18th May. Random thoughts, writing, music and pony. · 5:37am May 18th
For the love, for laughter, I flew up to your arms
Is it a video? Is it a video?
WARNING NSFW REF
You're gone and I gotta stay
High all the time to keep you off my mind
DIE TO THE SPRING PROMENADE 
My favourite spelling error ever :P
editing too hard. need sugarcubes
“Thanks, Ocean,” Derpy says, and goes in for a hug, extending her wing.
“That’s okay, I’m glad to help!”
Ocean nuzzles into the warm under-feathers.
This is subtle. Can you spot the issue?
What does the character's affirmation add? If she's gone in for the hug, of course she agrees. You hear the agreement without me writing "OK". I deleted numerous simple affirmations from this story. Unless strictly necessary, avoid them.
“Thanks, Ocean,” Derpy says, and goes in for a hug, extending her wing.
Ocean nuzzles into the warm under-feathers.
Editing...
will the chap survive the read through?
