Lyra had a decent life. It wasn't perfect but it was hers and it was good. Now all of that is gone and she's in the worst of all possible worlds.
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the first time you say Codsworth the second time you say Cogsworth? Just pointing that out :3
Also Personal note.. I want to say that I kinda cringed when you mentioned "Leftist satire" I read these fanfics to escape the real world politics surrounding us.
Now that is a personal gripe. So you can ignore it or go through with it but personally I just prefer to not have the left vs right debate/spectrum inside my fanfics. If you want to parody IRL politics I think a good option would be to make the political factions different from IRL, while also making them relatable to some degree. But thats just me. Otherwise so far the first chapter is good aside from a few grammar mistakes. Like And instead of had, as well as you keep getting Codsworth and Cogsworth confused with each other.
Looking forward to where we go from here; most certainly a good start... especially the robo-facial; Sweet Luna's Plot, haven't laughed that much in a bit.