Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon’s bodies were pulled out on a stretcher. They were covered with the white a bag.
The parent of these two ponies watched as they carry them off. Twilight and Rainbow made there way inside the house. There was the Ponyville Police inside investigating their deaths.
Twilight and Rainbow went into Diamond Tiara’s room. They found a pony looking around the room. She had a black bow, a dark pink mane, light green body, and a black puzzle piece for her cutie mark.
“Hmm... I don’t get it. There is something missing. We can’t find any clue anywhere. There hoof prints in the middle of the room that belong to are victims and now they’re laying on the wall. It seems like something exploded in here but there’s no trace of a bomb. There no stab marks on the bodies. Nopony touched the bodies. They say they died of natural causes, but it doesn’t explain how they got thrown into the wall!” The pony said confused.
“There nothing here. We can’t find anything Sprinklejinx. Can we go home?” One of the officers asked.
“Nopony is going anywhere unless we find at least one clue!” Sprinklejinx commanded.
“Yes ma'am,”The officer got back to work.
Sprinklejinx looked at Twilight and Rainbow. “What are you doing here? Get out of here!”
“Um... I’m getting some vives in here. Ouch! My head hurts,” Twilight touched her horn.
“Um... Twilight used a spell on herself to make herself a psychic,” Rainbow smiled. “Tell us what you see, Twilight.”
Jester flew around the room watching the two ponies. She came across a strange piece of paper. She picked it up. She gasped, she went up to Rainbow Dash. “You have to read this!”
Rainbow thought for a second. I’m standing in front of cops right now and they're not noticing the paper that Jester is holding. Should they be creeped out?
“Do you see a piece of paper in front of me Sprinklejinx?” Rainbow asked.
“What piece of paper?” She asked.
“This is a special paper that ghost use. It’s ghost paper, only ghost can see this type of paper,” Jester explained.
Rainbow reads the paper:
Dear Twilight Sparkle and Rainbow Dash,
I have killed Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon because you ponies cheated. I’m not playing any games with you ponies. You ponies tricked death. I am death. Since you had two souls I take two more. If you do this again I will take four souls and then it will double. Bring two souls or else!
-Grim Reaper
Rainbow tapped Twilight, “You have to read this.”
Sprinklejinx made a strange face, “Read what?”
Twilight looked up back at Sprinklejinx, “Um... I’m sorry I’m not getting any vibe in this room. Lets get out of here Rainbow Dash.” Twilight trotted out of the room with Rainbow following. Jester looked back at Sprinklejinx. She seemed like she was suspicious about the two ponies. Jester flouted out of the room following behind Twilight and Rainbow.
All three ponies arrived at the library. Spike was waiting for Twilight for a very long time. He looked very upset.
“What’s wrong?” Twilight asked.
“You're never here anymore. You weren't here for a day. You spend your time in the basement a lot with Rainbow Dash. Are you both hiding something?” He asked.
“Um...” Twilight tried to think up a lie “Its suppose to be a girl thing we do. And we have to be alone to do it.”
Spike made a weird face. “I hope that you're not doing what I’m thinking of.”
“We’re not, don’t worry Spike. We are never going to do that.” Twilight promised.
“Good!” Spike walked off.
Jester questioned, “What was the thing he was thinking of?”
Twilight looked b ack at Jester. “You don’t want to know.”
Everypony except Spike went into the basement. Rainbow Dash closed the door and locked it.
“Rainbow, hand me that letter please,” Twilight commanded. Rainbow Dash handed Twilight the letter. She placed it on her stand. She read through the written note.
Twilight thought, If we keep doing what we did earlier, then more ponies would be dead. He always finds a way to cheat deals. Maybe Jester might have a reason she's up here. She must have gotten a deal with Grim. I just need to find out what. She looked at Jester, “Why are you not in the underworld?”
Jester got nervous, “Long story. I died in an avalanche on dragon mountain saving some fillies.”
