Whao I'll never understand women and their "amazing spots" i mean, it's just a hole right? i dont get how a hole can hold all these different spots. if i was to ever esplain it, my best guesstimate would be there are different sections on the wall like a cave painted different colors, one for each sensation...LOL i dunno
What the hell? I know exactly what her cutie mark means! It means she is addicted and has a will to weak to hold it back. I mean really, same day as you ran away saying you needed to think, you ose your virginity to a hypocrite. Still like it though.
Interesting story. I am liking the character, Passion Berry, very munch. I think that the story was a bit rushed though. It is your first, but you could have expanded this much more. Her cutie mark should have appeared much later though, after she found out that she has a special ability for attracting people. I thought that you only get your cutie mark when you have found your special talent, and she got it without knowing . But, whatryahgunnado. The story after she kissed Cheerilee was a bit weird and hard to understand. They kissed, she got her cutie mark, then ran away, then hooked up with fluttershy. What the crap went on there?
In any case, i am looking forward to reading the rest. You have not yet earned a full applause, so here is a golf clap for you. :D
An advice from a fellow writer -- a clop writer: Don't use marehood too much, cause it tends to get old when used too often. Try using some different words, oh, and don't be afraid to be vulgar; we could take it, since your objective is to arouse the readers.
THis. Is. PERFECT...
Her talent is
...being a slut? LOL
Whao
I'll never understand women and their "amazing spots"
i mean, it's just a hole right? i dont get how a hole can hold all these different spots.
if i was to ever esplain it, my best guesstimate would be there are different sections on the wall like a cave painted different colors, one for each sensation...LOL i dunno
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its kinda like how there's a spot on everyone to make them shit themselves... lol
it is great working with you on this, and your a great writer! keep up the good work
1430679not sure if DAFUQ
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Hahaha
Boy, that escalated quickly. I mean that really got out of hand fast.
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All part of my plan! Muahahaha
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What the hell? I know exactly what her cutie mark means! It means she is addicted and has a will to weak to hold it back. I mean really, same day as you ran away saying you needed to think, you ose your virginity to a hypocrite.
Still like it though.
Gotta say digging the story, perhaps there will be a CMC chapter? Would love to read one with applebllom. Por favor
Must,,,resist...urge...to....Insert...my...oc...into...this... GOD DAMMIT, IT'S SO HARD!!!!!!!
her cutie mark:
im gonna guess that none of you noticed that before.
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@ buggles' post>>1432780
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Interesting story. I am liking the character, Passion Berry, very munch. I think that the story was a bit rushed though. It is your first, but you could have expanded this much more. Her cutie mark should have appeared much later though, after she found out that she has a special ability for attracting people. I thought that you only get your cutie mark when you have found your special talent, and she got it without knowing . But, whatryahgunnado. The story after she kissed Cheerilee was a bit weird and hard to understand. They kissed, she got her cutie mark, then ran away, then hooked up with fluttershy. What the crap went on there?
In any case, i am looking forward to reading the rest. You have not yet earned a full applause, so here is a golf clap for you. :D
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An advice from a fellow writer -- a clop writer: Don't use marehood too much, cause it tends to get old when used too often. Try using some different words, oh, and don't be afraid to be vulgar; we could take it, since your objective is to arouse the readers.
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