When Rarity moves to Canterlot, hired by Twilight for the next five years as her personal wardrobe designer, she leaves Spike heartbroken and in desperate need of a friend, but it'll be alright. Pinkie's there for him in more ways than one.
I shall say this was entertaining, but I'm gonna take a guess and say that Spike's around... 17 now? Maybe 16? Fav'ing for the moment since I wanna catch updates, but I'll reserve my upvote for later.
This is great, I can admit that, but there are too numerous grammar errors to count. The ending here speaks volumes of a pure and innocent, slightly naive love. I can't help but feel that Twilight and Rarity are an item, dating, it my just be for the sake of the plot but the flimsy excuse that Rarity had to leave to become Twilight's personal dress maker, while believable, would've have taken much longer to actually come about. From here we can mostly imply that Spike was going to pieces, you don't actually explain how, did he lose sleep, organize the library wrong, simply didn't want to do anything? This stuff to be considered.
MOER !!!! pwean
2392826 Someone's eager!
2392837 yes im super eager
Ok three things.
One: I feel sorry for Twilight and Rarity for invoking the warth of Pinkie.
Two: Much love for ya for giving Spike a twin set.
Three: Great Story!
2392846 Gonna do my best to make sure the next part is thrilling. Each chapter should be 2000 words each by the way.
2392857 yay
2392851 Thank you so much! Great things come in threes as they say.
I shall say this was entertaining, but I'm gonna take a guess and say that Spike's around... 17 now? Maybe 16? Fav'ing for the moment since I wanna catch updates, but I'll reserve my upvote for later.
curious to see where this goes, not bad not that good but it has my attention =D
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I would be extremely grateful if you pointed some out.
This is great, I can admit that, but there are too numerous grammar errors to count.
The ending here speaks volumes of a pure and innocent, slightly naive love. I can't help but feel that Twilight and Rarity are an item, dating, it my just be for the sake of the plot but the flimsy excuse that Rarity had to leave to become Twilight's personal dress maker, while believable, would've have taken much longer to actually come about. From here we can mostly imply that Spike was going to pieces, you don't actually explain how, did he lose sleep, organize the library wrong, simply didn't want to do anything? This stuff to be considered.