Really good start man. Keep it going.

For a first fic, it feels like it has good conversational flow. I'd like to see where this goes.

This has lots of potential, I'm excited to read more. :)

This is a solid start. It flows easily and I'm interested to see where it goes from here.

Not enough Moondancer fic out there, definitely following this.

This fic is already promising to be very interesting and sweet. Very good start.

After a promising start, I have subscribed to your newsletter story.

I'm intrigued

Wow, dialogue is great! Very smooth and natural, and quite funny to boot. Pacing felt clean as well, great work over all.

I really like how this is going so far, I hope to see more of this.

Loving it so far. The banter between Moondancer and Minuette is fun and it's nice to have a Moondancer-centric story. Keep it up!

Good start, good start. I'll be tracking.

All the comments above summarize my thoughts as well.

Thank you everyone! I just wanted to try my hand at writing not really expecting this to garner much attention. I'm currently in the process of writing the second chapter which will be much more meatier than the first in terms of length. I can't really say when it will be done but I hope to have it out soon for you all!

"Hans! Where are you!? You were suppose to get the flammenwerfer!"

Meanwhile with Hans.

"Ziz book iz amazing!"

Off to a great start; will be following.

On an unrelated note is "homely" in how it is used here (and I've seen in other stories) a national or regional thing? Where I am, "homey" would mean quaint/small/cozy and a "homely" example would be having a face only a mother would love.

For being a first fic is extremly good! keep up the great work :D

More than eager to see the next chapter.

"What about that moldy sandwich?"
*sandwich starts hissing*
...
"That's Sammy, I tried to throw him out but he was making these huge bologna eyes at me and started whimpering, I couldn't throw poor Sammy out after that!"
*Sammy skitters under the couch and starts purring*

It seems really good so far, I'm looking forward to more!

Ok that picture is adorable

Damn good read. Love the back and forth between the girls.
Moondancer is adorable (in a mature way), and Minuette is still a little firecracker!

Great flow on the dialogue. Keep it real, mature, fun and sexy. Nerds are hot too! Just after a shower!

Very impressive first story! Your a natural in my eyes, I wish I could see writing through your perspective and pick your brain cause your word use is amazing! ;)