Rainbow Dash hangs out with Twilight at her place. When Twilight is having a hard time answering one of her questions, Rainbow Dash figures out the answer. This shocks Twilight and ask Rainbow Dash how it's possible for her to know the answer in which Rainbow Dash hesitantly answers that question.
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I hope there is a sequel to this story that tells us what happened to Tisha.
Did she get arrested for the crimes she committed against Rainbow Dash? Did she get accepted into the school and become a major success? Did she come to regret her actions and wants to truly seek forgiveness from Rainbow Dash?
There are many questions that have yet to be answered.
could use some polishing, the plotline was good, the details could use some work
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Alright I'll work on that when I do other stories!
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Yeah doing a sequel for this would be very cool to do :)
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I also have another story that I'm currently working to finish, it's called "The Great and Unhinged Duo". I think you should check it out to see if it interests you!
Good story. I somehow expected Tisha to become Twilight, and her and Dash to have started off as earth ponies. (The horn just happened to alter the brain waves of the recipient.)
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Thanks bro, it's difficult to read your comment since you blocked some words out.
Hey there! This is an interesting concept. Though it has been done a lot in the show, I think you have an interesting twist on it with a splash of tragedy for drama.
That said, I had a hard time following this story. You have very long stretches where two characters are talking back and forth, and it was hard for me to follow who was supposed to be saying once. An easy fix for that is to note at the end of each sentence who is speaking. For example:
My other suggestion is to sprinkle some narration into your dialogue to show how each pony reacts to what the other is saying, like this:
Naming each speaker and describing their reactions to each other are great ways to make sure your dialogue stays clear and interesting. Remember, a story is about more than what the characters say. Sometimes, what they do shows more than any amount of dialogue every could, so use that to your advantage.
Keep up the good work!
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Thanks for the advice! Also I have another story that I'm currently working on the next chapter for which is called "The Great and Unhinged Duo." I think you should check it out.
It's very good and everything, the concept is interesting and makes for a good plot, the problem is that it's not believable, we're talking about twilight sparkle, a genius among geniuses not only in the area of magic, but also chemistry, physics , biology, astronomy, astrology, even some botany and many other areas, that a question like that, and the fact that twilight's answer to everything is magic, doesn't make any sense, like in the pinkie sense episode, twilight could have said it was magic and that was over, but she gave pinkie every imaginable physical test.
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Yes Twilight is very intelligent, but sometimes in certain situations she over think things. A good example for this is the episode Lesson Zero. Where in that episode she didn't know how to get a friendship lesson for Celestia since no one had a friendship problem. The smart and reasonable thing to do was send her a letter telling her that there's no friendship problem to be solved, instead she goes with the crazy idea of making a friendship problem and causing the ponies in Ponyville to go crazy over an old doll. The reason why the question in this story was as tough as it is because lots of smart ponies tend to over think it's and say "Oh it has to be magic since that's what allows us to use our abilities!". But that's not the case, their brain has to trigger the magic in order for it to activate. It's like when I'm getting stuck on a math problem and I just get frustrated and think and think of how to solve the problem, but nothing is working. When I take a deep breath and calm down, I then able to complete the problem. Stress is also a key factor here too since Twilight was so stressed about making sure she got a 100 on the exam, that it messed her brain up when it came to this question. See the reason why Rainbow Dash was able to answer this was because she's carefree and doesn't overthink stuff like Twilight does which makes her more capable as a scientist. Not saying that she's smarter, but she had an advantage that Twilight doesn't have. Hopefully this explains things.
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Those are very good points, but based on the context, twilight's stress is mainly about that question, which means she had time to consider options and investigate, you do have a point mentioning the doll incident, but that issue is fundamentally different , focuses on twilight's paranoia of not having a friendship problem to solve and the terror of disappointing her teacher, it is true that the solution was simple but twilight did not see it that way, in this case, we have a question asked multiple selection to fill in on a purely scientific topic, a topic that twilight handles perfectly, even if her answer was "by magic" seeing that it simply does not apply I would look for a book, a book my friend, if twilight did not Do you know something, will you investigate until you find it, or are you suggesting that no existing book in the twilight library explains that? which again seems awfully simple, twilight isn't most ponies, but hey, my arguments end here, it's still a good story and we don't know for sure what twilight would do in that situation, it's after all a fanfiction
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And being carefree doesn't necessarily make you better material for a scientist, on the contrary, the twilight's extreme attention to detail, and her desire to explain even the inexplicable in any way possible is what makes her such a good scientist, twilight's paranoia how we have seen it in so many cases, it is applied more than anything to social issues, or things that escape scientific or magical understanding, anything that has to do with science in its broad scenario, he thinks about it with a cold, analytical mind based on seeking the answer or find solutions, we have seen what she has achieved and her ability, she just overthinks and gets stressed when it comes to social, political or Celestia issues
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.....Okay you got me with the books point, totally forgot about that lol