Dead Space: Through the mind of a Necromorph

by XenoJohn

Chapter 6 (Important note)

Author's Note:

My first first version of this was a disappointment for me. Thanks to Dezzar Tac for editing the other version of this chapter, click here to read it

Click this Link to read my first version of this chapter.

Comments

[TyTyTech]

It is really awesome seeing more of this great story! But on to other matter's there were quite a few typo's in this, but other than that really great chapter. I can't wait for more of this as well!

[DezzarTac]

I'm bored, give me a few and I'll send in a edited variant.

[XenoJohn]

3220102 k...
do shit with it...

[Brony Dragon]

FINALLY UPDATE

[DezzarTac]

3220138

HERE IS MY GOOGLE DOC

ALSO, don't do "parts" just post chapters as chapters. asking questions like

But who will have their feast first?

disconnect the reader from the story, as well as

Continued in 'Chapter 6 part 2'

NOTE: Don't just copy-pasta the google doc, I mean it. Format should be double checked, it's important. I also changed a bit of the text, so read through it all again.

EDIT: This thing had so many errors, it seemed like you pulled it outta your ass, also, you ALWAYS misspelled "Surprise" as "Surpirse"....

[XenoJohn]

3220448 I was too laszy do edit
but thanks for prehoofing

[DezzarTac]

3220490
It's cool. I don't mind doing a little editing for my faved stories, but it's a little irritating knowing all computers have spell check and people ignore it and upload stuff without even using auto-editing software! (spellcheck etc) I mean, it won't hurt to wait a few more minutes doing that, and you wouldn't need to do much editing if you do things right the first time going through it slow.

On a side note, fimfiction has a link to a very good 'tutorial' on writing stories. I'll also be willing to share a few tips on things I noticed in featured stories. Format, wording etc.

[XenoJohn]

3220552 ok...
But I put a link to the other one just so they can see what I planned it to turn out...

But I didn't re-edit the whole chapter, I just put the link...

But is it ok if you were my pre-reader
I've had one who was a lazy ass and didn't do shit

[DezzarTac]

3220568

Eh, I doubt people will read the, technically, same thing twice. Mine just has less spelling mistakes, better grammar, sentence structure, formatting, ok now I'm just doing that on purpose...

Next time you upload a chapter I feel needs editing, I'll use notepad so you can just copy-paste it. Maybe a PM. I wish keeping the formatting wasn't so hard

Edit: If the edits don't get included, what's the point of a pre-reader?

[XenoJohn]

3220593 thank you :)

I'll stalk follow you and PM you a new chapter (not for sevral weeks or so)

[DezzarTac]

3220620

Ok, well I'm off to bed now, night!

[XenoJohn]

3220663 by :3

[Fallenstar Nighthoof]

I like where this is going, can't wait for more.

[XenoJohn]

3284046 then fav it to see more

[XenoJohn]

3377384 is that a spelling error I have?
If so please let me know so I can fix it

[XenoJohn]

3435852 I've got one already
But I don't really know about having you for a second editor.

If my first one isn't doing as much editing or nothing at all then you'll be my editor