Chapter 2: Broken Rainbow
"You died?" I said with just a hint of disbelief...okay, more than a hint.
The girl who for all intensive purposes I'm just going to refer to by her persona - Rainbow Dash - simply sat quietly and nodded. I noticed a few tears dropping from her eyes, but she just turned away and growled angrily. "I-I'm not crying, o-okay?"
I shook my head with a snort. "Well fine then. When you're ready to drop the tough act, I'll be down the hall."
I left without another word and walked to my studio, leaving the door open so Rainbow Dash would know where I was. I picked up my Les Paul and turned on my amp, then started to strum the opening licks of a song I wrote, which was pure instrumental. The soft tones of my guitar carried throughout the house, and I soon lost myself to the music.
The notes flowing from the amp took my mind to a better place...a more peaceful place. I was sitting on the beach with my grandfather, just like I used to when I was little, only now instead of sharing two glasses of pineapple juice, we were sharing two beers. As we sat and watched the waves crash against the shore, he finally spoke to me.
"Koa, when you gonna let it go? This isn't good for you, keiki." he stated, not taking his eyes off the frothy waves.
I looked over at him with confusion. "What do you mean?"
He then gestured to the waves and I froze at what I saw. There, playing in the soft surf, was Kayla. I was about to get up and run to her, but I was stopped by a hand to my wrist. I looked over to see my grandpa shaking his head with a solemn look.
He pulled me back down to sit beside him and frowned. "That's what I mean, boy. She's gone...let her go. You're just hurting yourself by trying to keep her alive when she's already passed."
In my heart, I knew he was right...but it was just too much to ask, I felt. "I'm sorry kapuna kane, I can't just stop loving her."
He chuckled and shook his head. "You think I stopped loving your grandma when she passed? Never. Do you think I don't know that you still care about me even though I'm gone? I do. I never said to stop loving her...I just said to let her go. You have yourself to worry about now, and that girl you found today."
I turned to him with a shocked expression. "H-how did you..."
He smiled and waved. "She needs you now, Koa. See you next time, keiki."
I was startled out of my "vision" by a tap to the shoulder. My hands were still playing a soft riff on the guitar, so I stopped and noticed Rainbow Dash was standing in front of me on unsteady legs, looking rather embarrassed.
She laced her fingers together and looked at the floor for a moment before sitting down in front of me, still not taking her eyes off of the ground. She was still for a moment before she looked up at me with glassy eyes, wet with tears. "...I'm sorry...for earlier."
I placed my guitar down on the stand next to me and turned the amp off before looking back into her vivid violet eyes. "Okay...what part?"
She rolled her eyes and groaned. "Ugh...are you really going to make me say it?"
I nodded and smirked. "Yes, I am. What are you sorry for, Rainbow Dash?"
She huffed and crossed her arms, but didn't break my gaze. "I'm sorry...for being all walled-off." She dropped her arms and sighed, more relaxed now. "It's just that...I'm all alone here. I'm not used to being alone."
I let my expression soften, and I gently placed a hand on her shoulder. She looked at it, then back up at me. I smiled warmly and said, "You aren't alone. I don't know why you're here or how, but I'm not going to leave you hanging. Just because you're the Element of Loyalty doesn't mean you couldn't use someone to be loyal and helpful to you." She let a little smile grace her face before I continued. "I understand it might be a little painful, but could you tell me how it happened?" I didn't need to say any more, she knew what I meant.
The girl nodded and closed her eyes, taking a strained breath. "It was at my last training session for the Wonderbolts. Wonderbolts...you know who they are, right?"
I nodded and smiled. "I would rather not say how yet, but it's safe for you to assume I know most of what goes on in your world, and how it works."
She shrugged and continued. "Fair enough. Anyway, I was doing my flight routine, and everything was going smoothly until the last trick. I was trying to go for a quadruple corkscrew while pulling off a Sonic Rainboom, but I got hit by an updraft that shot me off course, and before I knew it, I was headed towards the bleachers really fast. Then, everything went black." I could tell this was hurting her to remember, but I admired her bravery to continue, and she did. "The next thing I remember was that I woke up in the hospital surrounded by all my friends."
