---The Next Day---
---Third Person POV---
"Tunneler! I'm home!" Said Fluttershy. She began walking around, looking for her new friend. "SKREEEEEEE!" Came a sound below her. Tunneler began to come up to greet her.
In a few short moments the Graboid was above ground. "SKREEEEEEEE" said Tunneler. "I missed you too, and I had a great time in Manehattan, thank you for asking" said Fluttershy.
"I'll save you Fluttershy" said Rainbow Dash. She was coming at top speed. The Graboid could not respond in time. Rainbow ended up kicking Tunneler in the beak. "SKREEEEEEEEE" screeched Tunneler. He grabbed Rainbow and slammed her to the ground. One grip on the neck, one wrapped around a her right front leg, and one around the waist making her eyes bug out.
"Tunneler! PUT. HER. DOWN!" said Fluttershy. Tunneler reluctantly did what he was told and let Rainbow Dash go. He then began digging back to his burrow.
"What was that!?! I had him" said Rainbow Dash. "No, he had you, and you shouldn't have attacked him, Tunneler hasn't harmed anypony, and he's been very sweet" scolded Fluttershy.
"You named it?" asked Rainbow in disbelief. "Tunneler is not an IT he's a he" corrected Fluttershy. "Ok then, what is HE" asked Rainbow.
"Tunneler is a Graboid" said Fluttershy. "Whats a Graboid?" asked Rainbow.
"SKREEEEEEEEEEEEEE" said Tunneler from below, startling Rainbow.
"He said, that a Graboid is a Precambrian, subterranean predator, that hunts by seismic vibrations...... oh that explains how he knows when ponies come by he can hear them coming, but why didn't he hear you Rainbow" said Fluttershy.
"SKREEEEEEEEE" said Tunneler. "Oh that's right Rainbow was flying so you couldn't hear her" said Fluttershy. "Uh Fluttershy Hello, he just told you he's a predator" said Rainbow drawing Fluttershy's attention.
"Well he hasn't eaten anypony, he's just been eating apples" said Fluttershy.
Just then Twilight arrived. "Hey Fluttershy, hi Rainbow, I've come to do more research on Tunneler" said Twilight. "SKREEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE" said Tunneler from below.
"He wanted me to tell you that a Graboid is a Precambrian, subterranean predator with rough leathery skin, that hunts by seismic vibrations, that grows up to 30 feet long and 6 feet across at its widest point and can weigh up to 10-20 tons, they have a trio of prehensile serpent-like tentacles with taste sensors, that are able to feel around and latch onto its prey and pull it into its mouth, which gives it the name Graboid, inedible objects can be spat out with amazing force, being propelled high into the air, if a Graboid is chasing its prey and the prey gets to an elevated point, it will continue to wait and circle, or find a way to undermine the obstruction, Graboids also have the ability to learn and adapt, and Graboids are incapable of Tunneling through rock or concrete, Graboids also have orange blood, that stems from a cardiopulmonary system, they possess an immense physical strength, allowing them to pull large objects and able to break through brick walls, in order to Tunnel through dirt they have short spikes that move in unison to allow them to move quickly through dirt, and have top speed of 15-20 mph or possibly faster depending on the soil" said Fluttershy as Twilight wrote down all that she said. "But wait, I measured him to be at least twice as big as what you said" said Twilight.
"SKREEEEEEEEEEEEEE" said Tunneler again. Fluttershy translated.
"He said he must still be growing, the largest Graboid can grow to be a colossal size" said Fluttershy. "Um exactly how big can he get?" asked Rainbow worriedly. "SKREEE" said Tunneler. "He doesn't know, maybe about 50-60 feet long?" Translated Fluttershy. "Oh, I am so going to get a Nobel prize for all this" said Twilight jotting down everything Fluttershy said.
Tunneler began digging away to Sugarcube Corner to Steal a pie. "Ok Tunneler, anything else you'd like to tell Twilight?" asked Fluttershy. She waited a while. "Tunneler?" said Fluttershy, getting confused. "He must have left" said Fluttershy. "And where would he go exactly?" asked Rainbow Dash.
"I don't know, sometimes he just disappears" said Fluttershy. "What could he possibly be doing?" asked Twilight.
---Sugarcube Corner---
I was right under Sugarcube Corner. I could hear Mrs. Cake leaving out a cake instead of a pie. 'Ok she is being way to obvious' I heard the sound of shifting metal. 'She put it on a bear trap didn't she' I got close and reached my tongues up by the window and took the cake. "What? How'd they?" -SNAP-"AAAAAAAAH" screamed Mrs. Cake. "Snrt snrt snrt" I chuckled. 'Serves you right'
"CARROT CAKE HELP ME GET THIS THING OFF" Shouted Mrs Cake. I reached my tongues in and grabbed Mrs. Cake. She began screaming again. I began feeling around for the bear trap, when I found it I pried it off, put her down, ripped apart the bear trap, and left.
I began making my way back to Fluttershy's. Only I heard something new. It sounded like......... OOOH NOOO. Princess Celestia.
"Are you sure this...... Graboid as you call it is safe?" asked Celestia. 'Might as well make myself known' "Perfectly harmless" said Fluttershy. "And where is it now" said Celestia as I came out and began looming over her. She noticed Fluttershy's gaze and turned around.
"SKREEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE" I screeched, while flailing my tongues around and covering her with slobber. Making Celestia scream.
I then jumped over her and began digging then began spinning and began coming back up fast. I jumped out of the ground, went over Fluttershy's cottage and dug back down, straight to my burrow.
