“Rarity, you've got a discerning eye. Help Granny Smith at the quality control station.”
Twilight’s words radiated authority and charisma. The commanding poise she exhibited was hypnotizing. Everypony obeyed without question.
There were stars in Rarity’s eyes. She almost could not restrain herself from throwing herself at Twilight’s hooves right then and there.
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“Wait… huh? What’s ‘Captain Sparkle’?”
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Rarity led Twilight up the stairs in the Boutique. The two unicorns were leaning heavily against each other, their bodies swaying in synch with every movement. The bedroom door swung open with a touch of the fashionista’s light blue aura, then closed behind them as they entered the dim room.
They didn’t bother to turn on the lights. The soft moonlight was just enough for them to discern each other’s silhouettes in the shadows.
The fashionista brushed a hoof along the librarian’s back, then wrapped her foreleg around her neck. She leaned in so that their muzzles were so close, they could feel each other’s warm breath.
Twilight lifted a hoof to Rarity’s cheek and pulled her in, closing the remaining distance.
They brought their lips together again and again as Rarity was pressed onto the bed. The pressure of Twilight’s weight upon her was making her body tingle. Rarity sighed with pleasure as Twilight traced her mouth in slow kisses along her jaw, the bookworm’s hooves running lovingly down her back and torso.
Rarity caressed Twilight’s chest, and moaned as Twilight’s muzzle moved down, smothering her neck and chest with wet kisses. Her breathing was labored now, coming in shaky gasps as her marefriend started lapping at her coat. They locked gazes, and Twilight grinned roguishly at her before nipping her neck, her teeth playing with Rarity’s skin.
The temperature was rising between them, and the fashionista wanted, even welcomed the perspiration. She wanted to be filthy, covered in Twilight’s and her own sweat and saliva… Her heartbeat quickening with need, she spread her legs open. She needed Twilight’s tongue, her horn…
The librarian was groping her now, grabbing and caressing her flank and cutie mark; mussing up her well-groomed coat as her hooves strayed lower and lower, finally hitching up the designer’s hind legs.
Rarity felt her body burning, and brushing apart Twilight’s mane, she opened her trembling mouth ever so slightly, and pressed her lips to Twilight’s horn-
And so the night went on…
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Note on edits of previous chapters:
I've combined the original chapters 1 & 2, and the new chapter 4 has some new material. The first few chapters should be easier to read now, I can't believe all those typos and weird mistakes! I am so glad that you all gave me a chance and helped my writing improve to what it currently is. And don't worry, this bonus chapter's just a dream... for now.
00000000000oooooooooo0000000ooooooooooo0000000oooooooooo been a while since this was updated. excited.
Spike should save her, after everything they done over the years it can't end like this!
Well Spike took that better than I thought. It seems like a pretty natural response though.
Oh and I guess Twilight is going to set the world on fire... I was more interested in the romance but I guess some apocalypse can't hurt a story.
Please don't take a month to update!
Spike, that's kinda sorta really mean...
Letting your sister literally explode just because she and the gal you like are in love?
Spike isn't going to become mister meanie mountain dragon again, is he?
well... if we put the magic power level of Twilight we can assume that in the worst case scenario... the Magic outburst will completely turn Ponyville and its suroundings into a gigantic soldering crater and the shockwave of the explosion will probably destroy Cloudsdale (An entire city fully made of clouds is not exactly the toughtest city in the world) and create large scale damages plus casualties in Canterlot, if one thought that the Tactical Rainnuke explosion was bad enought, the Strategical Twinuke can be considered the MOAB (Mothe Of All Bombs).
IMO, Spike SHOULD abandon them both. After everything he did for Rarity and all the teasing and nagging by Twilight for having a crush as well as Twilight and Rarity just backstabbing him, he shouldn't forgive them. Honestly he should at least berate them for all things he had to put up with from Twilight including her teasing of him and scold Rarity for the fact that he did so much for her and even gave his Fire Ruby as a gift of love to her only for her to just tease him into thinking he still had a shot at her. I'm sure some other pony will save Twilight, but really Spike I think would move out of Ponyville and into a town where he'll never be seen again.
