Ok, i loved this story. But the ending made me cringe. Its not generally bad but i personally have a minor blood phobia, but i also have a MUCH BIGGER Phobia of wrists. i know its strange but yeah, the idea of someone slitting their wrist just...
Hmm great story but the ending was laking a lot of explination it mad enough sense but it just feels like it could have been a lot better man but the last bit was funny I'll give you that.
Well, that was bit anticlimactic. I hoping for a little more suffering on Midnight's end, maybe a trial or an execution, and sparing Fluttershy felt a bit like a cop out. It was well written, however.
The reason Midnight never had a confrontation is because he never planned to have a confrontation. There was never supposed to me a big climax for a character who just wanted to die. I will agree the ending could have been better, so I did add in something, but besides that, there wasn't too much I could do with this character. And I've already been over Fluttershy. Nonetheless, thanks to everyone who took the time to read this. Whether you enjoyed it or not, at least you gave it a shot!
Like I said, I have an idea in the works for a new story with distinct change of mood, so I hope to see you all again.
97278 Wow. Thank you a bunch! I was trying to go for a "tragic villain" at the end there. Chatting with you in these comments has been fun, and I'm really glad you ended up liking it!
i though he was going to fight with the other guards until he couldn't go on and they finish him in the middle of the yard.. but in the end i felt sympathy for the Midnight Character.. if i ever have a work as royal guard... i'll follow his steps... :P
This is a befitting ending for a character such as Midnight, the universe let him go ou on his own terms. But If there is one thing I've learned, it's that the universe is the biggest troll ever, I say bring him back for a sequel, make him make up for his mistakes, or maybe a happy ending?
98064 Exactly! Make it to wear God or somepony will grant him his life back so he could spend the rest of his life with Twilight, but in order to do so he must go back in time and stop himself from killing Winter and killing himself! Or to some extent like that.
98064 98187 You know, if you guys really want, I may make a short follow up story giving Midnight a chance at a happy ending. I've got three requests going, but I don't see why that isn't an option for afterwords!
Meh. I didn't even read the alternative ending after reading the comments. Personally, I like this ending better. There...are too many "happy" endings and it bums me out that writers /make/ the ending happy. Sometimes it just feels unnatural. And besides, with this ending, Midnight eventually accomplished his final goal; dying instead of living out his days in a miserable stupor.
Teehee. But all in all, me gusta this story! I read it all in one sitting it was just that good. I even held off a nap cause I wanted to keep reading. Hope that Aj is ok, since she got sliced and all. Do wonder what Dash wanted to say.. maybe she had feelings for Midnight? fufufu. And atleast Mid had a heart. He didn't want to traumatize Fluttershy and he didn't kill the ponies after raping them. And plus it wasn't really violent rape.
I'll be honest and say that you completely lost me past the 'An hour later' part, and I gave up reading. I couldn't imagine the heel-face-turn working, and I didn't like at all.
Generally, the story wasn't for me and just isn't my thing. Yet was pretty well thought-out, and I like the way it was written. So even though I got no enjoyment from reading this, I'd still give it the thumbs-up.
Well the story is done now. As I said, go over to my blog post if you have a request for a clopfic, because I'm open to ideas now!
Although I do have an idea for another story, but it's only a vague thought so far.
WAIT WHAT ABOUT PRINCESS CELESTIA AND EVERYPONY ELSE?!?! BUT..BUT NUUUUU! need more confrontation!
Ok, i loved this story. But the ending made me cringe. Its not generally bad but i personally have a minor blood phobia, but i also have a MUCH BIGGER Phobia of wrists. i know its strange but yeah, the idea of someone slitting their wrist just...
Awesome job though!
Hmm great story but the ending was laking a lot of explination it mad enough sense but it just feels like it could have been a lot better man but the last bit was funny I'll give you that.
Well, that was bit anticlimactic. I hoping for a little more suffering on Midnight's end, maybe a trial or an execution, and sparing Fluttershy felt a bit like a cop out. It was well written, however.
The reason Midnight never had a confrontation is because he never planned to have a confrontation. There was never supposed to me a big climax for a character who just wanted to die. I will agree the ending could have been better, so I did add in something, but besides that, there wasn't too much I could do with this character. And I've already been over Fluttershy. Nonetheless, thanks to everyone who took the time to read this. Whether you enjoyed it or not, at least you gave it a shot!
Like I said, I have an idea in the works for a new story with distinct change of mood, so I hope to see you all again.
97245 fair enough but even so the princess would've came for an explination
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Wow. Thank you a bunch! I was trying to go for a "tragic villain" at the end there. Chatting with you in these comments has been fun, and I'm really glad you ended up liking it!
i though he was going to fight with the other guards until he couldn't go on and they finish him in the middle of the yard.. but in the end i felt sympathy for the Midnight Character.. if i ever have a work as royal guard... i'll follow his steps... :P
so, we got Pinkie, Dash, Rarity and Twilight. We know what happens to AJ.
What about Fluttershy?
Then He becomes my personal guard 4 all eternity as punishment why? because I am evil.
Awesome story my good sir I really like it even if I feel kind of sad 4 the guard.
Oh well no more time 2 waste rise and shine Undead Midnight!
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You, my sir, win one thirds an internet!
As a joke, I should write a story about Midnight coming back as an undead pony!
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Oh my good sir that would be more than just wonderful if you did such a thing.
This is a befitting ending for a character such as Midnight, the universe let him go ou on his own terms. But If there is one thing I've learned, it's that the universe is the biggest troll ever, I say bring him back for a sequel, make him make up for his mistakes, or maybe a happy ending?
98064 Exactly! Make it to wear God or somepony will grant him his life back so he could spend the rest of his life with Twilight, but in order to do so he must go back in time and stop himself from killing Winter and killing himself! Or to some extent like that.
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You know, if you guys really want, I may make a short follow up story giving Midnight a chance at a happy ending. I've got three requests going, but I don't see why that isn't an option for afterwords!
98219 That would be awesome! Thank you kind sir/madam!
Crazy rapists do not deserve a happy ending, honestly
Meh. I didn't even read the alternative ending after reading the comments. Personally, I like this ending better. There...are too many "happy" endings and it bums me out that writers /make/ the ending happy. Sometimes it just feels unnatural. And besides, with this ending, Midnight eventually accomplished his final goal; dying instead of living out his days in a miserable stupor.
Teehee. But all in all, me gusta this story! I read it all in one sitting it was just that good. I even held off a nap cause I wanted to keep reading. Hope that Aj is ok, since she got sliced and all. Do wonder what Dash wanted to say.. maybe she had feelings for Midnight? fufufu. And atleast Mid had a heart. He didn't want to traumatize Fluttershy and he didn't kill the ponies after raping them. And plus it wasn't really violent rape.
TL;DR Me gusta this ending and this story.
If only the twilight part was first..
I'll be honest and say that you completely lost me past the 'An hour later' part, and I gave up reading. I couldn't imagine the heel-face-turn working, and I didn't like at all.
Generally, the story wasn't for me and just isn't my thing. Yet was pretty well thought-out, and I like the way it was written. So even though I got no enjoyment from reading this, I'd still give it the thumbs-up.
Or, five out of five on the insane-o-gram:
123957 if only...