It is a beautiful morning in the small town of Ponyville. In a house in the clouds their lives a pony that goes by the name, Rainbow Dash. She had a cloud with a rainbow lightning bolt for a cutie mark and had a blue body with a rainbow mane. She is the best flyer in Equestria and that because of the spectacular sonic rainboom. She is also a member of the mane 6 (or what the princess calls it, The Elements of Harmony).
The sun rises over her bed. The sunlight soon went over her eyes.
“Mom just five more minutes,” she mumbled
She opens her eyes slightly and looks around. She got out of bed and went out of her house toward the town. So far everything was peaceful. The birds were chirping the flowers are blooming; it seemed like a beautiful day, nothing out of the ordinary. Rainbow went to Twilight’s house to just hang out.
“Morning Twilight,” said Rainbow
“Not now, I'm studying,” said Twilight
“You need to stop researching and start hanging with your friend.”
“Sorry Rainbow, I just can't hang out right now, I have to write a report on pony nature and I have to read a book on it.”
“ You're not in school anymore, you can do anything now in your life and you're wasting it on studying. Don’t you already know about pony nature, you're supposed to know that in 2nd grade?”
“I want to learn that again; you will probably never understand me, unless you read my mind.”
“Ok then continue on you stupid studies, I have better things to do.”
Rainbow walks out of the library, she pays no attention to Twilight.
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Stein gets ready for an attack on the small town of Ponyville. He has prepared a plan for the attack. The orb has the power to detect the mane 6 and can guide anyone to them. He has also prepared a gas to makes them fall asleep for 3 hours. Since he knows that some of the mane 6 are unicorns he will put a spell on them to make it that they can’t use magic. Stein’s plan was perfectly planned. He was ready for any situation. The ship looked like an alien spacecraft with lights, jets, everything you suspect in an alien spacecraft.
His ship takes off and heads toward the mainland. He gets out a map and circled were Ponyville is.
“I need to set the autopilot to head there or I might lead this ship into a desert.”
The ship is on course to Ponyville.
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Rainbow flies toward Cloudsdale to see the weather report for Ponyville. When she walked into the weather center of Cloudsdale she saw her boss. She was an orange pony and had a black mane, also having a cloud with droplets as her cutie mark.
“Good morning Sunrise,” Rainbow said lightly
“Morning Rainbow, did you come to pick up the Ponyville weather report for tomorrow?” asked Sunrise
“Yep I did.”
“I planned it, In Ponyville tomorrow there supposed to be partly cloudy.”
“Great, I'm going to get the clouds and then I'm out of here.”
“You seem to like it when it’s partly cloudy, why do you like it so much?”
“Sometimes in the middle of the day I take a nap and when its sunny outside I have to sleep on a tree and sleeping on wood is not pleasant. If it’s partly cloudy, cloudy, or raining I can sleep on a cloud in the middle of the day and if it’s raining outside I can spend the day above the clouds and sleep.”
“Ok back to work.”
Rainbow looks outside and looked at Ponyville. It looked very beautiful from her view in Cloudsdale, but it wasn't beautiful for long. An alien ship appeared in the distance and it was headed right toward Ponyville. She runs back inside and worries about her friends.
“I need to protect them and to do that I need to beat the ship to Ponyville or who knows what’s going to happen.” She thought
She runs out of the building and goes into a downward possession toward the ground. She flaps her wings as fast as she could. A Mach cone forms around her, in a matter a seconds a loud boom and a rainbow circle exploded like she was going into a portal. Her speed doubles and now she is unstoppable.
“I will be in Ponyville in no time.”
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Princess Celestia is looking outside of the castle thinking it’s a beautiful day but she was worried about Ponyville as the ship came closer to the tiny town.
“Hey sis, what’s going on today?” asked Luna
“Look over there,” said Celestia
Luna looks at Ponyville from her view from Canterlot. It did not take her long to figure out what was going on.
“This looks like a dangerous situation,” Luna worried
All of a sudden there was a loud boom and when both of the princesses looked to see was it was they were surprised.
“A Sonic Rainboom, That must Rainbow Dash heading back to Ponyville as fast as she could,” said Celesta
“We need to take action now what do you want the guards to do?”
“Tell them to block off every road that goes to Ponyville and evacuate all of the town and ponies can get out but no pony will get in.”
“But I don't think that the guards will make it in time to evacuate the town.”
“Then tell them to lay low.”