-Flashback - Canterlot Royal Hospital: 20:49-
Rainbow Dash woke to a spectrum of colors in front of her eyes, and after gaining her vision back, she smiled and let out a weak cough, getting the attention of everypony in the room.
A certain yellow pegasus mare rushed over to her best friend with tears in her eyes and whispered excitedly, "Girls, she's waking up!" Rainbow Dash welcomed a warm, gentle hug from the timid mare, and even went so far as to nuzzle against her friend's mane.
It confused the cyan pegasus when she saw a saddened face on every other pony in the room, including the two princesses of Equestria, who had graced her with their presence.
"Wh-what's going on? Why all the sad faces? You all look like somepony just died or something." the speed-demon said softly. This one statement caused everypony in the room to bow their heads and begin crying, some softly, while others - like Fluttershy - openly sobbing loudly. The group was then broken up by a brown earth pony with a dark brown mane, wearing black eyeglasses and a white lab coat.
He stepped forward with a somber expression and sighed sadly before speaking. "Rainbow Dash, I am so sorry, dear. We have done everything we could..."
Rainbow Dash was now even more confused, and though she felt like she should panic, she instead felt very sleepy for some odd reason. She fought back the drowsiness and instead asked, "What do you mean, Doc? What's wrong?"
He bravely held her gaze and continued. "Your internal injuries are too great. Your pancreas has ruptured, and we can't stop the bleeding. I..." His voice faltered, but he regained his composure and gave a sad frown. "I am so sorry, my dear...but you should say your goodbyes." He then turned to look at the princesses and held an expression of brokenness, but whispered so that only the two monarchs could hear. "I am so sorry your majesties, but she has maybe another ten minutes, twenty at the most. Make it worth it." With that, the doctor sighed softly and left the room.
The daredevil pegasus merely stared at the ceiling in silence as the realization came upon her. "I'm going to die...aren't I? This is it..."
The princess of the moon stepped forward slowly and nodded sadly. "It is true, Rainbow Dash. We..." The princess's voice broke for a moment before she recovered, and while tears threatened to break free, none fell. "We are so very sorry. If there is anything We could do, We would do it. We..."
The dying pegasus dismissed the princess with a weak wave of the hoof. "Don't apologize, Princess Luna. You didn't make me do that stupid trick...I did it because I wanted to." She then turned her eyes to the rest of her friends at the foot of the bed, glancing at the butter-colored pegasus still in her hooves. "That goes for the rest of you too, girls. I don't want any of you to blame yourselves for this. It's not your fault..." at this, she turned her eyes to the crying mare in her forelegs and hugged her tight, "least of all yours, Fluttershy. You tried to talk me out of it, as a matter of fact. Of course with me being me, I just had to do the craziest thing out there." She let slip a few tears before drawing in a ragged breath. "'Shy, please take care of Tank."
The mentioned mare let out a sad whimper, not taking her face out of her best friend's chest, but when she spoke, her voice was comforting and surprisingly strong. "Okay, Rainbow Dash. I promise I'll take good care of him for you."
In an unheard of display of affection, Rainbow Dash kissed the pink-maned yellow pony on the forehead. This small gesture broke the composure of all the ponies in the room and they all rushed to the bedside with tears flowing freely. Rainbow Dash simply smiled weakly and giggled. "I love you girls...all of you, so much."
A certain orange cowmare flung herself upon the bed and sobbed into the stomach of her best friend, her mane frayed and frizzy from stress and hours without sleep. "Ah-Ah love ya RD...Ah'm gonna miss ya somethin' fierce."
Rainbow Dash, the Element of Loyalty, displayed her loyalty again in attempting to comfort a mourning friend, even on her own deathbed. She lifted the chin of Applejack with a hoof and let her usual confident smirk grace her face again as she said, "AJ, it's not goodbye...it's see you later. You better pick up my awesome slack until we see each other again." The cowpony simply nodded and buried her face in her friend's chest again, not attempting to hide nor stem the tide of tears that fell from her eyes. Rainbow Dash then lifted the face of her oldest friend, Fluttershy, and looked into her beautiful cyan eyes. "And you...you better never stop being the most amazingly kind pony I'm privileged to call one of my bestest friends. I'm so proud of you, Fluttershy. Don't ever change...you're perfect just the way you are." This just caused the older pegasus to cry harder, but she nodded and lay her head against the rainbow mane, stroking it softly.
