Your writing has improved a lot since you started your other fic, and it was already good to begin with.
Colour me interested in the story so far.
Edit: I like the CCC, but their name always makes me laugh too much to take them seriously. I bet the old cultivatiors got beaten to death with rubber chickens.
This story made me finally make a FIMfiction account just to comment, even though I'm not a MLP fan. I was just excited to see a fanfiction relating to monster hunter in form. And just to confirm and not make myself a crazy guy, the character transformed into a humanoid version of the Kirin from monster hunter right? if so, hopefully he does receive the full force of a Kirin, and maybe the Oroshi variant also.
Are the chapters for this going to be as absurdly long as the ones on your other story? I normally don't like chapters longer than 15-20k in one sitting, but that's my fault.
10855193 Humanoid kirin is something I can get on board with. Can author confirm this, though?
10855415 You're right, this is Oroshi Kirin. Unlike the typical Kirin which uses thunder, Oroshi uses ice, so I'm interested in seeing where this is going.
10855080 Thank you for the compliment and your interest. And yes, the CCC is a bit like that. But mostly they are insane fanatics with chicken mutated bodies utilizing forcefully tamed chimera creatures as war beasts. A bit of a combination of Beastmen of Warhammer Fantasy and the cocos of Zelda.
10855365 I liked it. Not fitting for the moment but I might use it later.
10855391 I've been watching and reading a lot of xianxia and wuxia lately so I thought to try it out with an anthro mlp world.
10855409 In the future, it might be possible. Not spoiling anything though.
10855600 Eh not really what I was going for but it's still good. And I won't be spoiling any shipping. You crazy readers can work that out yourselves.
10855193 10855415 10855489 As I mentioned in my author's note at the end of the story. I could not find a proper humanoid form of the orochi kirin. I liked the darker colouration. So instead I used another kirin humanoid art to get the base idea of what I wanted. He is young in the body as he does not have a beard. And his serpentine tail shows that his dragon blood is more profound in his kirin heritage. I am combining the kirin of Chinese myth with the MWH kirin's body and horns. So yes. He is meant to be a young adult anthro orochi kirin with some minor alterations. Author's confirmation of MHW anthro MC given.
So you've already established the MC is a young, anthro Oroshi Kirin. But will he have ice powers, or the regular Kirin's lightning powers? The lightning would make more sense given his sect.
At the second week had one-third of the nation been put to the torch, axe, dagger, needle, and mismanaging hands of the invaders. An armada of ships covering mush of the sky above the isolated nation, chanting out the name of their ruler. The Storm King.
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10857125 Also does not seem a type of "You tarnished my honor, for you did not bow in my presence and ask for mercy. Thus I will smite you and your 10 closest kin".
Dude, you captured wuxia, in this. Streamlining the "overexplain bait" was appreciated.
I so thought you were going to mention that the sacred fruit could be used to extend you lifespan 9 times and stealing one would be, likewise, punished by killing 9 generations of your kin, or something like that.
10858868 Love your enthusiasm, but author already established that every story has it's own system for how qi works. I love that I'm not the only one here that loves wuxia, but adding details that aren't established in the story might confuse and scare away potential newcomers to the genre.
Open the sect gates and let the new blood flow in. No scaring the initiates until after they swallow the slave medicine (because that blood comment screams dark sect).
Very interesting beginning. I will eagerly await more chapters. I admit I am not that big of a fan of multiple worlds stories, but I will definitely give this one a chance.
The horned yeti smirks and hums in content at the title the old goat mentioned. It was a most compelling title for one such as himself. "Ooooh, I like it. I was thinking of upgrading my branding a bit. Storm God... hmmm... I like it!"
I don't know why this bothers me so much but him saying I like it twice in the same sentence erks me a lot. idk just looks, sounds, and feels wrong.
Your writing has improved a lot since you started your other fic, and it was already good to begin with.
Colour me interested in the story so far.
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I like the CCC, but their name always makes me laugh too much to take them seriously. I bet the old cultivatiors got beaten to death with rubber chickens.
This story made me finally make a FIMfiction account just to comment, even though I'm not a MLP fan. I was just excited to see a fanfiction relating to monster hunter in form. And just to confirm and not make myself a crazy guy, the character transformed into a humanoid version of the Kirin from monster hunter right? if so, hopefully he does receive the full force of a Kirin, and maybe the Oroshi variant also.
ALL NEW!!
It's a new something! Let's read it and watch the carnage!
awesome writing dude, keep up the good work!!!
(Excitement intensifies)
The most possible song for this chapter, for me that is, felt like it's a nice fit. Nothing theme-related, but the meaning is there.
I haven’t seen anyone use cultivation before on the site. Good luck with this it looks to be a fun story to follow.