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Rainbow makes it back into Ponyville and stops at the library.
“Twilight, you need to come outside like now.”
“But I’m in the middle of reading this really good book.”
“But there is something much more important than a book.”
“Then what is that?”
Rainbow Dash bites Twilight by the tail.
“Ouch don't do that.”
Rainbow drags Twilight outside. It did not take long for Twilight to realize what was going on.
“What’s going on here, I see a ship right over Ponyville.”
A ship compartment hangs out of the ship and in it was a white ball which looked like an orb, it was filled with power. Twilight and Rainbow look at themselves and find a glittery substance coming out of them and into the orb. Rarity, Pinkie Pie, Fluttershy, and Applejack run up to both of them.
“What in tarnation,” yelled Applejack?
“Maybe that ship up there will give us all free cupcakes,” said Pinkie
“I don't like the look of that ship; it looks disgusting, I will never put my hooves on that,” said Rarity
“I'm scared; I'm so scared right now I think I want to scream, Aaaaaaaaaahhhhhhh!” Fluttershy yelled quietly
Twilight looks at them carefully and finds that there is a glittery substance coming out of her friends as well. The ship drops a ball on top of the mane 6. Ones it hit the ground it exploded on them with smoke everywhere. Twilight fainted with Applejack following. Pinkie Pie fell to the ground along with Rarity and Fluttershy. Rainbow Dash was the last one standing and before she fell to the ground she saw a green, brown mare pony laughing. Rainbow faints and falls to the ground, she was now unable to move. Now she is hoping when she wakes up she will be alive.
>>opuscon789 Did you see my comment on the previous chapter?
1556419 yes
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I did spell check some of the words underlining just disappeared. I have no idea why it did that but it happened. I am also autistic
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I will put the teaser thing in there right now but the orb will be explained in another chapter
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So I was looking around the websites stories and found that you are commenting on stories that have problems in them. you were making horrible comments and its getting on my nerves. I support these writer even if they make mistakes. your just making it worst for them and me because you're putting up nasty comments. I am not a clueless brat and no one is. you're seeing it like I am stupid or something. next time just tell the writer that you're improving and that will help them.
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I sincerely hope you don't believe you just made a valid reply. Minus the bad grammar and spelling involved in said reply, it's utterly uninformed. The TWE go around making comments on bad stories to help people. They point out what's wrong so they improve, no one gets better if they aren't critiqued on their performance. If they do bad, then they should be told they're doing bad and what is bad about them.
You "Supporting" these bad stories is more a detriment to them. They make them better, not worse. Maybe if you stopped writing bad fictions, you wouldn't run into them as much? Just saying.
And yes, there are clueless brats on this site, quite a few of them. Take the advice and experience they have to offer.
To be honest, it sounded like you're whining because people don't like your stories.
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Oh god what the fuck...First of all, Evil Homer has told multiple people how to improve.
Secondly, claiming you're autistic does nothing for you.
Third, c'mon man... Spell check, get a prereader, read over your story and so on. It's not that hard to have proper grammar and spelling in a story, so don't give me this crap about "spell check is not working" or "books do nothing for me" because we both know that's bullshit.
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In a mean way
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Arrgh! So... child... as I know not if ye are a lad or lass and don't wish to insult ye, ye know not of Evil Homer's methods.
Aye, he be a caustic one and I wouldst like not to be on the receivin' end of his comments but that don't mean he does it to be mean. Neigh, that be simply his way. Homer has helped many on this site, and there be folks that be very grateful for his aid. It be those that take his words personally that have a problem with him. Also, he be replyin' to comments if they reply to him. If ye don't want him to continue replying with a broadside of sarcasm an' abuse then ye should simply not respond, ignore him or thank him for his time and say ye'll try to fix the issues with yer story.
And claimin ye be autistic for yer problems will not win ye any sympathy here. Evil Homer himself has the Aspergers as do many in the TWE.
There be a spellcheck, that mean you use it. There be editors and proofreaders on this site, take advantage o' them.
And, finally if this truly be writin' for fun then yer best bet is to ignore all comments be they good or not. If ye are the only one that matters to yer writin' then the words of others be worth nothin'.
Yaargh! The Crimson Brony has spoken!
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I don't like them personally
TWE needs to stop telling bad story writer and trolling and start appreciating them and just read what you have. I am not the only one that have people not liking my stories. The guy I following has no likes on it. so at least ignore the bad spelling and punctuation.
