Bridget sipped her coffee. As she looked out of the window, she spotted a tan and brown RV pull up, followed by Ms. Tanner’s car. “David, Mary, get our bags. Our transportation has arrived.”
She set her mug down and looked at David. His head was down, and his long silvery-gray hair hid his face. “I will prepare your mother and the Coxs to face your latest changes.”
David nodded and, with a voice that was a few octaves higher than it was yesterday, he said, “Thank you.”
She headed outside to greet the new arrivals with a calm smile on her face. “Nathan, Gabriel, thank you for getting the RV ready.”
Nathan smiled. “No problem, we got the items you requested us to buy along the way. Of course, we want to know why you need…”
Bridget raised her hand. “I will explain why I had you buy those in a few minutes. And I will pay you back for the expenses.” Then with a calm commanding voice, she added, ”Margret, I need to warn you. David’s changes progressed. I’m here to try to soften the shock.”
Margret sucked in a deep breath. “Is he… Did he become a pony?”
Bridget looked at the house, then made eye contact with Margret. “No, he is not a pony. Though it does seem his transformation is complete. However, he isn’t truly human.”
Margret didn’t wait any longer; she ran past Bridget and entered the house. She staggered to a stop once her gaze fell on the person on the couch.
“Mom!” David ran to her and wrapped his arms around her torso in a hug.
Margret looked down at the young boy. She gasped, then whispered, “David?” Kneeling down, she looked at the child before her. His face was more angular than she remembered, still, she could tell this dark gray, nearly black-skinned boy with long white hair was David.
David blinked when she knelt down. “Um… yeah, it’s me, Mom. It’s kind of a shock, but at least I still have fingers, right?” She just wrapped her arms around him in a hug.
With bags in his hand, Nathan walked in. Seeing the two, he turned to Gabriel behind him. Nathan smirked. “Well, that explains why Bridget wanted us to buy some boy’s clothing.”
David broke the hug and looked at Nathan. “Not funny, I’m a kid!”
Margret stood up again and looked at Bridget. “I thought he was becoming a pony? What’s going on now?”
Bridget returned to where she left her mug and finished her coffee. “I said the magic was changing him to be a better host. What that turned out to be is a member of the fae. He is now one of the elven races.”
Both Nathan’s and Gabriel's faces turned pale. Gabriel spoke up, “Any chance the fae could find out?”
Bridget shook her head. “No, we should be safe from the fae courts. The majority of the ones we need to worry about stay far away from human population centers. The rumors place the largest population of elves in Iceland. Even those that could pass for humans avoid getting noticed.”
She made eye contact with everyone. “This is another reason we need to get to the cabin. Though the chances are low, there is still the possibility that David would be spotted by either a human or an agent of the fae court. So, let’s get our stuff loaded into the RV and get going, anything more can wait till we are on the road.”
David sat in the back of the RV, reading from the book of magic. Then he let out a huff and closed the book. “I’m bored, can’t I at least look out the window?”
Bridget's seat swiveled around to face David. “I’m sorry David, the whole point of going to the cabin is to cut the risk of you being seen. It would be countered if someone saw you through the window.”
Mary got up from her seat and went to one of the cabinets from where she removed a decorative wooden box. “I got an idea to keep the kid distracted.”
David rolled his eyes. “Mary, I'm twenty-three, not some kid.”
Mary smiled as she sat down beside him. “So says the pre-teen Drow.” She then sat down the box and opened it, revealing an assortment of stones and crystals.
Mary nodded. “Grandmother already told you crystals, as well as other objects, can store magic. Now, the issue is not all crystals react to the same frequency of magic. If you try charging a crystal that is in opposition to your magic it would result in a poor or no charge. Today we will try to find the one that would be the best match for your magic.”
Margret moved from her seat to sit beside David. “Okay, Mary, what do we do?”
Bridget looked over from her seat. “You want to learn magic, Margret?”
Margret shrugged. “I might as well, after all this I know magic is real.”
