It's late, so I may not be entirely coherent, but the whole thing with Shining not telling Twilight what he was doing bothers me because Twilight's issue is with trust. You don't teach trust utilizing deception. Anyway I might comment more once I've had some rest.
Okay, so, a pretty sweet chapter. I hope Shining is more honest about his plans from now on, and I hope Twilight can get better soon. A patient should, whenever possible, direct the course of their own treatment, and Twi is starting to do that, so that looks like a good sign. It's obvious they love each other, they just need to work on some communication.
There was some nice clop in there, too. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
“Cereal’s fine. I’ve got a craving for some I guess.” Shining Armor shrugged and fixed a bowl for himself, then sat with Twilight.
Shining Armor's actions should be on the next line, otherwise it looks like he's the one speaking.
her reached a hoof up to stroke her horn
"he"
Also, "apologiizng", "ShiningArmor" and "forgivenhim".
This was very sweet. Shining's methods raise some eyebrows, but I liked the little bit of clop at the end. I'm curious as to how this is going to be resolved, especially Cadance's part of the plot.
This is really nice from what I've read so far! <3 The only thing is, I can't seem t find the original cover picture in MysticAlpha's dA OR the pony derivative. Do you know where I can find a smaller version of that pic? I want it for my desktop and it's much too big. (giggity)
3321351 Mystic never posted it to his page for some reason. We're the only two people who have it(as far as I know) and there's no smaller version, you'll have to resize it yourself.
it's... it's an uptdate imageneschidas.info/wp-content/uploads/2012/05/mind-blown.gif
It's late, so I may not be entirely coherent, but the whole thing with Shining not telling Twilight what he was doing bothers me because Twilight's issue is with trust. You don't teach trust utilizing deception. Anyway I might comment more once I've had some rest.
I did like this chapter, though.
Took you long enough.
Delightful!
Okay, so, a pretty sweet chapter. I hope Shining is more honest about his plans from now on, and I hope Twilight can get better soon. A patient should, whenever possible, direct the course of their own treatment, and Twi is starting to do that, so that looks like a good sign. It's obvious they love each other, they just need to work on some communication.
There was some nice clop in there, too. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Shining Armor's actions should be on the next line, otherwise it looks like he's the one speaking.
"he"
Also, "apologiizng", "ShiningArmor" and "forgivenhim".
This was very sweet. Shining's methods raise some eyebrows, but I liked the little bit of clop at the end. I'm curious as to how this is going to be resolved, especially Cadance's part of the plot.
I like this story. And Look forward it's continue.
Pretty dang great!
Will this be continued?
3238646 I do plan on finishing this, but I do not have any time frame in mind. :l
This is really nice from what I've read so far! <3 The only thing is, I can't seem t find the original cover picture in MysticAlpha's dA OR the pony derivative. Do you know where I can find a smaller version of that pic? I want it for my desktop and it's much too big. (giggity)
3321351
Mystic never posted it to his page for some reason. We're the only two people who have it(as far as I know) and there's no smaller version, you'll have to resize it yourself.