Oct
19th
2013
TF/TG Clopfic! (exclusive to this blog post! Will not be published elsewhere!) · 5:25pm Oct 19th, 2013
Hey everyone, I have a short, one shot pony transformation clopfic for you guys! It's very TF heavy. (But, fair warning, there is a bestiality scene thrown in there.)
In any case, I won't be publishing this on FimFic proper as it's very short (8k words) and is just a quick little thing I turned out. You may read it on Google Docs:
Alternatively, I know some of you are sick bastards and like everything grim. Click here for the same story, but with a more depressing ending.
Please comment below!
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TwistedSpectrum · 5,887 views
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Has anyone ever told you to use "preview" links like https://docs.google.com/document/d/17tIHucZjoeuCj6dlYOAxVDggM75cRosMR2tzL0soam0/preview instead of "edit" links like https://docs.google.com/document/d/17tIHucZjoeuCj6dlYOAxVDggM75cRosMR2tzL0soam0/edit when the reason you're sharing the document is to let people view it, not to let them edit it?
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That makes a hell of a lot more sense, and no one's told me before!
Well, thank you! I am doing that from now on.
That was... something.
But it was an interesting premise, well written, and any short story with a good ending is a good story.
Most honest story with TF/TG tags.
My suicidal curiosity is drawn but after Royal Duties had such an.... impact on me that it makes me involuntarily do a pretty good impression of the Excalibur Face meme whenever I say the name aloud, I'm afraid
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There isn't that much sensual clop in it, but it goes get a little graphic.
Anyway, if you're into transformations I'd read it. If you're just into FiM ponies, I'd skip it. The protag turns into a pony but the story has nothing to do with FiM ponies and is more just about body transformation and the ramifications.
The latter feels... Tacked on or of the CYOA negative ending style. While the former has a short story quick-slide ending, the latter lobs you off a cliff with boulder impacts occurring on the way down.
Not bad overall though.
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Mhmm, like I was telling someone else, I perhaps made that ending too dark. I figured that since the happier option was there, I was free to make the dark one as dark as possible. Might have gone overboard though.
I thought I had a nice touch in the last few lines where the protag even gives up on 1st person narration. They sunk so low they don't even think of themselves as sapient being anymore.
So yeah, I might wanna tone it down a bit next time~
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Aye, that was indeed a nice touch. While not too dark, it may be that my tentatively idle curiosity with TF/TG of this sort slanted my view somewhat.
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Heh, that's what I was thinking when I came up with the story. I was thinking "And then the pony gets fucked by horses and turns into a farm animal!" It sounded fine to me at first, then I wrote it and realized my TF fetish probably dulled my senses as to what is considered "creepy and dark."
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I certainly can understand where you're coming from with having a dulled sense of what's creepy... There are some fetishs that one simply doesn't bring up on even edge NSFW chat rooms lest everyone nopes out.
That was.....Something.
I liked it, sorta i guess.
I can't explain it...
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Well, if nothing else, hopefully it's memorable at the very least.
I really liked it. A bit short, but it felt like a good length for the tale in question. Thoughts below.
Daww... such a sweet ending. (Guess what version I liked more!)
Still, going into that stable while under a still ongoing transmutation spell was teenager in a slasher movie levels of stupid. Glad he/she still got a happy ending in one of the versions, at least.
Careful, I am not sure if linking to clopfics, on or off site, in blogs right now is allowed.
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From my understanding text is okay, the big ban was on porn images being hosted on blogs.
NSFW text, and for that matter, NSFW text being linked too, seems perfectly fine.
I mean, what if I wanted to make a blog post where I announced "I just had a talk with the author of Xenophilia, and we had lunch today at the capitol building!". I linked out to a NSFW fic, but that doesn't make this post NSFW. You could literally read that post at work and no one would care.
Like I said, the issue is NSFW pics and graphic porn being hosted on blogs here. That's an issue Knight wishes to address.
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It's on the borderline. Linking to on site clopfics has been cleared by knighty as long as there are no explicit excerpts in the text of the blog itself. Offsite story links should be overlooked as borderline IMO. That's why I said "careful".
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Ahahaha! I can sympathize! When the gypsy mentioned that little sunset bit I was thinking that John would learn of it, and abuse it.
But shit, this unintentional tragedy is just so hilarious! I was actually kind of thinking a modification of that one Spongebob scene where they watch the sunset as Spongebob was presumably about to die while I reading the end.
That was an interesting read. I think the dark ending wasn't as bad as you thought, but that might just be my crazy.
