"Out and About" is getting a teensy bit of an overhaul · 9:47am Mar 6th, 2014
I've not been entirely happy with my writing in "Out and About in the Equestrian Kingdom" so far, so here's what I'm going to do.
I'm not cancelling it, it's not even going on a hiatus. I'm still very much writing it - I'm almost through with chapter 7 for example - but I am not happy with the flow of the story so far. Therefore, I'm going to give it a bit of a facelift in the next couple of days.
I will be making a few judicial edits concerning some of the minor characters, the scene progression and order, and a few minor details of the story itself. If you've read chapters 1 through 6, then you may wish to re-read them once I've published chapter 7, but I'll be publishing a short summary of what I changed so it won't be necessary. If you haven't read chapters 1-6 then you may wish to hold off, but again, it's up to you.
I've been planning this in my head for a while, and the changes necessary fell into place. The idea is to smooth out the rough edges, to straighten out the meandering narrative and deliver a punchier, more concise, more exciting and more self-consistent and logical tale with less of the red herrings and misfires that I'm not happy with.
My bad.
I just honestly promise that this will be relatively minor, relatively speedy and yet deliver the optimum bang per buck. If you liked it before, you should like it more after. If you didn't like it before because of the writing you may like it after.
Thank you so much for that. It'll save me a lot of time
Either way, I'm looking forward to what you got in store for us, both in the past and future chapters.
Pshh, I'm going to read the entire thing again. I look forward to seeing how and what changes you implement! Thank you.
W00t! Nothing like a good double-back on the older text. Especially when it's "early days" stuff.
I can't say I noticed anything that needed fixing that badly, but then I'm not an author myself, so what do I know.
Just to repeat my comment from one of the chapters, I love what you're doing here--while the canon Optimalverse is great, the flaming geek in me still has a big soft spot for "classic" Vinge/Stross/Doctorow/MacLeod-style Singularity stories. The aesthetic is very different from a straight-to-upload story like FiO or The Metamorphosis of Prime Intellect, and it's something I've missed a bit hanging here in the Optimalverse community.