Review #27 - The Universal, A Unforeseen Fate, A call for Agent Gummy · 8:38pm Dec 27th, 2016
And another three stories today:
The Universal by Grimm
A Unforeseen Fate by Saberking2012
A call for Agent Gummy by Krushan
The Universal by Grimm
(Sad, Tragedy)
Celestia remembers. There is nothing else left for her to do.
Review
Twilight dies, and Celestia is depressed. She starts remembering the universe from the "beginning" and eventually she and Luna watch it die.
This one can feel a little bit shorter than it should be, but it is otherwise paced beautifully. It has very few errors within the text, which really add to the experience. It also seems very planned out, but still with the absolute tiniest bit of filler.. The tags fit quite nicely too.
Score: 9.5/10 Recommendation: Very Highly Recommended.
Personal Thoughts: Man that is a good story, GO AND READ IT NOW! 
. Also, sorry for that wimpy outline, this story is not an easy one to do.
A Unforeseen Fate by Saberking2012
(Alternate Universe, Sad)
It's been three days since Twilight's fight with Tirek. Now after some unforeseen circumstances, Twilight realizes what her actions could have cost.
Review
Twilight wakes up in a hospital after three days of being unconscious. Spike brings her a gift and makes her promise not to bite more off than she can chew.
This one feels too short for what it should be, but also too long for what it is. It has a couple errors within the text, mostly in the form of past/ present tense. It feels planned out enough to be a story, but not quite to the point of a good story. The tags are good, though.
Score: 6/10 Recommendation: Not Recommended/ Intermediate.
Personal Thoughts: That description is very misleading.
A call for Agent Gummy by Krushan
(Adventure, Random)
Gummy looks like a normal alligator, but really he is a chimera which can change its look and abilities with his Chimera cores. Oh, and he is an agent in an organization called Nocturnal Security Association (NSA). One day, when he wanted to finish a cake for Pinkie, his headquarter calls him for a top secret mission. What will it be...
Review
Gummy gets called into work, where he meets another pony that also gets told to meet with the commander. The commander is not really the commander, so they attack. Once the commander is beaten, Luna appears and tells them it was a test.
This one is actually fairly well paced, which is surprising due to word count and content. It has few errors within the text, which is nice. It also seems rather planned out too, and even sets up for a sequel perfectly. The tags work out alright as well.
Score: 9/10 Recommendation: Worth Reading if a sequel comes, otherwise Intermediate.
Personal Thoughts: This would be such a good story if it had a sequel with the actual mission instead of setup for the possibility of one.
A)Thanks for the notice. B)yea... I agree with the score here. Sorry about that. It was at the moment so... anyway, sorry about that.