1556892 you act like you you worship him
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Neigh, The Crimson Brony bends the knee to no man but I give him th' respect he deserves.
Tis up to ye if'n you be listenin' to our words but attackin' yer critics who are tryin' to help ye is never a good thing.
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In his defense, I doubt Celestia has an Equestrian version of Homeland Security checking for her.
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That would be awesome
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I Don't get it
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What be it than ye be not gettin'?
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No, YOU need to stop being butthurt and just take the criticism.
Ignore the...DO YOU HAVE ANY IDEA WHERE YOU ARE AND WHAT YOU ARE DOING?!
You're writing stories, no one wants to read a poorly written story! And when your story manages to get more than, at most, three people, THEN you can talk down the TWE. But until then, you can't, most of them have been featured on this site. You only get appreciation for writing a good story, if I read crap I'm not gonna be thankful for someone writing it. You're asking for charity, and this site is not the place to get it. You want that? Take your crappy story to Fanfiction.net
In the words of one of my favorite songs, "I think you need a shotgun blast, a kick in the a$$."
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I'm already on fanfiction.net I just started this acount and I don't care what you say
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Of course you don't, because you're a bad author.
The difference between fimfiction and fanfiction, is that we expect quality and will call you out when it's not there.
Well guess what, buddy.
RING RING!
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I don't get the ring ring part
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Arrgh! Methinks we have another Chris-Chan on our hands.
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I don't know what that is
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Google be yer friend. The Crimson Brony will not do yer homework fer ye.
Ye've been given good advice by the good people here, more than ye deserve but nobody here can force ye to take it.
Keep tiltin' at windmills lad and ye'll never improve.
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Forsooth, the foreigner shows himself to be informal to the basics of literary knowledge. I say unto you that one should not assault this horse, 'tis already passed away. And lest ye wishes upon thyself to be filled with frustration, leave the foolish to their tomfoolery. Any attempt otherwise would simply be farce.
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Aye, ye be right. Tis' a shame he could not be reasoned with.
Arrgh! It be time for me rum. I be havin' a spot o' dinner now then some time with me wench.
Har Har Har! She be seeing me Long John Silver tonight!
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stop talking like a pirate
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It's not by choice you know. He has an incredibly rare syndrome called ARRRRspergers.
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who does
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ooo I get it
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does that even exist
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...
Okay,
1: I was referring to the guy you were just talking to.
2: you need to edit your story. BADLY
3: My humor is completely Gorram lost on you, isn't it?
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Just drop the conversation I don't want to talk about this anymore
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My conversations have a tendency to bounce back up with exactly the same momentum, so dropping it would be pointless.
FYI: I AM A DICK.
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No comment
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My good sir, do I have a chapter for you.
Death Of Celestia
What happens when your special talent is killing someone? What happens when that someone happens to be completely immortal?
Comedy apparently.
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Arrgh! I be doing nothing of the sort.
A pirate I be and a pirate I be talking like.
1557956 ok
1557905 Okay bud, I'm going to let Flutters say something real quick.
: Um, excuse me mister, but wouldn't it have made more sense to leave it blank?
1558052 whatever that means and i'm more of a Rainbow Dash fan
1558065Ugh. I have used up two of my annually allocated emoticons conducting this pointless conversation. I will leave nothing left to ponder about:
You said 'No Comment' but that counts as a comment, so wouldn't it have made more sense not to post a comment if you didn't want to comment? Also, I did not use the Flutters persona because she is best pony (besides, Luna amiright?) I used it because she is shy but often portrayed as observent; therefore, she would have picked up the BLATANT logical error you just made. Great. you pissed me off, now I'm gonna go set something on fire.
1558105 good luck do you need some gas with that
1558121NO, my flamer comes with all of the ammo that it needs.
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so stop talking to me and you won't have this problem
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My other computer takes too long to boot up. This is Idle entertainment until it is done exploding.
PS: you really should listen to the TWE; while they are about as subtle as a brick to the nuts, they have helped many writers out of their 'beginner' stage.
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this in not entertainment to me
1558164Idle entertainment doesn't (by definition) have to be fun as such, it merely has to keep me preoccupied.
1558172 go watch some smosh then to keep yourself entertained
1558198Nope, I'm good. Prisoner #23 just made a break for it and now I get to chase her down and drag her Latino ass RIGHT back to her cell! You here that Esrensa?! I'm COMING FOR YOU!
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you don't know where I live