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  • 162 weeks
    Sweetolebob18 injury

    Sweetolebob18 was a top proof-reader of Tails or Innocence and Tails of Sacrefice. Two months ago, he had a car accident, and now he require 6500 $ for knee operation, which he can't affod.

    I can't afford to help myself, but if any of you is capable of assisting him in anyway, I am certain he will be most grateful.

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  • 189 weeks
    Chapter 15 - Two small scene changes

    Hello everyone. Just wanted to inform you that based on feedback from "RebelRogue12" and with his help, I altered two scenes.

    It is nothing much, but thought I should inform you regardless. Added stuff is marked in bold:

    Scene one:

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  • 190 weeks
    Scene change - Celestia's motivation - Feedback needed

    Hello all fans of this story. Due to high controversy regarding Celestia's actions and received feedback, I decided to expand on Celestia's scene to give better reasoning behind her actions.

    Sure, what she did is still a desperate and bold move, but I hope what I added will make it more understandeable and improve quality of the story.

    Added scene is marked in bold:

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  • 190 weeks
    Scene change - Kyuubi's injury - Feedback needed

    Hello everyone.

    Considering the feedback, I came to conclusion that the scene where Shining Armor injured Kyuubi seemed more harsh and more intentional than I intended, so I decided to add minor changes.
    Also, it was pointed out to me that tails don't bleed, so I decided to adress it as well.

    Here is the altered scene, changed as marked in bold:

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    6 comments · 334 views
  • 195 weeks
    I appologize for the delay in updating

    Greetings all readers and fans of "Tails of Innocence"

    I would like to appologize for this long delay in updating this story. There are two reasons behind it:
    1) Chapter 9 felt rushed to me and I had difficulty figuring out how to expand on it in a satisfying way, but I finally succeded. I can only hope it will be enough.

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Aug
29th
2020

Chapter 15 - Two small scene changes · 10:57pm Aug 29th, 2020

Hello everyone. Just wanted to inform you that based on feedback from "RebelRogue12" and with his help, I altered two scenes.

It is nothing much, but thought I should inform you regardless. Added stuff is marked in bold:

Scene one:

You ponies… you’re too understanding and too forgiving for your own good. Kyuubi lowered her head and chuckled. To be honest, I missed you too, my little princess. Many lonely days I wished things would go back to how they were, even if I knew they never will. She sighed before giving her no longer bigger mentor a warm smile. Fine, I’ll stay, but only on a few conditions.

Scene two:

“That’s wonderful!” Celestia flapped her wings, flying up to reach kitsune’s muzzle, booping it playfully. "Welcome home. Truly, I've missed you, my dear student."

She nuzzled her cheek a moment later. In the past, her little Kyuubi would sink into her fur whenever nuzzling her, and today she ended up lost in her student’s fur. How the table had turned. The two simply sat there, or in Celestia's case hovered, basking in the closeness of the other's company after so long. The Princess rubbing Kyuubi's neck while the large kitsune simply embraced her teacher gratefully, her earlier tension slowly ebbing away.

“I cannot wait to introduce you to Twilight. I’m sure you two will become friends immediately.”

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Comments ( 1 )

Good changes.

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