Hm. I actually think he'll delay helping Twilight, but will come through for her and Rarity to some extent when it comes to the Poison Joke. I also don't see him leaving Ponyville, it just doesn't seem like something that'd work out well for him in terms of dealing with complete strangers or living in the wild and he knows it. I don't think he's quite at the point where he never wants to see either of them again, or he wouldn't have come back in the first place.
On the other hand, Dragon Warlock has a good point in that being around the two lovebirds day after day would just be impossible, and working as Twilight's assistant when she's with the mare he loves just wouldn't work. So I could absolutely see him moving in with Fluttershy indefinitely, she'd LOVE to have him and he'd probably be a big help tending the animals. The interaction with Angel would be priceless.
Cue Twilight having to actually do most of her own work and cooking... LOL!
I demand that spike shall i save them or a will hunt down docktor Hooves and go into the tartis to change the world
Well, I hope Spike doesn't abandon them. Running away to leave them all lovey-dovey together and be miserable is one thing, but leaving them in distress?
Well, I can't see Spike leaving the two the way things are now. Sure, Twilight broke his heart when she told him about their relationship, but he still loves Rarity, and Twilight is like a sister to him. He wouldn't just leave her two hanging! My guess is that he questions if he should or not on the way there, but in the end comes through and saves the day. At first he stays with Twi to try to get over things, but realizes he can't if he sees them together all the time. He temporarily moves in with Fluttershy (or somepony else) for an indefinite time while he tries to come to sense with his feelings.
Spike is to much of an awesome guy, and Equestria is to much of an awesome world, for something as horrible as betrayal of this magnitude for heartbreak. 'Specially against those he has loved and supported for most of his life. Sure, I can see it happening in that kind of situation, but not with Spike. Please don't corrupt my little Spikey-wikey in that horrible, horrible way!
I see some grammatical errors here and there. The most noteworthy being. . .
“Don’t go in yet! It might get worse, you haven’t seen her when she loses it like this a few years ago,” which could be changed to. . .
"Don't go in yet! It might get worse! You didn't see her when she lost control like this a few years ago."
And on the topic of Spike. The morbid idea of Twilight blowing up seems extreme in the way his thoughts, with sudden depression, led up to that conclusion. It would have been better to see Spike, after running in panic towards the spa, to slow in pace as he realizes his helplessness in being a part of Rarity's life. And the pain of being useless to Twilight when she was trying to help him.
Altogether, I mean a bit more of build up and insight on Spike's mind towards the end as he remains so weak in his resolve.
Just ideas. . . for um, helping. . .
[edit] yay, fixed some stuff in the chapter!
344651 Thanks! And well... I meant something like 'blow the place up', not Twilight herself blowing up... but you're right it does make it sound like that I'll change it after I get my hands on a faster internet connection. I love feedback!
340242 Awww, I'm so glad I could finally update it as well. Thanks for reading
340288 Tough decision But I do think he won't be so coldhearted as well.
340458 I think this has been a bit of a break for them I'll try my best to get it done faster...
340737 Well actually I don't think he'll become a big dragon again, but there'll have to be more communication between them in the future. :D
340748 That would be fun!!! Aw Twi, y u so powerful???
340948 I'm not sure about that, but it wouldn't be a very smart move (in romance!)
a. He takes himself out of the picture... all by himself! Now Twi & R can make out, clop, whatever in the library without ever worrying about being seen! --> Lose!
b. He doesn't get to see dat flank again. --> Lose!
c. He doesn't have an income, might have to depend on Twi for $. --> Lose!
on the other hoof...
If he stays:
He can 'innocently' barge in (or spy on them!) when he feels they've been inside a room for too long -> Twi & R have to be all jumpy -> spoils their mood -> might break up! ----> WIN!
And he's still there if they do. --> Win!
I wouldn't want to make out in front of any younger (and older) siblings. So Twi & R have to be extra careful if Spike's around. --> Win!
I wasn't really serious about that.