As the other Elements released their fallen friend, the timid pegasus and Stetson-wearing earth pony climbed onto the hospital bed, nuzzling into the soft coat of a dear friend, saying a final, silent goodbye. The rest of the group shuffled out, unwilling to summon the courage to watch their fallen friend’s last moments, but the two mares stayed with their friend, holding her as she began to slip away.
The doctor then re-entered the room and smiled sadly at the fading pegasus. "This is not the end, Rainbow Dash. You will see them again, I promise." With that said, he simply checked the readings on the monitors around the bed and left.
Even in her weakening state, she was confused at this remark, but realized he must have meant in the afterlife. She had never been the kind of pony to believe in that sort of thing, but now she found herself oddly taking comfort in the thought. As she felt herself begin to fade and darkness began to overcome her vision, she hugged her two best friends in the world tightly and smiled at them one more time.
"Don't forget about me...because I'll never forget about any of you."
The last thing she felt were two pairs of lips kissing her cheeks...and then nothing.
-End Flashback-
As Rainbow Dash finished her story, I was in tears, as was she. Fuck it...at this point I now completely believed that this girl was Rainbow Dash, impossibilities be damned. I still wasn't sure how or why it happened, but I believed it with all my being now, and I was going to make sure she was taken care of. She needed me more than ever now, and I was going to make sure I was there for her. I was about to get up to get her some tissues when she grabbed my arm tightly.
"P-please don't go! Please don't leave me!" she pleaded in between sobs.
I shared tears with her, but smiled as I sat down next to her and pulled her into a gentle, yet firm embrace. "I'll never leave you, Rainbow Dash. I promise. I'll be around for as long as you want me to be."
She looked up at me with a slightly pensive expression. "R-really? Well, w-what if I always want you around?"
I responded by hugging her tighter and pulling her head against my chest. "Then I'll always be here. I'll never leave you, and that's a Pinkie promise." She finally pulled her arms up and held me in a death-hug, tightening her arms around me so much that if not for my muscle mass, she'd be squeezing the air out of me. After a few minutes of this, I just released her and held her at arms length. "Alright, Rainbow Dash, we've both had quite the day just in this last hour, so we should get some sleep. We'll figure out what to do next in the morning.” I pulled her off the ground with me and slowly walked her to my room, sitting her down on the bed and covering her up before whispering, "Alright, I'll be downstairs if you need me. Sleep well."
A tight grip around my wrist stopped me again from walking away, and I looked back to see the same panicked expression in her face. "Please...please don't leave me...not tonight at least. I really don't want to be alone tonight."
I sighed and looked at her pleading eyes. "What are the implications of a male and a female sleeping in the same bed in Equestria?"
Her eyes widened and she shook her head quickly. "I know where you're going with this, and yes, it usually means the same thing. That's not what I'm meaning by this at all...no offense."
I held a hand up. "None taken."
She continued. "I just really don't want to sleep alone tonight. Please...please just stay with me."
Normally with any other woman, red flags would be shooting up in my mind. However, I could see the honesty in her eyes and hear it in her voice. I knew in my heart that there were no sexual innuendos in her request. And so, against what would normally be my better judgment, I nodded. "Okay Rainbow Dash. I'll stay."
She smiled and nodded. "Thanks, Koa. And please, Dash is fine."
I smiled and nodded back at her. "Okay Dash. Just give me a second to get some sleep clothes on and I'll be right back." I then went back to my closet and pulled out a pair of pajama bottoms and a tank top, then went out in the hallway to change quickly before entering the room again, throwing my day clothing in the hamper in the corner. I switched off the light, leaving only the faint glow of the full moon to illuminate the room. I decided that tomorrow would be a day off, so I opted not to set my clock, and instead slid over the covers into the right side of the bed, Dash scooting over to make room for me. "Goodnight Dash."
She shifted a bit and cleared her throat. "Um, goodnight Koa."