Bridget nodded. “Welcome to the Coven of the Three Moon Goddess.” She then looked to Mary “Mary, please continue your lesson.”
“Of course, Grandmother. Okay, David and Margret, hold out your hand over a stone. Pay close attention to how your palm feels. Some stones would feel cool or even cold to you, whereas others might feel warm. You want to find ones that are cold, they are the ones that are responding to your aura and already absorbing your energy. Once you find a stone that works with you, go ahead and pick it up. Then we’ll proceed to the next step.”
Both David and his mother held their hand over the stones. David scrunched his nose and closed his eyes. Then he lowered his hand and picked up a blue polished crystal. Soon after David, Margret picked a stone as well.
Mary then took a breath. “Now the hard part, focusing and waiting.” She smiled “Look at the stone in your hand and focus your mind on it. Try to ignore everything but the stone, imagine your body warmth flowing into the stone, heating it up. Once it’s warm to the touch, it’s charged. To draw energy from the stone, try to visualize the warmth drawing into you. ”
Nathan asked as he drove, “What did David get?”
Mary twisted in the seat to face forward. “He picked up the labradorite”
Gabriel laughed. “I win, Nathan.” She turned and looked back. “Nat was sure he’ll pick up the smoky quartz.”
Bridget chuckled and shook her head. “No, David’s magic is more in tune with dreams, smoky quartz helps promote sleep. Labradorite does fit David’s abilities far better. It is used in lucid dreaming and protects against nightmares.”
She then looked to Margret. “What did you pick up?”
Margret looked at the red stone in her hand. “It’s a bit of red jasper, I think.”
Mary nodded. “Yes, that stone is strongly linked to awakening energy in a person. A good first stone when beginning magic or meditation.”
Bridget spoke up again, “Well, back to your first lesson in using crystals. Hold the stone and just focus your mind on it, imagine it warming up, even getting hot. The more energy it has, the more it starts to repel your energy. Your body registers this as heat.”
David cried out as the crystal in his hand glowed, then shattered with a loud crack. He dropped the fragments onto the table and rubbed his hand. “Well, it got hot, almost burning hot.”
Gabriel shook her head. “Sounds like David has overpowered the crystal. Bridget, you might need to teach him how to channel.”
Bridget nodded. “It seems so. Unlike us, David has no problem with power. It’s control he needs to work on, and we can’t do any lessons on that till we are at the cabin.”
Celestia let out a soft moan as she reached for another sheet of paper on the short table she used as a desk.
From another desk in the royal tent, Prince Platinum Shine looked over to her. “You need another willow bark tea, auntie?”
“No, I’m sore, but I can manage.” Celestia then picked up the report. “Oh… no.”
Platinum Shine raised his brow. “What’s wrong about that report?”
Celestia looked over at him. “It seems the guards found a young foal, probably just a few months old. She was crying in the rubble of a building on the edge of the city.” She looked at the report. “That building was searched thoroughly before… she was abandoned.”
He gasped. “Why would anypony abandon a baby?”
She set down the report. “She’s been transformed during the event.”
He shook his head, then picked up a quill. “I add it to the list of crimes against the changed. Perhaps we should think of moving the affected to their own location. It would be easier to protect them if they are all in one area.”
Celestia sighed and looked to the floor. “No, there are families where only one pony got hit by the dark magic.” She lifted her head. “I’m not going to rip anyone else’s family apart because of fear.” She rose to her hooves. “Let’s go for a walk, I need some fresh air.”
Prince Platinum moved to follow her “We don’t have to force anyone apart, the sanctuary could be for volunteers only. The family of any changed would be welcomed to join.”
They walked out of the grand tent and started to head to the food carts. Four guards moved to protect the royals as they traveled. They didn’t get far when a pegasus commander guard landed in front of them. He saluted. “Princess! Urgent report from the civilian tent patrol seven. We discovered a murder.”
Celestia's eyes widened. “Show me.”
