1811563 Tell me about it, it was just heart wrenching what happened to the kid. And at the same time it was kinds pathetic at how the zombie was still trying to reach for you but in couldn't even move. I'm guessing that it's Scootaloo that's in the attic. By the way, does the zombie virus in the story work like the Walking Dead virus, or do you still have to get bitten?
Usually the zombie apocalypse thing can be either horrible or good. This, so far, surpasses good. It's an amazingly done fic that shows the rigors, trials and heartache without being an action/adventure.
I like this fic, but I have a minor complaint to file.
I believe you should take more time and pay more attention to what happens in AJ's head. Don't get me wrong, you're nailing the drama and terror of it all, and my eyes were welling up at the scenes with her friends. What I feel is not right though is that they move on far too quickly. Tears can't escape my eyes fast enough and I'm left with a painful burning, not the kind you were aiming for I think.
Take your time to summon back memories, in such stark contrast with the mangled bodies before her. Make us feel the drop in her heart, the pit in her stomach twisting and churning. Tell us a story of how Applejack discovers her most treasured memories stained in rusty red.
I'd actually like to make a few suggestions and send them to your PM. Are you okay with that? I'm not super hyper good with psychology, but let's just say I have a way with describing trauma and the world of emotions/mind. (for a prime example, read this chapter of my changeling story. The feels nearly knocked me out while writing )
My Holy Dear Celestia...
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Continue when you wish.
((AKA, MOOOORRRREEEE.))
I'm going to guess that you pulled the same thing that happened to the attic kid in episode five of the Walking Dead video game.
1811555 Heh, yea. I'll admit it. It's just that it was so profound. Y'know?
1811563 Tell me about it, it was just heart wrenching what happened to the kid. And at the same time it was kinds pathetic at how the zombie was still trying to reach for you but in couldn't even move. I'm guessing that it's Scootaloo that's in the attic. By the way, does the zombie virus in the story work like the Walking Dead virus, or do you still have to get bitten?
1811608 I've decided to keep it restricted to the bite. R.I.P. Kenny and the rest of his family.
1811617 Aman to that.
I. . . I-I need to go and cry for a bit. . .
Damn.
Some serious shit going on in this story.
I like it.
1812745 Thanks, this is exactly what I was aiming at. I wanted to deal with the serious and emotional side of the apocalypse.
Something tells me that Fluttershy might be worse....
also, daymn Scoots, you dead.
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Sooo kid in the attic?
Usually the zombie apocalypse thing can be either horrible or good. This, so far, surpasses good.
It's an amazingly done fic that shows the rigors, trials and heartache without being an action/adventure.
I like this fic, but I have a minor complaint to file.
I believe you should take more time and pay more attention to what happens in AJ's head. Don't get me wrong, you're nailing the drama and terror of it all, and my eyes were welling up at the scenes with her friends. What I feel is not right though is that they move on far too quickly. Tears can't escape my eyes fast enough and I'm left with a painful burning, not the kind you were aiming for I think.
Take your time to summon back memories, in such stark contrast with the mangled bodies before her. Make us feel the drop in her heart, the pit in her stomach twisting and churning. Tell us a story of how Applejack discovers her most treasured memories stained in rusty red.
I'd actually like to make a few suggestions and send them to your PM. Are you okay with that? I'm not super hyper good with psychology, but let's just say I have a way with describing trauma and the world of emotions/mind. (for a prime example, read this chapter of my changeling story. The feels nearly knocked me out while writing )
This story is amazing!!!!! I can't wait for the next chapter :)
I am now officially terrified.
Please continue as I need to know what's in the attic that's terrifying everypony.