Oct
20th
2015
A choice in writing · 4:41am Oct 20th, 2015
It has come to my attention that the Precursor Legacy portion of "Jak and Daxter" - and how I've been writing it in "Sons of Damas" - is incredibly dull.
I do not like dull. I don't enjoy writing dull.
So I have an idea.
If everyone is in agreement on this, for the rest of the "Precursor" segment, I will montage each segment of the game, covering only any unique points of interaction in a specific stage, boss fights, or other things like that, until the final area.
If I do this, "Precursor" should be done in two to three more chapters. I can then move on to "Jak 2", which will have a lot more things I can do with it.
Thoughts?
I vote yea. Things are dragging a bit, and pretty much everything "game-canon" so far can be summarized as "Collect Orbs and trade for Power Cells". I would not be opposed if we turned this play-through into a speed-run.
Fine with me. I never got past the beginning anyway.
That would work. I remember how time consuming all that was in the game and would not be against speeding things up to get to the meat of the story faster.
I really like this idea, and I'm glad that my comments were useful and weren't unnecessarily rude.
Most of the first game was a collectathon anyways. Even though I love collectathons, they don't seem to translate into a written story very well.
+1 to montage
I'm up for doing it either way.
if that's not enough of a hint I vote montage
From the words of Shia LeBouf:
DO IT!!! JUST DO IT!!!
Yup, time to sharpen that full wit with a montage. I'm fully on board with this (mainly because I never played this series myself but don't have the time to watch it thoroughly anyways.)
Maybe have one of the characters mention how it felt like things are sppeding by so fast in comparison to before? Would be cute and funny.
I'm fine with that. Of the Jak and Daxter games, the first one was always kind of boring.
I am on the fence, I am enjoying the written walkthrough, but if you growing bored then I can accept you stream lining the first game.
The issue is you're trying to write this about a game which has the same entertainment effect of the original Crash Bandicoot.
Yes, the game was fun, but it was because it was challenging. You'd find a challenge you couldn't approach with the method you undoubtedly become accustomed to, so you'd keep trying and trying and trying, each method only slightly different, until you finally realise what was wrong with your approach and get it right.
You can't take that premise, then throw in a fixer like Shining's magic and expect to keep it interesting.
Jak 2, did NOT have that same structure, because it was more of a game where you had to charge in head first, shoot a guy in the arse and THEN use whatever worked for you.
Dear Strong Tats,
Why don't you creat a montage?
Steve
Surf City, NJ
Bump for the montage.
You have another YEP for montage......even though I have NO idea what the **** game this is!
Another vote for shortening Jak 1 down. Gotta agree that it's rinse and repeat boring, fun the first time ya play it, but after that it's a drag. I've beaten 2 and 3 multiple times, and I can honestly say I've only beaten Precursor Legacy once. Though the same can be said about games like sly cooper 1 and the like, mainly due to them trying to figure out their own formulas. I can't even imagine how hard it is to take that formula, throw in a pony, and somehow make it work as well as you do.
Though, in the end our votes don't amount to much, writing this needs to be fun for you like it is for us to read it, so if you think it'll be better to cut down on content to get to Jak II faster then go ahead. You've done right with some of my favorite characters and franchises (this being one of them) so I trust you good sir. Do Naughty Dog proud good sir, and I will gladly read it and whatever else you come up with.
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Well, montage is one option.
The other option is Keira builds a device that uses power cells, Eco, and Shining's magic to create a Power Cell magnet that draws all the Power Cells in the area to it.
...But I felt that made Keira too OP.
yes please do it the story has been pretty damn monotone compared to the others
From what I heard about the first game, it wasn't that exciting compared to the others.
Montage to the tune of german polka.
Unfortunately, collectathons do not translate well into any medium other than video games. +1 to montage.
I'm all for the montage, but I think the Citadel should be it's own longer chapter
montage the story of jak, it does not pick up till jak 2, the first is mostly exploration and collecting things still do story on the parts that matter on the first, but overall just fast track it
The montage sounds like a plan to me. You've been doing something similar with the Spike/Metroid story, and so far it's been rather effective.
My vote is yes do it get on to the second game with its guns and cars and awesomeness
I never played the games so I can't really say. But you're good at what you do so my vote is to follow your gut.
I dunno. It seems you're unhappy with what you're doing now, so it stands to reason you'd do something different. Just keep an eye on pointing things out. *wink wink nudge nudge*
Geez. And here I'd put you in my To Read pile too.
I think I gave out this advice once before, but in any one-way crossover fic (e.g. "X series character in Y universe"), you should not let the original story dictate the pacing or events of your telling. This becomes especially true when sourcing from a game so low on storytelling elements as Jak & Daxter; the entire plot revolves around what few cutscenes are passed out as you enter and exit an area. This was ideal for a game trying to be as seamlessly sandbox-y as possible, but the experience is less than awesome as a written narrative.
What is your endgame? Clearly you are planning on going through the entire Jak trilogy, but to what end? What specific role does Shining Armor play in Jak's destiny? Why does he even need to be there at all? Focus on your plot, on the overall narrative and themes of your story, on character interactions and character actions that move the story forward.
Good luck, and good writing.
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Your avatar has never been more appropriate.
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I don't remember the Citadel at the moment, but if you say that there is enough meat there for a full chapter, I'll believe you.
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Actually, the next game is Daxter fighting monsters with a can of bug spray.
3486698 ummm there are guns in the second game i remember that as it was why I liked the second and third ones far better
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...and the PSP game "Daxter" is a prequel to Jak 2. Therefor it is next in line. (\
3487339 well considering that he says directly in the blog post that he wants to do this in order to move on to "JAK 2" i have to assume he means the second game in the primary trilogy
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That... is an excellent point. If he doesn't clarify by tomorrow, I'll send him a PM.
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I do not intend to cover "Daxter" in any great detail.
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Thank you for that clarification.
Move on ahead and make it a montage
3486698 Holy shit, you're right. I went on a typical, nonsensical Mako Mankanshoku rant.
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WITHOUT REALISING IT!!!!