She flashed back:
“What happened to me? Why can I see through myself,” Jester said looking at her hoofs.
Grim flew down onto Dragon Mountain right in front of Jester. “Hello Jester.”
“Who are you? How do you know my na me?” Jester asked
“I am death himself. My name is Grim Reaper. You probably just noticed that your game is up. You have now passed on to the afterlife. In other words, you're dead.” Grim got out a bottle. “You are now going to come with me to the underworld where you will live for the rest of your life.”
“I don’t want to go with you!” Jester said. “I want to stay with my friends and family.”
Grim put down his bottle and looked into Jester’s eyes. “You want to haunt your friends and family?”
“No, I just want to stay with them forever,” Jester said with a tear rolling down her cheek.
The Grim Reaper gets out a book. He flipped through the pages. “If I allow you to stay here, you must give up some of your memories.”
“I don’t care just do it!” Jester yelled.
Grim started to do magic. Jester closed her eyes.
Grim got rid of all the happy memories and all the bad memories and boring memories wer e still with her. “I wish that I could have all of my memories, but Grim wouldn’t allow it.” Jester sighed.
Twilight looked at Jester, “I understand.”
There was a hard knock at the basement door. The lock on the door broke and the door flung open. Sprinklejinx trotted down the steps. “I know what you two are hiding!”
“What?” Rainbow asked.
“You both killed Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon. You covered up the evidence really well. And I mean it,” Sprinklejinx said.
“You don’t have proof," Twilight claimed.
“That’s why I am taking you both in for questioning. You’re under arrest!” Sprinklejinx got out her shovel.
“We are not going with you!” Rainbow yelled. Sprinklejinx ran for Rainbow. Twilight took a second to think. She soon came up with an idea. Her horn lit up. She pointed it at Sprinklejinx. Just when Sprinklejinx was about to hit Rainbow Dash, she fell to the ground.
“Twilight, what did you do to her?” Rainbow asked.
“She is on the brink of eternal slumber. I used the soul separator spell on her.”
Sprinklejinx’s soul went out of her body. She looked at herself. “What did you do to me?”
“Do you want to know what happened to Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon?” Twilight asked.
“Yes, but what did you do to me?” Sprinklejinx asked looking at her body. She turned away to find Jester. “And who is that?”
“I will explain everything on the way to the underworld,” Twilight said.
Twilight activated the portal spell and jumped in. Rainbow followed behind. Jester grabbed Sprinklejinx and pulled her through the portal.
Its a great chapter but there are still grammar issues. Also with the detective busting down the door. Why did you have Twilight say that she had no proof? That just makes her look guilty.
Also. FIRST
2256282 First I want to have a say that even if TheSnarkKnight30 can't find all of the mistakes I made. I can't find all of the mistakes I made. No body is perfect. Even if I try to have no mistakes I will still have mistakes. I started off witting very short chapters and then I changed. Nonagon even makes mistakes, and hes a good editor. If I write a chapter that I look though and I think I should release then I do it. An editor takes a long time for me. I actually try to work with editors. Nonagon told me that there was a problem with the description of this story. I only fixed one but he was telling me there was another. I couldn't spot that. I'm just not that guy who has that power. No one has perfect grammar and I except that. All I want to do is write so I can keep everyone enjoying this. And I do this on my down time when I feel bad. And I want everyone in the world to enjoy it.
I will try to restate that line Twilight says.
I fixed about 70% of the mistakes. I didn't really have the time to look at the beginning of the chapter. I fixed the majority of the mistakes at the end. Maybe I could take another look at it. I'm sorry for the inconvenience. By the way, Sprinklejinx doesn't just arrest ponies. That would be totally out of character.Professional Detectives need some kind of evidence to prove them guilty in court before she could have them arrested. She only uses her shovel when people don't answer her interrogation questions, attack her, or run away. She doesn't just bonk ponies on the head like a caveman. She has to have a reason for it. Other than that, everything else seems okay. Keep up the good work!
Pff, serves her right for randomly arresting them