It took me awhile to get tired, as my mind was still abuzz with all that had happened just in the past few hours. While I sifted through my thoughts to make sense of this recent turn of major events, I felt soft hands wrapping around my arm as a certain girl pulled herself close to me. In all honesty, it made me a little uncomfortable, but my comfort wasn't as important as hers at the time. After all, I had lost a wife. This girl...she had lost everything she'd ever known, and was now a stranger in a strange world.
I guess just this once, I could put up with it.
While I usually abandon any fic with a Mane 6 death in it, you manage to pull it off well enough to keep me interested. I hope this turns out to be a great story.
Hmmmmmmmmm.
I shall keep an eye on this for now. Do not disappoint.
1946237
This is probably his most complex story he has. Really good, but damn you gotta make sure not to skip over any text or you kinda get lost in the dust.
Fav'd, Thumbed Up, all that good stuff Drew.
1946237, 1947055, 1947104... You all will not be disappointed. For the new readers, there is a lot to keep track of, but also a lot that will keep you interested and keep your mind and heart hooked.
1947629 dear.. you wandering a "thin rim"(walking on a very thin line) between a brain-death Rainbow-is-now-out-of-nowhere-my-girlfriend Story and a difficult Welcome-to-earth-havenOrHell Story...
only if you take any step with precision and thing at least thrice about every decision you can create a great Story... even if i see here already that if you will keep this 'direction' of making decisions it will become a great work.
so:
and for the lowlz: ...
d'awwwww . dis is cute .
1947852 You know, spacecowboy is probably laughing at you right now, because he knows what's to come in this story...and if you think this part was intense, you are going to shit yourself for what's to come.
1947969 I'm glad you like, as there's plenty more to come.
1947920>>1948029
Since I was mentioned, figured I would chime in.
Trust me, this story walks a couple of lines, but none of them are truly cliche. More like mind fucking, relentless, love/hate relationship-type mind fucking. Things become much clearer further in (more convoluted), and the story is pretty good.
1948029>>1948375
1.) *sights in freaking relief*
2.) *reorganized his "I'm-looking-forward-for-this" Folder*
3.) *grapes a Rainbow colored flag and waits for the Q...*
P.S. 3+1.) *is glad that there is a function witch you can rate a single comment*
I don't usually read humanized ponies but this one is really good. I got my eye on this!
1948536
Lol, nice reactions. :)
Just a fair forewarning though, the romance does hit hard, but for reasons that are explained later. Radiant Dawn LOVES his foreshadowing. He'd probably marry it if he could. Things are almost never how they appear at first with him, always refreshing.
1948541 Well this isn't going to be your average humanized pony/anthro story. Prepare to be mindfucked.
1948635 You're welcome
1948612 Well there's much more to come, but I will warn you ahead of time that this story is going to walk the line on quite a few things, as well as completely redefine the MLP universe as a whole.
Don't say I didn't warn you...read at your own risk.
1948996 I never have read humanized ponies but when you write it ill give it a try (ya your that good of a writer)
N and a couple years later they all die bye stuff while they are doing what they love and appear in his home... or die naturally
I am not the least bit tempted to read this, but I have to say; that is the most pretentious description I have ever read on this site.
1949277 I'll tell you outright that the entire story is not going to be humanized. Rainbow Dash will be a pony once again, though it will not come right away. With that being the case, you'll just have to wait and see what happens. I can say without ego that I believe you will be pleasantly surprised.
1949743 No...but good guess. You'll just have to wait and see what happens.
1949946 Well, I can't aim to please everyone, and that's why there are different genres. Too bad...you're missing out on a great story, but to each their own. May you find whatever it is you're looking for.
1950125 i know i will you always throw in a surprise that makes people look at the story differently every time that is why i like your work
1950174 Why thank you. If I can, I'm going to be posting another chapter tonight, so keep an eye out.
1950134 Fair enough. It is the genre, and the sex tag, that is the biggest obstacle to my wanting to read it. However, you could ratchet down the "This stuff is deep man, read it slow or you won't get it." and let your work speak for itself. I mean, it could very well be that deep. It could be more challenging than Ulysses for all I know. The problem is when you claim that in the description. It comes across as very Great and Powerful, if you get my drift. Genius, if you have it, is best highlighted by understatement.