They trotted through the tents with haste till they came to the tent where two guards stood watch. Celestia stuck her head into the tent and flinched, seeing the body. Her gaze moved around the rest of the tent and landed on a smaller cot for a foal. She then noted the words written on the tent wall: ‘Sombra’s Slut’.
She lowered the tent flap and looked to the pegasus guard that led them. “Have you found anything?”
The pegasus sighed. “Not much, it appears to be another hate crime. Her neck was crushed with magic, so the murderer is a unicorn. There were no reports of any sounds of fighting, and from the placement of the body, we think the killer knew the victim. It appears to be a sudden attack; the killer didn’t give any warning before they gripped her with their magic.”
Celestia looked at the guard. “Any sign of the foal?”
The guards at the tents shook their heads. The commander spoke up then, “There hasn’t been any sign of the foal. I have teams asking the civilians if they noticed anything.”
Prince Platinum Shine glanced to the tent, then back to the pegasus. “Do we know who the victims were? Was the foal changed as well?” Then, after a few moments of thinking, he asked, “What’s your name, Commander?”
The commander shifted his stance to fully face Platinum. “Commander Wind Shear, sir. As of now, we know only the mother was a bat pony. The victim's name is Misty Dawn.”
Celestia sucked in a breath. She looked at the tent, then to Commander Wind Shear. “Bat pony?”
Wind Shear’s ears lowered, and he shrugged. “It’s kind of what ponies are starting to call those who have been transformed.”
Celestia nodded. “Keep me updated on what you find. I want to know where the filly is as soon as you know.” With that dismissal, she turned around and started walking back to the royal tent.
Platinum Shine looked at Celestia, but kept quiet till they were out of hearing range of Commander Wind Shear. “You recognized the name and knew the missing foal is a filly. Mind telling me what you know?”
Celestia’s head lowered. “Misty Dawn was Luna’s personal maid. Her filly Morning Dew was a bright sun in the castle, always trying to help and not just to get her cutie mark. One day she delayed breakfast because she tried to make me a cake.” She sighed. “I hope she is just away doing some chores.”
Celestia looked to the setting sun. Her ears twitched and swiveled as she caught voices yelling to her left. She turned her head to look for the source of the disturbance and spotted the medical tents and the pens where the tantabus-infected ponies were being kept.
Platinum Shine followed her gaze. “Sounds like one of the sleepwalkers is being extra disturbed today.”
Celestia started to walk in that direction. “I’m not sure, I can hear more than one pony yelling. It doesn’t sound like the ravings of a sleepwalker. ”
Shine tilted his head and wiggled his ears. “Hmm, you are right. I can hear more than one voice.”
When they got closer, they could see a blood-red bat pony struggling against two healers. “Sir, you have to calm down! You've been under a tantabus influence for a week, you need to rest to regain your strength!”
The stallion growled. “It’s taking two of you to hold me down, and you're barely doing that. I got plenty of strength! Let go, I need to save her!”
One of the healers yelled, “We need a unicorn with a stun spell, stat!”
Celestia’s commanding voice cut through the chaos, “Belay that order!”
All three struggling ponies stopped, and Sure Strike stood at attention. Celestia pointed to one of the healers that requested a stun. “What’s going on here?”
The healer looked to the other healer, then back to Celestia. “He was diagnosed with severe tantabus influence and was physically fighting when mobile, so we couldn’t get close to him till he collapsed. Only then could we get some broth into him. A few moments ago, he woke up and demanded to leave. He’s dehydrated, malnutritioned, and suffering from long-term tantabus influence. He needs treatment, but refuses.”
Celestia moved to face Sure Strike. “Is there a reason you are refusing treatment?” She noted how he was standing. “Soldier?”
Sure Strike saluted. “As the healer stated, I was under the influence of a strong tantabus. I must confess my mental training slipped, and I wasn’t aware of it.” He squinted at the setting sun. “During the day, I was visited by Princess Luna.”