341590 Great! And now that Twi can time travel as well...
342708 I see that most of you don't want him to abandon them
344056 I like the idea of him moving in w/ and if he saves the day, maybe that could explain Rarity's behavior toward him in Dragon Quest... (just an idea)
348924 Well the emotional impact would be devastating on Twilight and Rarity. They would both feel like it's their fault for driving him away. They'd never fully recover from it even if Spike forgave them and he'd just move away from Twilight and into another home far away from Twilight and Rarity's places. Spike would never truly forgive them for what they did and thought it was just wrong of Twi to flat out tell him instead of being consulted with the others.
348924 Indeed, We're talking about a unicorn with the potential magic that can only be compared to an Alicorn, I'm more than sure that the term "Walking Magic Strategical Nuke" fits her to a T, I even statring to consider that if her magic build up keeps going up withouth any kind of relase, it will atract the atention of Princess Celestia and Princess Luna at the same time, all I can say is...COUNTDOWN TO DESTRUCTION IN 10...9...8...7....6...5...4....3...2...1...
348924 Indeed, We're talking about a unicorn with the potential magic that can only be compared to an Alicorn, I'm more than sure that the term "Walking Magic Strategical Nuke" fits her to a T, I even statring to consider that if her magic build up keeps going up withouth any kind of relase, it will atract the atention of Princess Celestia and Princess Luna at the same time, all I can say is...COUNTDOWN TO DESTRUCTION IN 10...9...8...7....6...5...4....3...2...1...348924
349076 Yeah, the emotional impact would be quite devastating! It might be even more harmful than Spike actually staying But just assuming Spike still likes Rarity, he would probably stay. And Twi's like his big sis + mom anyway...
349645 Good! I think I'll have to get the princesses on the scene as well Hadn't thought of that!
352135 It's hard to say where this will all go really. Personally, I think Spike may stay in Ponyville, but just move out and away from Twilight and Rarity's place. I don't think he'll really truly forgive them and probably wouldn't want to see them again.
352894 i really like all the ideas y'all have been giving me, or this story might have originally been really boring But thanks to you all I have better ideas and a better direction!!! Also adding details to possible ending now, tho that won't be happening all that soon
356372 You're welcome.
352135 you can use the whole "Ponyville destruction" Scene as Spike's overactive imagination acting on him when she stops for a momment and thnink more carefully the whole issue at claw
356605 I kinda want to add an adventure arc now, actually have been toying with the idea for a while now. But the ending of the story will still be the same.
356786 Yes, that's a great idea Hmm, I planned the HHD chapter quite a long time ago but I still haven't gotten around to it...
381443 Hmm well proceed then.
381483 darn I forgot to ask you what ur dA account was in the previous comment I've wanted to check it out since u mentioned it!
344651
That's my fault; I mistakenly proofed an earlier version of the chapter and so missed a good chunk of it. Hopefully anything outstanding should be fixed now/soon.
My bad!
381443 Go ahead!, If you need any help or some sugestions feel free to PM me
nice story so far, do want moar
382141 Naw, my bad
434771 Yay, thanks~~~ So am I the lucky somepony that introduced you to Rari-Twi? If not, then I'll still so glad you like this, my first fanfic
434843
ehehe! you totally are, I was right in the middle of this story yesterday as I commented on moonlit balcony
now you know you have a fan and :insertLunahere: (sigh, they changed every nook and cranny of this site this last few days, how could they not add a Luna smile???)
i think George Takei can best sum up my reaction to this Captain Sparkle dream
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459600 Yes, indeed! and that expression!
459922 It's just a really short funny weirdo thing I whipped up, feel free to run your complete awesome check over it! It's a short scrap, really. So far I think there's not really anything (apart from this ) that needs the teen tag (does kissing count?)
459935
I was referring more to the content.
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460024
Here's something fun
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btw, any thoughts on the long synopsis I sent you?
460093
I will be replying in detail this evening.
460289 Hey~ Okay if I call the next chapter 'Sabbatical'? Does it sound weird? (the chapter titles are usually really on-a-whim thingys anyway
522885
Nope, sounds fine (and ironic) to me!
522891 Yeah, that's what I thought Look at us, talking about this in the open
522976
Quickly, back to the shielded bunker!