Thirteen years after Shining accidentally got his daughter pregnant trying to quell her first heat, their lovechild is starting HER first heat. Cadance is terrified that their already complicated situation is about to get worse.
A trainwreck, flaming wreckage, but no this is fine. Why am I getting the feeling I've read this story before even though I know I haven't? I can definitely say its been a long time since I've read a story that hits all the right notes to be both revolting to me, and still provoke a sexual response. Thanks. I hate it. Good job.
Can I just say how refreshing it is to see a story where Shining and Flurry are the villains, while Cadance is the protagonist? Very rare in these parts.
I really need Cadance to lay an unholy smackdown on Flurry at this point.
Aaaaaand Twily drops the last bomb on any clinging to Shining Armor's rationalizations. Wonder if that will even cross the mind of either of his daughters. Maybe Remedy, she doesn't seem to be the same type of kink-driven lunatic her parents are.
Particularly not her mother. Shiny blew up any hope for sympathy, sure, but Flurry is just being either the biggest Equestrian Idiot, or downright vicious with how much she wants to rub her mother's nose in Shining Armor's mess.
11687332 Shining is deluded but Flurry is a psycho. She's the Frankenstein monster he unintentionally created and we'll see more evidence of that in the end.
I like how Spike is enjoying the spectacle, it feels like he's not going let Twilight live this one down anytime soon. Most stories like this tend to just forget he exists, It's nice to see one having fun with him.
11687757 Originally I DID forget he existed. It's been a struggle to keep this kind of sad and sinister tale funny when it has so many gut punches. The dinner scene needed some assistance. Cadance's remarks are funny but also cruel and biting. I decided Spike could fill the role of bystander with little stakes in the fight who could more or less just enjoy the drama for what it was, soften the edges and be a sort of comedic surrogate for the reader.
What frustrates me the most in this story is that Shinning pretty much gave Remedy no choice. I don’t mean consent wise, more that he’s trying to keep her from being with another colt, but then jumps at the idea of being the one to take her virginity. It makes his quips about “her dignity” feel like a thinly veiled excuse. I’m not sure if he was doing this consciously, but LORD ALMIGHTY I hate Shining Armor in this one.
…Of course that’s part of the fun and I’m looking forward to see where this train wreck of a family end up afterwards.
GOD FUCKING I HATE THIS SO MUCH BUT ITS SO GOOD. I believe Shining Armor is a full on rapist at this point without knowing it, but man FLURRY WHAT THE FUCK. I feel we need a redemption for Flurry because she does not deserve this, I have a feeling her storyline will not go well because of how fucked up she is now but man...
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A trainwreck, flaming wreckage, but no this is fine. Why am I getting the feeling I've read this story before even though I know I haven't? I can definitely say its been a long time since I've read a story that hits all the right notes to be both revolting to me, and still provoke a sexual response. Thanks. I hate it. Good job.
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Lol. That is sort of the dichotomy of my clop stories but this one in particular feels like a cut above the others.
Can I just say how refreshing it is to see a story where Shining and Flurry are the villains, while Cadance is the protagonist? Very rare in these parts.
I really need Cadance to lay an unholy smackdown on Flurry at this point.
Aaaaaand Twily drops the last bomb on any clinging to Shining Armor's rationalizations. Wonder if that will even cross the mind of either of his daughters. Maybe Remedy, she doesn't seem to be the same type of kink-driven lunatic her parents are.
Particularly not her mother. Shiny blew up any hope for sympathy, sure, but Flurry is just being either the biggest Equestrian Idiot, or downright vicious with how much she wants to rub her mother's nose in Shining Armor's mess.
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Shining is deluded but Flurry is a psycho. She's the Frankenstein monster he unintentionally created and we'll see more evidence of that in the end.
I loved this chapter. It had everything I wanted and still surprised me. The best is yet to come.
I like how Spike is enjoying the spectacle, it feels like he's not going let Twilight live this one down anytime soon. Most stories like this tend to just forget he exists, It's nice to see one having fun with him.
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Originally I DID forget he existed. It's been a struggle to keep this kind of sad and sinister tale funny when it has so many gut punches. The dinner scene needed some assistance. Cadance's remarks are funny but also cruel and biting. I decided Spike could fill the role of bystander with little stakes in the fight who could more or less just enjoy the drama for what it was, soften the edges and be a sort of comedic surrogate for the reader.
What frustrates me the most in this story is that Shinning pretty much gave Remedy no choice. I don’t mean consent wise, more that he’s trying to keep her from being with another colt, but then jumps at the idea of being the one to take her virginity. It makes his quips about “her dignity” feel like a thinly veiled excuse. I’m not sure if he was doing this consciously, but LORD ALMIGHTY I hate Shining Armor in this one.
…Of course that’s part of the fun and I’m looking forward to see where this train wreck of a family end up afterwards.
GOD FUCKING I HATE THIS SO MUCH BUT ITS SO GOOD. I believe Shining Armor is a full on rapist at this point without knowing it, but man FLURRY WHAT THE FUCK. I feel we need a redemption for Flurry because she does not deserve this, I have a feeling her storyline will not go well because of how fucked up she is now but man...
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Now I'm imagining this closing with an Oompa-Loompa song.
im with ya spike, this shit crazy