"WHAT WAS THAT THING!" Yelled Celestia. "That was Tunneler, that's his way of saying hello" said Fluttershy. "I've never seen anything like that" said Celestia. I began coming back up and going to my special spot next to Fluttershy's cottage. "Hey Tunneler, this is Princess Celestia, say hello" said Fluttershy. I brought out one tongue and waved. "Did you teach it that?" asked Celestia.
"I haven't taught him anything, He's just very clever" said Fluttershy. "SKREEEEEEEEE" I said to Fluttershy. "Oh he wanted me to tell you that you sound nice" said Fluttershy. "That's.... nice" said Celestia.
"Can it understand what we are saying?" asked Celestia. I got up and nodded my head then got back down. "Did it just nod?" asked Celestia. "Yes, you can pet him if you want" said Fluttershy. I heard Celestia gulp nervously and come closer. A few moments later I felt her hoof on my beak. I grabbed her hoof gently and moved it to my hide. She continued petting. "He is rather smart, do you know where he came from?" asked Celestia.
I made a few clicking noises. "He said he just showed up in Equestria, and he's hungry, here, can you help me feed him" said Fluttershy. Celestia removed her hoof. "What does he eat?" She asked. "I give mostly give him apples but today I brought him some meat" said Fluttershy. I felt Celestia tense up. 'Wuss'
I heard Fluttershy walk over and some crinkling paper. I immediately sent out my tongues and grabbed the meat and pulled it into my mouth. "Aah" said a startled Celestia. I could taste the meat, it was uncooked but somehow it tasted soo good! At some point I began purring.
"Aaaw, im glad you liked it" said Fluttershy petting me. "What was that?" asked Celestia. "What?" asked Fluttershy.
"What he just did with his tongues, what was that?" asked Celestia.
"Thats why his kind are called Graboids, they grab their prey with their tongues, Twilight can fill you in later" said Fluttershy. "Hmmm" said Celestia.
Good chapter!!
Yeah man you really need to fix that grammar honestly it’s a bit hard to read. That’s mostly the problem with your stories.
Overall I do appreciate you at least trying to incorporate more tremors stories. Just clean up the grammar it’s messy,
My favorite part was when Celestia got spooked by tunneler tongues that was golden 100000000%
has anypony complained about all the holes he leaves all over the place yet?
Great story over all, but after each draft you make run it through Grammarly or ProWritingAid to clean up some of those grammar mistakes. Otherwise, keep on writing man, honestly can't wait to see where this goes.
I get that my grammar sucks, but that's mostly because of autocorrect. And Graboids Don't really leave holes, just sunken spots in the ground.
Believe it or not I'm not perfect, so I make mistakes, the best I can do is go back and fix them, but no one tells me where those mistakes were, so I can't really do anything. I am not going to let anything correct my spelling or grammar mistakes except me.
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Pfft, man, everyone's grammar sucks! You should see what I put my editor through! . But when he's not active, I usually put my rough drafts through the sites I mentioned, all to make his torture less painful, hehe. So don't let grammar discourage you too much, you still have a wonderful story to finish!
Should be interesting when tunneler turn into shreker... oh poor fluttershy will faint at the sight of tunneler corpses when he give birth.
I dont know why but I just pictured this scene with Luna instead of Celestia. Which somehow had Luna magic up Burts hat and shades before making a magic gatling gun. Its a funny mental picture.
Make that into a gif and I will put it into the story.
Cuz that seems fuckin awesome!
I keep getting complaints about my grammar. Well I don't know how else to tell you, but what you've read so far is all that I know. I'm not good at grammar, I hardly learned anything from school, I can't even remember what I did in school.
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Here is some advice, read the other stories. Compare and contrast. Then get a proofreader or an editor to help, if you want I can at least try to help. I’ve learned a lot because I had help.
|Also guys take criticism. Talking to the guy who thumb me down lol|
Yes willing to help.
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I've always thought a graboid mostly shifts the soil around them. If you look in the original movies, I dont think there are any holes you can get into.
Love the story and can the graboid stay a graboid please
Would you like to stay a 20 ton worm for the rest of your life? No? Well neither will the character. After Discord gets back from the Graboid ripoff quest, he's going to have Discord change him into something else. I haven't decided what. Either a Graboid-pony hybrid or an anthro Graboid that talks, I can't decide.
Listen to this while reading the chapter.
if at all possible, could you please accept my gratitude in you for making this wonderful piece of art
Are you yanking my chain?
Please continue this. The only issue I have is that it's too early to see where this is going.
I wonder how Fluttershy knows what Precambrian means?
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Equestria has alot of similar things, so they probably had their own precambrian period and named it the same thing
That’s why I wrote it in. Each world, no matter what it looks like, has to have time, from the beginning, to the end. Also in the episode where gabby is introduced, the cmc were helping the parents understand that their foal’s cutie mark meant she was good with fossils.
Which also means at one point, there had to be dinosaurs, and the time periods they existed in.1.bp.blogspot.com/-HjZ5AWBB6Zs/WGOqbhCVCzI/AAAAAAAAK0U/CoAFMvJbHSQrVuZZD7xqScqete0uvwi9QCLcB/s1600/10%2BInteresting%2BFacts%2Babout%2BThe%2Bgeological%2Btime%2Bscale.jpg i.pinimg.com/originals/9b/1d/dc/9b1ddce1151381c9ec8505e6fcf27fd2.jpg