I literally applauded after the end of the story. You actually got me for a minute there with the second transformation. That is what I actually imagined happening to Jack from Five Score while he was in the stalls. And I think I can guess what the dark ending is. If I could give it a like I would beg the creators of the service to allow me to give it two. It is hard for me to find fics fitting my "mental filters" be it adventure, HiE, TF or a combination of either, and your stories always meet the right criteria, be it clop or not (which I don't actually care about, I think of it as a part of the plot. No pun intended).
I don't know why I wrote this much... Maybe because after midnight I start writing everything I think right now. Anyways, good work on the story and cannot wait for more!
Amazing story. Just when I thought it couldn't get any better, it did. Talk about bottom of the ninth. Perhaps you write more of this delicious fiction soon.
Fabulous, simply fabulous.
I would love to hear how this storyline plays out further, but I would hate to ruin such a beautiful ending (as many sequels do) but I still want more.
Maybe I'll go reread 5score again...
I haven't read it yet, but my immediate question is, how does any of that remotely constitute a reason not to publish it here?
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I wrote it for a friend. I feel like that would lose some of it's meaning if I publish it and it get plastered on the front page or whatever. I'm only sharing it here because it's a TF heavy fic so I figure I can share it with some TF minded folks.
Not everything I write has to be published. Ask any graphic artist if every sketch they make gets put up on DeviantArt, it's never the case.
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Oh I'm very into transformation stories (admittedly especially gender-bender ones, tho for obvious reason I more favor MtF lol) the reaction and attempting to adjust and cope with such a change often makes for an intriguing story, it is admittedly one of the appeals that drew me to Five Score and writing my own spin-off to it... tho I suppose I went a darker route with mine
but I got a sequel on the way that'll pick up immediately after.
I just read the story, not bad and the ending was sweet
The ending resolve made me not give a shit about how disgusting the middle part was!
THAT is what I look for in a clopfic. That is what I look for in a good author. THAT is why you are one of the best...
Stay Awesome
I'm following you now because of this.
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Haha, glad to have you onboard buddy
1438591 Seeing as how you can write, now I HAVE to read that story you suggested to me...
And also, as sorry as I am to see the old profile pic go, I love the new one!
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Oo, which story did I recommend?
Also, I agree on the profile pic. I rather liked my original one, but my OC was too adorable to not use.
1438620 Royal Duties. And who did your OC pic?
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Oh man, you're in for a treat. That story is my pride and joy.
And my OC was made by my good friend Acesential
1438634 Yeah, you told me about it on my story, Oh, The Things we do for Love, remember?
Thanks to your idea of me continuing it, it has become my most favorited story, with almost 600 favs!
1438634 And whenever I come up with a good OC, with a good name, I'm SO gonna commission him.
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Glad to help, you just need to keep writing it, those 600 people all want more.
Also goodluck with the OC, Ace can work miracles if you give him an idea to start with.
1438653 Thanks!
I'm a fan of horror, so grimdark'll be up my alley
but I'll be reading both anyways 
but which will I read first...?
as the song goes, "It's a paradox/a mystery/a riddle" and it's the perfect case for my situation
moustache if you know what song I'm quoting
well, nongrimdark was a better ending
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No More Words, by Endeverafter.
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Ding ding ding, we have a winner
Read it, rather liked it. Prefer the happy ending.
And now... I have to point out a spelling error:
The text that talks about Penny wanting to meet him: << “Her name is Penny. She loves you very much, and she can’t for you to meet her.”
'And she can't for you' I'm pretty sure you meant to have 'wait' in there.
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Oh hey, thanks for the find!
Also, glad you enjoyed it
(and yeah, the consensus is the 'happy' version is the better one)
Reads Dark version first
well shit. that sux.
Reads normal version.
I prefer this one. Still weird as all hell but ends better.
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Now keep your OC awake for 72 hours straight to get the look juuuuuust right
Hmmmm, I don't think I am sick, but the possibilities of what is in there intrigues me. Maybe later tonight when I don't have class to run to.
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It ends with pain of the worst kind, the pain of having all hope obliterated and just being forced to give in to what is now reality.
Definitely prefer the good ending. The other one isn't actually grimdark, it's just depressing.
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Crushed hopes and dreams, I like it.
Hm, I read the normal first and thought it was cute. Then I read the dark version and thought it was sad. I wouldn't say the dark version was as bad as I thought it would be. I thought maybe penny would change back into the pony and John would kill her or something. (That made a lot more sence in my mind but bear with me) or maybe she'd turn pony again for a few seconds but then turn back into a horse. (I don't know it fells more depressing when they get so close but still fail) I don't know, I enjoyed it either way, you're a great writer so keep up the good work!
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No, not crushed hopes and dreams, crushed hopes of being free, and being forced to be something that I feel the human mind should never be forced to endure for the rest of it's life.