Celestia stomped her hoof. “Stop right there. I assure you Princess Luna is gone, some other dream walker must have used her image to snap you out of your coma.”
Sure Strike’s jaw dropped. “But…”
Celestia cut him off, “I said stop, soldier. Come with me, I want a full report of this imposter.” She turned and headed for her tent. Her ears twitched when she heard the two healers whisper amongst themselves. Platinum Shine followed silently behind her.
“Princess Luna? Could she still be alive?”
“You heard Celestia, it's obviously a fake Luna.”
Sure Strike‘s eyes widened when he overheard the healers talking among themselves. Then, with a shake of his head, he increased his speed to catch up to the two royals.
Once all three were inside the royal tent, Celestia’s horn lit up as she cast a spell. “That’s a level three security spell, nopony outside will hear what we discuss. First and foremost, what’s your name, soldier?”
Sure Strike once again saluted. “Corporal Sure Strike, of the 14th Unit, Your Majesty. Permission to speak?”
Celestia’s ears dropped when she heard the stallion’s name. She quickly turned to move behind her desk, taking the opportunity to hide her emotions from Sure Strike. Once she sat down, she addressed him again. “You may speak openly, Corporal. I believe there are many questions you want to ask, and there is much to tell you about.”
Prince Platinum Shine settled down beside Celestia and started searching among the papers on the desk for a specific report.
Sure Strike closed his eyes and took a deep breath, then replied, “Your Majesty, what were the healers whispering about? How could they think Princess Luna was dead?”
Prince Platinum spoke up before Celestia could, “Hundreds of ponies are missing and presumed dead, Princess Luna is among those. No one has seen her ever since the destruction of the city.”
Celestia then softly told him, “I can honestly swear she hasn’t been seen in flesh and blood for a week. So I’m very interested in hearing about this dream Luna you met.”
It took several minutes for Sure Strike to tell them about his dream. Then he looked at Celestia. “As they left, the alicorn colt called her mom.”
Celestia sighed. “That only proves it’s a lie. Everyone knows that neither Luna nor myself had any foals.”
Sure Strike nodded. “I had standard mental training to recognize when there is another awareness affecting my thoughts. I do admit I do not have any knowledge of Princess Luna’s previous visits to my mind. However, due to the strength of the dream walker, I was sure that it was the Princess.”
Platinum tapped his chin with his hoof, then leaned forward and spoke, “You said the colt mentioned that Morning Dew was his only friend and given his appearance, he must be one of the changed. I think he’s a very lonely pony and could have manifested a mother figure that looked similar to himself. The Princess Luna you saw could have been nothing more than his creation.”
Sure lowered his head. “That… makes sense.” He then lifted his gaze. “But it doesn’t change the fact I was tasked to protect Morning Dew. So, if there is nothing else, I’m going to find her tent.”
Celestia sighed. “I have bad news, Sure Strike. Misty Dawn’s body was discovered earlier today. I saw her remains myself. The guards are still searching for Morning Dew.”
Sure Strike's nostrils flared. “When her father died, I swore to protect her. I have no choice but to go to the Silver Bar estate and question this Astral Beacon.”
Celestia nodded. “Sure Strike, it’s already night, and you are still recovering from the tantabus. As of right now, we believe the murder was a hate crime. There is no evidence that Morning Dew is at the estate, and the word of a dream walking colt is not enough to charge Astral Beacon of foalnapping.” She took a deep breath, then continued, “However I’m not going to ignore your worry. Tomorrow at dawn, I will go to the Silver Bar estate, and you are welcome to come along.”
Prince Platinum leaned forward. “Your body has been transformed by the corruptive magic you were exposed to. You have new wings and need to relearn how to fly. Rushing into battle is unwise.”
She deactivated the security spell. “Sure Strike, we will do everything we can to find your niece.”
She then rose up and stuck her head out of the tent to address the guards outside. “Guards, would one of you please lead Corporal Sure Strike back to the healers so he can get something healthy to eat and a good night's sleep? Make sure they know I expect him to be ready for a trip tomorrow morning.”
