A young colt sat in a field turning the grass to lollipops and the small road to slippery bubbles. He giggled happily as he slid and spun down the slippery bubble road. Despite his heritage he was so innocent he didn't know his actions were considered wrong by ponies. His name was Havoc he was the son of Discord. Havoc was the spitting image of Discord. Suddenly a little pink and purple filly ran up.
"Screwball!" Havoc giggled and slid right into her they both laughed.
"Looks like you two are having fun." Said a playful yet proud voice.
"Daddy!" Havoc and Screwball shouted and giggled in unison and Discord smiled. "See daddy i'm just like you." Havoc said proudly his big adorable eyes gleaming happily.
"I'm very proud and i saw what you did Screwy my dear and i'm very proud." Discord said with utter joy and pride. Alas that was the happy times of sweet innocent Havoc's life. As time went on when Havoc was about 6 years Discord started to become more chaotic, his pranks became more wild, he was getting bolder in chaos, but at the time Havoc saw it as more fun, never had it crossed his mind that his or his father's actions were wrong or harmful. One day Havoc ask Discord why he couldn't go and meet other ponies. You see screwy got to go to ball games and into town but havoc never was allowed , and it had puzzled the boy for long enough.
"Because those silly other ponies don't seem to like our fun, and are big bullies about it and i don't want them to pick on you because your fun is different than theirs." Discord explained in the best way he could to his 6 year old son. Though it bewildered young Havoc his dads answer did make sense so he left it at that. You see Discord and his kids lived in a forest, as for his childrens protection. Discord loved his children deeply, and was afraid of what some ponies would do if they ever found out of Havoc's and Screwy's existence, so he taught them to never trust anypony except for Screwy, of course.
Then came the day Havoc would never forget, the day everything he had ever known was ripped from him. The princesses had ,had enough of Discord's mischief and decided that it was time they put an end to his chaos. That day Havoc had followed his dad. It had not been long when two ponies appeared Havoc thought them to be very beautiful. "Well hello Tia, Luna long time no see." Discord greeted light heartedly, but the two princesses didn't seem to have come for a peaceful chat. "How dare you address thou and thy sister in such ways, Discord thou's days of creating chaos on thy subjects ends now." Luna growls and then is a blinding flash of light Luna and Celestia turned Discord to stone right in front of young Havoc's eyes, and with that the princesses disappeared. Havoc was shocked, confused, horror-struck, lost he had bared witness to the 'death' of his father. Havoc ran to his now stone dad
"Daddy! Daddy why, why did those ponies do this?" Havoc sobbed. Later he found that other ponies had taken Screwball to a place called an orphanage and now Havoc was all alone, he cowered away in utter terror from pony civilization barely managing to survive.
Then years later his fear was replaced with pure hatred. He had discovered that they had put his dad in the royal gardens like a trophy on display, and from that day forward he promised he would make every last vile pony pay and suffer, just as he did.
I got bored in the first paragraph. This is a decent story. But it needs and editor.
yeah but what can i say it would be kind of confusing to just jump right in to the main plot without any backstory info then if you read the story you would probably not have a clue why what is happening well is happening and i do thank you for your opinion i agree unfortunetly i don't have even a simple editor because im using WordPad and the knowlege of a JH student but i hope to improve
Took one look and decided it wasn't worth reading. Namely because the writer has poor English skills.
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To 'TwilightAmory': Thanks a lot and yes as you can already tell I don't have an editing program. Thank you so much for helping correct problems. This is my first FIM Fiction story and thus a work in progress, it's also a pass time story as I call it. After a long stressful day at school I sometimes like to write or something and then when i'm in a better mood i'll go back and try to improve it. So thank you you don't know how hard I was crying until I read your comment and I smiled, so once again thank you.
It's a good story, but it seriously needs an editor. Also, how did you get past moderation with a 600-word story?
Whoa. This story needs an editor. It lacks punctuation, spelling, capitalization...
There is real no lead up. No descriptions either.
And from the first sentence, I thought Havoc was a human boy.
Many errors in just the first sentence. I'll bold them for you.
And now I'll fix them in this one.
Fixed. That looks better than what we had before. ^^
This is exactly what editors will do for you. I highly recommend getting one.
2390542 Bro u typed AND, not an.
2392016
Lolwut? Could you repeat that? Not being rude or anything.
2392030 You typed AND, not an. Just saying.
2392053
What the buck does that mean? What's an AN?
2392107 It's a word. You just used it.
2392120
Oh, yeah!
Babs: Yeah, dat...
Ignore the haters bro just keep going :D
I'm not hating but I think the backstories are too... rushed.
>> BigBrony246 thanks a lot