Welp that was hot, well done

awesome! only gripe, is when the characters spoke in the midst of those large sentences. maybe split when the characters spoke like this and when "They talk like this."

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Good point, I’ll consider that in my next!

Incredibly good.

This was a epic wild and fun beginning I can't wait to see where this goes and I hope he makes a herd of his own and dome friends.

Needs a squeal

make a story from this

Hehe, cute!

Not bad. Not bad at all!
Good job!

Why does this read like it's written by an alien

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Maybe it's intentional? Oh and I have a vibe that author might be ESL, a little familiar pattern

Good job!

I decided to read this story before the sequel. I know this story is over six months old but I noticed two typos. Wanted to let you know.

I found my hoof, covered in mud in front of me, but it was pequilare, my hoof, and for that matter...

Unless I am missunderstanding the sentence, it should be 'peculiar'. Peculiar meaning strange, odd or unusual.

My eyes lost focus one again...

Should be 'once'.

It was okay. You might want to consider using different nouns, adjectives, and adverbs for the act of copulation and the appropriate tissues and organs involved. For example, a teat is the nipple on an animal, the udder is the swollen mammary.

e animal bolt off past my tree with a poll like object

Should be pole

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Fixed

Good story, well done! Though it is in desperate need of an editor.

"my hoof, covered in mud in front of me, but it was pequilare" Did you mean peculiar? Good story either way ✌

Черт это самое крутая история!😊

😁

Pretty good, the paragraphs are horrible though