Sure Strike looked up to Celestia. “Thank you, Your Majesty.” He then started walking back to the medical tents with one of the guards.
Celestia closed the tent flap and recast the security spell.
Prince Platinum Shine spoke up as soon as the spell was stable. “Do you think he bought it?”
Celestia turned and sat down with a sigh. “If he doesn’t, he will be leaving as soon as he can. If he does, believe me, he will be with us in the morning.”
Platinum picked up the report he got out earlier. “This is the second tantabus-infected pony that woke up. The first case was a unicorn mare named Lilly Belle. She woke up yesterday. Her report also mentions a colt named Morpheus. There are some differences though. Nightmare Moon didn’t disguise herself this time, nor was there any pink foal.” He looked up at her. “Could she be gathering undiscovered dream walkers?”
Celestia shook her head. “I have no clue what Nightmare Moon is doing. I… I banished her to the moon with the Elements of Harmony. There shouldn’t be any possibility for her to come back.”
Platinum looked at the paper. “Princess Luna was the best dream walker ever recorded, most need to be in physical contact or know the pony personally to enter the sleeper’s dreams.”
Celestia tilted her head up. Her ears lay flat against her skull. “Could that be it? Is she still able to dream walk all the way from the moon?”
Platinum stood up and faced her directly. “I’m more concerned about the colt. Sure Strike heard him call her mom. I hate to imagine the uproar that would cause.”
She shook her head. “It’s not true, it can’t be true.”
Platinum sighed. “It doesn't need to be true, the nobility will manipulate any rumor they can. If they cast doubt on you now, we could be facing the start of a rebellion.”
Celestia closed her eyes and spoke softly, “Do you remember Luna was ill a few months after we defeated Discord? We discovered Luna was two months pregnant a short time later. She was so happy.” She sighed and looked to the floor, her eyes glistening momentarily. “One day she collapsed to the floor screaming in pain, The foal didn’t make it. Luna had a name and everything picked out. Her name would have been Snow Drop.”
Platinum grunted and slammed his hoof into the ground. “That's all they need, he’s the right age. Has shown to be a powerful dream walker.”
Platinum nodded. “The unicorn nobles still remember when they ruled with King Bullion. If Morpheus is an alicorn then I can see them proclaiming him the rightful heir. Once that’s done, they may set up a regent to rule, cast you aside, and turn the crown prince into a puppet king. Celestia, we need to find this colt before they do.”
Celestia covered a yawn with her hoof. “I agree we need to find this Morpheus before he’s found by the wrong ponies. Get some rest, Platinum, tomorrow we begin the search.”
Platinum nodded. “Good night, auntie Tia.” With that he exited the tent, leaving Celestia alone.
She moved to one of her trunks and opened it, revealing a simple wooden container within. With a sigh, she lifted the lid and peered at the Elements of Harmony. She touched the now powerless Element of Magic. “You still refuse to respond to me. Is it because Luna was telling the truth? Did I betray her without knowing? Please, I need your guidance.”
David held his hand up as he gazed into the lightly glowing crystal within his fingers with awe. Loudly, he cheered, “This one didn’t shatter!”
Bridget smiled. “Good work, David. Now that you learned to store magic, you always have a back-up.”
Mary chimed in, “Not that he needs it.”
Gabriel smirked. “Sounds like someone’s a tad jealous.”
Mary blinked and looked to the elder witch. “Jealous? Of being turned into an elf and having enough magic only legends spoke of?”
Nathan laughed, joining in the merriment as he pulled into a stone driveway. “I think being cooped in this RV is getting to everyone. Good news, we are finally here.”
The RV pulled into a private gated lot. Lush trees and bushes surrounded the lot, providing a natural fence. Unseen from the road stood a large three-story log and stone cabin with a wrap-around porch.
Margret smiled. “It’s beautiful.”
