Long description for the sequel, voting. · 8:09pm Mar 6th, 2016
Just as the title says, I need your help with choising long description for the sequel to "Nightmare's Tiny Adversary".
So far my editors voted together for this short description:
Twilight has been a tiny, hard-working student for many years, willingly deciding to stay bite size after discovering a love for the adventures and challenges that came with it. Now it is time to start a new chapter of her life in Ponyville.
However, votes for long description are split into two, so I would like to ask you to break that tie.
Long description -
Twilight Sparkle is a one-kilogram pony, shrunken by Princess Celestia following her entrance exam to the Celestia’s School for Gifted Unicorns to ensure that her power surges would not pose a danger to the ponies around her.
She’s spent thirteen years full of hard training at her new size, facing the life-threatening experiences that came with living in a world of giants. To survive those thirteen years of hardship and joy, of learning and adventure, and of pride and humility, Twilight has challenged herself to become stronger, to overcome any obstacle.
This part I copied from "Nightmare's Tiny Adversary" since it explain Twilight's situation well.
//sentence version 1
After defeating Nightmare Moon with the help of her friends and the princesses, Twilight is ready to start a new chapter of her life in Ponyville. What kind of secrets and surprises await the little but powerful unicorn? Will this eventful town manage to handle such an unpredictable citizen.
//sentence version 4
After the defeat of Nightmare Moon, she is ready to start an independent life in Ponyville, learn more about her new friends and study earth pony magic. What kind of secrets and adventures await Twiny in such eventful town, and how differently the events will play with her staying at such size while maintaining her energetic spirit.
Please vote which sentence should be ending long description for the sequel where Twilight will stay in Ponyville by upvoting or downvoting comment. Also, suggestions with small changes or your own ideas are welcome.
Also, a small announcment. After searching for new proof-readers for "Ponyville's Tiny Librairan" since my top editor didn't have time to work on it as much as he used too, I think I found enough help to finally upload this story after over half a year of keeping you waiting. The quality will drop a bit I am afraid, but I hope that the story itself will make up for it.
If you like version 1 to be part of long description, upvote this comment. If you like version 4 to be part of long description, downvote this comment.
Adding your own ideas and voting for ideas of others with upvotes/downvotes is allowed.
Will you be finishing Nightmare's Tiny Adversary soon?
there will always be help from the readers once its posted so you shouldnt really worry all that much if the quality of the stories grammar is not as high as normal the readers will point out any mistakes that can be fixed but im sure your already well aware of that fact
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Yes. Epilogue part 3 and half of chapter 1 was edited by my top editor, but after that there will be small drop of quality.
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It is not as much as grammar as it is flow and correct use of words. My arsenal of words is limited as I am not a native English speaker. My top editor often rewrote what I wrote to improve it, adding words I didn't even think of using. Also, his specialization was writting Steel Blade and Overwatch. There will be a small drop of their apperances as well. ( They will still be there, just have less apperances unless Kydois will find time to write them).