, who takes her to Nurse Redheart, who takes her to Vice Principal Luna, who takes her to Principal Celestia. And they all basically say the same thing: She's not a pony; she's a silly girl with back problems and a large pimple on her head (cookie for everyone who gets the reference, by the way ).

Now, I don't think Celestia, Principal or Princess, is stupid. For that matter, I don't think Ms. Cheerilee, Nurse Redheart, or Vice Principal/Princess Luna are stupid. But the story doesn't work unless they all dub Lyra to not be a pony for some reason. So, is there any way this could work without doing a disservice to these characters (especially Celestia)?

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Well it can interipted that the elder women are passing Lyra up the chain since let's be honest what would you do when faced with a unicorn that everyone else thinks is a human. They don't want the students to freak out so it would be best to hide the truth.

2013222 Hmm. That could work. Although I might want to have Lyra go through some folks who are lower on the totem pole before going through Ms. Cheerilee, Vice Principle Luna, etc. The joke really works better the more people think Lyra's human when she clearly isn't.

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By the way, since this is a thread for general help, I'm going to recommend a group for everyone. Its called Editors R Us and it has a long list of dedicated people who you can find and ask for help in proofing and editing. Id recommend them over looking for editors because there is no guarantee that they'll be any good or if you'll get an answer, and the Proofreader group is so ass backwards with its retarded rules and, like the editor group, theres no guarantee that the person you get is any good.

Anyone interested in helping me with a part of a fic where theres a big part where celestia and discord are talking to each other?

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Don't tell me that you too are shipping Dislestia?