Ah, the joys of:

A work in progress. As I explain, this isn't a new chapter but is rather the second half of the previous big, long chapter. Hopefully, all will now be well structurally!

Mike

What a charming bunch Fluttershy's family appear to be. No wonder the company of a psychotic lagomorph does not faze her!

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Just wait:

Mom and Dad are even moreso...

Mike

I. Was ready to stomp ragweed from the first few words. Good job

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And he's:

The reasonable one in the family...

Mike

... The sex and intimacy would be so much better if there was more details rather than just throwing it out there and skimming over it. Don't take it the wrong way it's a nice fic. But there is so little detail that it is just anti-climatic and highly disappointing. Seeing something that could be romantic, emotionally invigorating, and beautiful [and from what I see from how you handle this story you could do love making without it being smut.].

But as it stands I almost want to ask if you could cut the sex scenes since it's painful to read. You rather than, foreplay; intimacy; the act; the after glow. It's just underdone to the point of being as bad as if it was over done. I can understand not wanting it to take over the story if that's your problem. But if that's the case could you possibly do the sex scene story route where you put a link in a chapter to the story that has the more indepth scenes that were skimmed over? Thus those of us who'd like to see more can see more? Or maybe possibly, add more detail to it?

Thank you and other than that. I'm loving the fic so far.

[Edit:]

Chapter 7 had the first great love scene in the series so far. Well done on that part btw.