After the events of Anon-A-Miss, Apple Bloom, Sweetie Belle, and Scootaloo became pariahs, and slowly, their isolation takes them to darker and darker places.
"plod over to where my bag lays at the edge" "plod over to where my bag lies at the edge"?
"Scootalloo takes it gratefully" "Scootaloo takes it gratefully"?
"Both Scootaloo and I both turn our heads slowly to look" One too many "both"s, I'm guessing?
(Not an error spotting, just a comment:) "Fortunately, that mostly means yelling and throwing stuff rather than hitting me." "mostly" Fair bit of significance there for just one word.
"and wrapped the heads nails in the wire" "and wrapped the heads of the nails in the wire"?
...Kind of wondering why she didn't just use wood glue, though.
"and turn it this and that, examining it" "and turn it this way and that, examining it"?
Yep, things are going so well for everyone here! :D (Also, wow, I could almost hear the subtle ominous soundtrack on that scene with Twilight; I'm not sure how much of that was knowing context, but since the relevant context is also from you, nice writing, there. :))
(Oh, though I still did not get a notification for this chapter, nor a bump up the list up update stories. Since you don't seem to plan to do a blog post per update, I'm increasingly concerned I'll miss one, though I suppose I can just keep scrolling as far down the list as it takes until this story's marked complete or something.)
"plod over to where my bag lays at the edge"
"plod over to where my bag lies at the edge"?
"Scootalloo takes it gratefully"
"Scootaloo takes it gratefully"?
"Both Scootaloo and I both turn our heads slowly to look"
One too many "both"s, I'm guessing?
(Not an error spotting, just a comment:)
"Fortunately, that mostly means yelling and throwing stuff rather than hitting me."
"mostly"
Fair bit of significance there for just one word.
"and wrapped the heads nails in the wire"
"and wrapped the heads of the nails in the wire"?
...Kind of wondering why she didn't just use wood glue, though.
"and turn it this and that, examining it"
"and turn it this way and that, examining it"?
Yep, things are going so well for everyone here! :D
(Also, wow, I could almost hear the subtle ominous soundtrack on that scene with Twilight; I'm not sure how much of that was knowing context, but since the relevant context is also from you, nice writing, there. :))
(Oh, though I still did not get a notification for this chapter, nor a bump up the list up update stories. Since you don't seem to plan to do a blog post per update, I'm increasingly concerned I'll miss one, though I suppose I can just keep scrolling as far down the list as it takes until this story's marked complete or something.)
Anyway, thank you for writing. :)
Hmmmm....given the official sequels title, I think there's a reason why Applebloom feels weird around Sci-Twi.