This thing is just all over the place with random violence and now a magic possessed ring. There is barely any continuity. It seems more like words vomited onto the page by a madman than anything else.
I feel the need to add a comment now. Firstly, I'm sorry that it's fucked up. I'm sorry, but that's just how I write. Like Alondro said, maybe I am a madman, but if I where, I wouldn't know. And I'd like to adress some things he said as well.
Yes, there's a lot of violence coming out of nowhere, but there is a point to it. And yes, maybe my continuity is shit, and I'm sorry about that. The ring that's been here since the second chapter isn't just some random plot.. thing, it's what everything has been building up to.
And after this point in the story, everything really goes downhill. For everyone.
lol hello every one... dark days for dark stories... having a great time reading this lol. Ok here is the thing there is indeed a little of random violence here, and to such there is little build up, work on that and it would be more catchy
It's a good thing I've almost gotten through the backstory for Patricidium (at least judging by the chapter titles), because with any luck I can stop there and leave these assholes to their fates.
This is truly a fucked up story.
So he's killed two ponies now, serial killer look out!
Ah hell...
This is gettin rather fucked up!
Well, as Dwight Yokum sang about, maybe little sister won't do what big sister did lol
Another good, and yet most darkest story I ever readed.
(sobs) friendship is DEAD!!!!
nicely written but.....oh god WHY!!
This thing is just all over the place with random violence and now a magic possessed ring. There is barely any continuity. It seems more like words vomited onto the page by a madman than anything else.
I feel the need to add a comment now. Firstly, I'm sorry that it's fucked up. I'm sorry, but that's just how I write.
Like Alondro said, maybe I am a madman, but if I where, I wouldn't know. And I'd like to adress some things he said as well.
Yes, there's a lot of violence coming out of nowhere, but there is a point to it. And yes, maybe my continuity is shit, and I'm sorry about that.
The ring that's been here since the second chapter isn't just some random plot.. thing, it's what everything has been building up to.
And after this point in the story, everything really goes downhill. For everyone.
One point in this chapter made me give it a wtf look.
Actually, more like two hundred something thousand years
lol hello every one... dark days for dark stories... having a great time reading this lol. Ok here is the thing there is indeed a little of random violence here, and to such there is little build up, work on that and it would be more catchy
HE IS POSSESED! QUICK, EVERYPONY GET IN A CIRCLE AROUND DUST! DONT WORRY DUST, WE WILL GET THE DEMON OUT OF YOU!!!!
It's a good thing I've almost gotten through the backstory for Patricidium (at least judging by the chapter titles), because with any luck I can stop there and leave these assholes to their fates.