1950198 Genius is also highlighted by following a road different from the norm, so what you may consider the right path, I might consider too cliche. Besides, I'm not in writing to be the best, I'm in it to enjoy myself and present my works to readers. If people like it, awesome. If not, it's their loss. Besides, I never referred to my story as anything "Great" or "Powerful". I simply wished to inform my readers that there will be quite a few things about this story that will be very different from the rest, though good or bad will be up to the reader to decide. Any decent captain of a vessel lets his passengers know as much as he can about the voyage they are all taking...and while I will not offer any spoilers, I am doing the same in essence. There will be no lemons involved in any of my stories, but there will be implied sex themes, as well as a few "line-walking" scenes. If you don't enjoy the story, oh well. If you do, then enjoy it to your fullest extent without being prejudice.
Thank you for your time.
i like it keep up the good work!
1950292 Thank you, and will do. Expect another chapter either tonight or tomorrow.
1950298 ok soooo.... should i go to bed or should i spam f5 all night?
1950302 Go to bed. If I do get the chapter out, it isn't going to be until around 23:00 or later. No sense getting bags under your eyes simply on the chance that I might have another chapter coming. The chapter won't be going anywhere, so it'll be ready whenever you wake up.
1950315 ok so whats the time wherever you are because it´s 2 am in sweden
1950320 Ah...well in that case I'm a ways behind you. It's only 21:26 here (9:26pm).
1950327 ohhhh, i see.
i have two hours of sleep nah just kidding, i´m going to read s´more and then i´m off to bed
You really shouldnt take other peoples work as your own dude. Not cool. And if your going to you need to at least be caught up with all the chapters they have posted. Besides If he wanted to post his stories here he will post them when hes ready
1950345 Check out my other stories if you haven't already...you may enjoy them.
1950355 Umm...I'm not sure what you're talking about...this is my story, and I'd appreciate it if you didn't accuse me of stealing my own work...that's just stupid.
Or better yet, if you're going to do so, please have proof that I'm doing so. Where is this proof? Please, let me see it.
1950356 will do
Sorry, theres been a lot of people stealing your work (and others) lately so i didnt really bother looking at profiles. Now that i bothered i see that this is probably you. I just jumped to a conclusion after reading you respond to someone and say you wouldnt post on here.sorry about that.
1950407 Well "The Demon's Angel" as well as all the stories I post are mine and mine alone, so if you are really a person that looks for justice on plagiarism, I would like to know who these people are please. I don't take kindly to my hours and hours of work being stolen by some knob-end and marketed as his/her own.
You're just shooting these chapters out like nothing here. Why couldn't you do that on FanFiction?
1950702 Well spotted, sir.
1950782 Because they're already written, dude. I'm just editing them before reuploading.
1950863 hence the derp :P
1950892 Ah...didn't catch that.
Wahahahaha
1951109 Okie dokie...
braddah man now you really making me think you're local
1951283 Fremont, CA...born and raised. I was born in Hayward and lived in California until I was nine. My mother's grandfather's name was Newt Kamakani, and he was the one that raised me for the most part, with my mother of course. I grew up eating Hawiian food and learning the culture, with martial arts included. Breakfast was usually something like fried eggs with some sugar, or Chinese doughnuts, along with some Kimchee and kalo (poi), not to mention tons and tons of white rice with damn near everything.
I miss that lifestyle, and now I'm stuck out here on the east coast with all these haoles, who've never seen a Hawiian, let alone eaten any of the authentic food or experienced the culture.
*sigh*
http://www.malineage.com/martial-artists/Newt-Kamakani
http://www.findagrave.com/cgi-bin/fg.cgi?page=gr&GSln=Kamakani&GSfn=Newt&GSbyrel=all&GSdyrel=all&GSob=n&GRid=24728149&df=all&
The "flowers" left on the grave page is from my mother.
I just got done reading both chapters and it really got me hooked. I can't for more!!!!
1951300
Well I dont know any Kamakani's over here. The name sounds familiar though.
And you're right. It is sad that mainland people have not tried real fish and poi. I should bring some tako or ahi poke and watch them try it. Or better yet, Squid luau
Wow im not one for humanizing stories but this one was fucking awesome i want more of it