Bridget took a deep breath of fresh air, then headed to the cabin while withdrawing her keys from her purse. “Okay, let's get our bags inside, and I'll start dinner. I had Frank Walker stock the place up, so we are set for a while.”
David got up from the seat, grabbed his suitcase, and exited the RV. “Yeah Mom, Jennifer loved coming here.” He frowned slightly and wiped his eyes. He looked at the building again and rubbed the bridge of his nose.
Gabriel moved up beside him and gently squeezed his shoulder. “You, okay there, David?”
He nodded. “I’m okay, Mama G. Just a little melancholic. Oh, I forgot my crystal on the table!” He let go of his suitcase and turned and ran to the RV, then staggered. He gasped for breath and grabbed his chest. “Priestess? Something feels wrong.”
His heart raced, and he watched, wide-eyed, as his hair rose up with electrical spark flashes.
Time seemed to slow down as he slowly turned to face his mother. He reached out to her as a shimmering purple and blue bubble took shape around him. He opened his mouth in a silent cry. Then with a flash and a bang, he was gone.
Margret gasped and ran to where David vanished. “David!” She dropped to her knees, her gaze locked on the ground where he last stood. Gabriel somberly came over and hugged her as she cried.
Woah!
Wonder where in Equestria he'll pop out
was the fae form only a short lived thing or will he be it for a bit longer?
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Do you know how Twilight Sparkle became human when she visited the Equstrian Girls universe? It's similar to that. If a Pony came to the universe David is from they would become a fae.
There are some things I might still use if I do a sequel, but just messed up the flow of this story to include. One idea was David would have met some fae and Margret would have got help from the same fae to speak to David one last time. There are some elements from that story plot still in here, the glowing crystal filled with his magic is one.
Ah of course. Just when they realize he exists.
Damn fine chapter! Celestia should accept the evidance... I see Morning Dew as a lost cause.
Morpheus is neather save with Celestia or someone of Equestria i think...
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so if fae=pony in your story what is a human?
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Perhaps a Yak, cow, or Buffalo, something with less magic than a pony. Maybe even a donkey.
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well looking forward to the next chapter when it is done. will we still get earth segments or now that Morpheus is going to equestria will they stop all together unless something of note happens
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The events on Earth will no longer be followed. I might add something in an epilogue but the story has always been focused on David/Morpheus and Morning Dew, now that neither are on Earth there is no reason to revisit. Story-wise this helps put the reader in the mind of David, he wouldn't know what happens so to better understand him it's good to not tell the reader.
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Fortunately, the place where (almost) every HiE always pops up was just created. :P
Also it would make sense if he pops up somewhere near Morning Dew as well.
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You are right about him appearing near Morning Dew. too bad she's in the hooves of my villain.
Out of curiosity, how do pony ages work in this story?
i.e. I've read fics where foals come of age at 14 and age more or less like humans, and others where they stay foals until their mid 50's with an average lifespan of about 300.
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Roughly human life span. So they are considered mature enough to be part of adult life somewhere in the late teens and expected life of 100 years or so (they do live longer than humans of the middle ages due to healthier lifestyle). The only exceptions are the Alicorns who can live over a thousand years due to the high level of magic rejuvenating their bodies.
So David will live long enough for Nightmare Moon/ Princess Luna's return.
I see Astral Beacon's plan to trap him has worked, I'm expecting Morpheus to be waking up in a cage
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While it might be a bit nit picky would Morpheus be able to be classifyed as both luna and celestias son. im mean if im understanding what happend correctly then it would work.
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Interessting few point. You are quite on the point. Their magic birthed Morpheus after all...
....and here we were, ready to say, "silly Celestia, you're not going to find him that easy!"
Blue aura eh? Roll for initiative!
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Blue… hmm you know I should change that to purple.
This has been on my reading list for a week or two now. Great timing I guess, I started reading the first chapter about an hour before this one was posted. Great story so far, I particularly loved the way the dreamscape and his private island are done. Turning Morpheus into a kid is also pretty funny, I wonder if that is to reflect his new lifespan.