I hope we see him meet Celestia and a young Twilight
10855193
Cover art is clearly Oroshi, so...
Are the chapters for this going to be as absurdly long as the ones on your other story? I normally don't like chapters longer than 15-20k in one sitting, but that's my fault.
10855193
Humanoid kirin is something I can get on board with. Can author confirm this, though?
10855415
You're right, this is Oroshi Kirin. Unlike the typical Kirin which uses thunder, Oroshi uses ice, so I'm interested in seeing where this is going.
Oh this is nice. I get a slight Lawbringer vibe and allways enjoy the God Queen of
ManPonykind on her throne.Let's watch the shipping with Sparklebutt commence!
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Thank you for the compliment and your interest. And yes, the CCC is a bit like that. But mostly they are insane fanatics with chicken mutated bodies utilizing forcefully tamed chimera creatures as war beasts. A bit of a combination of Beastmen of Warhammer Fantasy and the cocos of Zelda.
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ALL HERE!
10855227
Hope you will enjoy it.
10855253
Thank you and I will.
10855304
[inspiration intensifies]
10855365
I liked it. Not fitting for the moment but I might use it later.
10855391
I've been watching and reading a lot of xianxia and wuxia lately so I thought to try it out with an anthro mlp world.
10855409
In the future, it might be possible. Not spoiling anything though.
10855600
Eh not really what I was going for but it's still good. And I won't be spoiling any shipping. You crazy readers can work that out yourselves.
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10855489
As I mentioned in my author's note at the end of the story. I could not find a proper humanoid form of the orochi kirin. I liked the darker colouration. So instead I used another kirin humanoid art to get the base idea of what I wanted. He is young in the body as he does not have a beard. And his serpentine tail shows that his dragon blood is more profound in his kirin heritage. I am combining the kirin of Chinese myth with the MWH kirin's body and horns.
So yes. He is meant to be a young adult anthro orochi kirin with some minor alterations. Author's confirmation of MHW anthro MC given.
Yes this is good I must have more.
So you've already established the MC is a young, anthro Oroshi Kirin. But will he have ice powers, or the regular Kirin's lightning powers? The lightning would make more sense given his sect.
10855664
Glad you like it.
10855783
Not going to spoil that.
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this is the first cultivator story I have seen on FIM
Depending on what facial structure you're okay with, creative cropping can pull it off.
If u need help with cultivitor genre message me i have read thousands of mtl novels
I'm gonna guess that hitting the bell 16 times is signal for the biggest issue possible.
yes, my favorites author still alive
but fuck, it's cultivator...
hurt my head indeed
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This is great!
Apparently the eastern equivalent for "someone is talking about you", instead of a sneeze, is a itchy ear.
Though this could probably just be only Korea
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The word you want here is 'much.'
Don't worry guys this one doesn't seem like a chinese cultivator story where they go:
"Hoh hoh I eat pill like addict and get stronger. I use money am rich, buy pill to make inner energy stronger, hmm become god."
10857125
Also does not seem a type of "You tarnished my honor, for you did not bow in my presence and ask for mercy. Thus I will smite you and your 10 closest kin".
10857171
Exactly and I feel like that's the only type of story the chinese can make in terms of fiction.
All I can see in my mind’s eye is a crowd of farmponies oohing and aahing over this:
upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/commons/8/8c/Farmall_C_cultivator.jpg
Which, of course, suddenly appeared somewhere in Equestria with no explanation.
10858868
Why are you writing all this?
Dude, you captured wuxia, in this. Streamlining the "overexplain bait" was appreciated.
I so thought you were going to mention that the sacred fruit could be used to extend you lifespan 9 times and stealing one would be, likewise, punished by killing 9 generations of your kin, or something like that.
Spread the Dao, muh dude!
10858868
Love your enthusiasm, but author already established that every story has it's own system for how qi works. I love that I'm not the only one here that loves wuxia, but adding details that aren't established in the story might confuse and scare away potential newcomers to the genre.
Open the sect gates and let the new blood flow in. No scaring the initiates until after they swallow the slave medicine (because that blood comment screams dark sect).
(Slams their palm on a table) THIS SHIT IS AWESOME!!! GIVE ME ANOTHER!!! (joyful screaming intensifies intensifies)
so he arrives only 2 years into twilight position as tia's student? that's quite a bit of time for him to train
Very interesting beginning. I will eagerly await more chapters. I admit I am not that big of a fan of multiple worlds stories, but I will definitely give this one a chance.
I don't know why this bothers me so much but him saying I like it twice in the same sentence erks me a lot. idk just looks, sounds, and feels wrong.
So a kirin monk, i like it.
Actually, that was... Pretty bad. Yikes.
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The imagine link is broken. So far liking this story!