I think I may actually need a prereader.

For reasons I don't want to go into right now, I feel like my thinking is disjointed right now and I can't concentrate on revision. Normally I revise as I work, but I feel like I might be repeating myself and being overly repetitive, and that maybe there's a lot of redundancy as I say the same thing over and over... ok, I'll stop. :-) Seriously, though, I think the second chapter of "What About Twilight" (which is the entire rest of the story, though I might break it into multiple chapters, or maybe not, I really am having a hard time making decisions right now) might be too talking heads, and not enough of Discord's body language in particular (he's always moving in canon, so he's actually hard to write being as mobile as he should be, and in talking heads it's really noticeable).

So I think I actually need a prereader, this time. Is there anyone who wants to read the next chapter of What About Twilight and let me know what they think?

(A moment ago I just typed Crumbling instead of What About Twilight, and I didn't catch it until I went to add the tagged story. This should tell you how hard it is for me to focus right now.)

Comments

[DannyJ]

Sure, why not?

It'll help me procrastinate all the more efficiently.

[aleja08]

I volunteer. I have read enough books and fanfics to know when it's too much and when it's just right

[Nerfyy]

hey there
i would love to
i already did some pre-reading
for example for "This Curel and Random World" and im the Co-Author od Rewrite+i dunnu if you know them but yeah ^^
and i have A LOT of experience with Discord storys ^^

[SoundLogic]

I would give it a shot

[Rockstar_Raccoon]

My offer's still on the table too. :3

I edit Hoofbeats, Starlight Over Detrot, and Astral Aegis. I'm really good at finding spelling and grammar errors and fixing them on the spot, and leaving comments about where you might be forgetting to explain things or where the story is going.