Nightmare Moon attacking his mind with old traumas and then deciding to teach him anyway felt a little sudden. The idea that Nightmare Moon might not be totally evil is fun to play with though. Did Celestia get a little hasty there with the doom cannon? How very unlike an ancient and wise goddess. I think everything else flows really well.
Now the question is did he get yanked over to Equestria by his magic, or did Astral Beacon find a way to summon him. Really looking forward to the rest of this to find out. You definitely have a new follower.
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I had the same thought. If he can actually be considered Luna's child by magic. Was he also born by Celestia's magic, or maybe the Elements magic, depending on how you want to look at which actually hit him.
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Nightmare Moon was pushing him to consciously control the dream/nightmare. When he showed how strong he was she decided that he could be useful to her.
I got the idea that Nightmare Moon not being completely evil by how she treated Alicorn Twilight in the alternate timeline. She didn’t attack Twilight and even talked with her. She did have a goal of using time travel herself and was being almost kind to Twilight to get the spell.
She could have used mind control magic or torture, nope Nightmare Moon in the show tried diplomacy even if she wasn’t good at it.
That scene was the inspiration for this version of Nightmare Moon. Angry, distrustful, mentally unstable, but not evil.
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On the subject of David becoming younger. I took inspiration from the show. When Nightmare Moon was blasted with the Elements by the mane 6. The magic reverted her to a younger state “Woona”.
David had some traumatic events happen to him. The situation with his father, then Jennifer’s death. The magic started to work on him to an age when he was more in harmony with himself. He still remembers but the emotions aren’t as strong.
Before you ask no he wouldn’t get an adult Alicorn form, well he will once he grows up again naturally.
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That idea is so random is could be out of my Necromander story Would absolutly love the impossible random idea
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The Castle of the Sisters
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Makes sence, besides it was rather disconnected in feeling to the story anyway...
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Good question. Many make them 100 years in lifespan. My storys have it more in detail line for example:
- Unicorn 150 years, beak physical bodys.
- Pegasus 180 years since they are between Unicorns and Earthponys.
- Earthponys 200 years. They are very sturdy and that should show in lifespan. Also fit the Granny Smith theme...
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Damn, I had hoped we would actually see him beeing forced to interact with the fae a bit before he is dragged to Equestria
All this magic power...
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Nice one
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Way more interesting than the cliche Nightmaremoon.
I have a oneshot story about the royal familie. Maybe it could inspire some ideas for you
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Ah. Makes sense
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He manifested as human soul there and his body was struck with the elements there. Plus, cliche spawnpoint
But seriously the food is still fresh and the books are worth a fortune. I have a estimation of at least 2-6 month of living on the left behind rations for the staff. Not to forget the military rations! So at best our former human can hold out 1 year in the Castle until he might be forced to leave do to food shortage.
More than enough time to teach him all basic knowlege eatch Night and become fit enough walking/galloping around the castle during day.
After all, earthpony side need physical exercises as well. Perhaps when he run his legs tired he can add flight lessons. So durring day he exercise his body and at night he learns magic / dreanwalking with Nightmaremoon.
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I like that concept.
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Makes sense
So he's not gonna appear near his only friend?
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I’m so tempted to spoil what I got planned.
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Read my story with the Red Changeling Empress with the 'Selection Screen' or the oneshot story of the royal familie. The concept might be a nice and useful addition for you'r story. I would be happy to aid you'r story lore
The week days have individual names in my Empress story. They would give you also a more unique touch to you'r story
Example:
My Equus has 30 hours for one resolution. 15 hours night & 15 hours day. Monday is called 'Moonday', Friday is 'Faustday'. Sunday... Actually that the only day that holds his original week day name
Don't forget that Ponys make their own seasons/weather. There for it's planned and is not so random like on Earth.
But since the Everfree forest incident the weather has developed a head on it's own. Just like on earth...
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In this Equestria they don't make their own weather nor do they control when the sun rises or sets. The Pegasi can affect the weather by disrupting storms like how I had them fight the storm in the one pegasus dream. I wanted a more realistic reality to this Equestria so no Cloudsdale weather factory. There just aren't enough Pegasi to do mass weather manipulation, they focus on reducing the severity of storms or moving clouds to where droughts are happening.
Celestia's magic is stronger during the day and she can draw upon the sun for added power. Luna (and David) are weaker during the day and stronger at night as well as draw on other plans like the DreamScape and Limbo. That is why Astral Beacon needed Luna or Morpheus to open the doorway into Limbo.
In simple terms, Astral Beacon was using Luna to open the door into limbo. Luna fought back and opened a second door into David's dream and pulled him through to disrupt Astral Beacon's spell. However, the corruptive energy of Limbo escaped turning Luna into Nightmare Moon, changing random ponies into bat-ponies, and causing the Everfree City to be destroyed.
Chapter 13 I will be explaining why Astral Beacon was doing this in more detail.
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Looking forward to the future chapters. Add this details later as well! Great worldbuilding
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Week days are named for exampe:
1.- Monday - Moonday
2.- Tuesday - Daynight
3.- Wednesday - Nightmare Day
4.- Thursday - Lunar Day
5.- Friday - Faustday
6.- Saturday - Solaris Day
7.- Sunday - Sunday
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Some of those are kind of redundant.
The most world building I done is in my Doom of Griffonstone story. I have 40 pages of notes for Prince of Dreams some of the world building in those notes has no relevance to the story.
I've got to admit, I'm kind of happy we won't be seeing any more of the 'crystals are magic' human Wikka stuff because he's now in a new world (probably permanently). Obviously it's real in-story but it was painful to read because of how hokey it sounds. Maybe if the explanations had been a bit more technical and 'this is HOW you do this' I would have felt it was better? I don't know really, but I hated those sections and I hope they're gone for good along with the 'Witches Coven' and Bridget.
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I'm just offering ¯\_(ツ)_/¯
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Yeah I cut out a lot of the witch stuff. That one reason they went from a whole Coven going to teach him to just two basic examples and a book to read.
I tried to make it more technical but the paragraphs came out sounding like filler techno babble and provided no true substance to the story.
The Crystal he left behind is based on the crystals we see in Equestria. Elements of Harmony, the crystals in Equestria girls, and the crystals in G5. That why it glowed where the other crystals didn’t. The earth witch magic not strong enough to get the glow. It will have a purpose in the epilogue.
The Wiches were going to introduce David to the fae. As the High Priestess said “Fae are magical beings banished or trapped here”. So the Sirens, and the ponies Discord banished including King Cosmos are among them.
Those were story elements I dropped to keep the focus on Morpheus and Morning Dew. There was just too much chaos with all the Witches and Fae included.
I am both surprised it took so long and happy that it did. I'm enjoying this story greatly so far.
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I honestly love those ideas, I totally understand keeping the story based around the main character, but that idea of the fae being ponies banished by discord, that is a really cool idea to be canon.
Noticed a few oddities going thru this chapter again, just figured I'd point them out if you feel like looking them over.
From context I believe this is probably meant to be either stay or are staying
This could be intended, but I imagine a typo of countered, ruined or dangerous may also fit the context.
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Made the corrections. Thanks for pointing them out.
Welp, I was slightly interested in seeing what the Fae would do but oh well. Off to Equestria we go!
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I might use the fae idea in another story. In this one the outline was just chaotic enough that Discord would approve.
This whole story comes down to how David ends up in Equestria. Something other HiE stories do in a prologue or one paragraph, my goal was to explore that transition and the fae, witches, and college content distracts from that primary objective.
So I streamlined the outline and set a whole lot of material aside.
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I find the way you did it better than, boom, human in Equestria
I just finished reading the current 12 chapters, hope to read more in the near future.
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Yes, I'm working on chapter 13 now... I have to rewrite a section due to it being a bit too chaotic.