Celestia was standing on her balcony lowering the sun. She was exhausted after her meeting with the dragon ambassador. She was trying to set up a trading route from Equestria, through the badlands and into dragon land. The dragon ambassador was never easy to deal with. It was days like these she wished her faithful student was still living in Canterlot.
There were two ponies Celestia let her guard down with. Her sister and her faithful student. It would probably be nice talking to Luna too, but she was not the same as Twilight. After the thousand years things had changed between them. They were not as close as before. They mostly spoke about political things now.
“Oh Twilight, I wish you were here,” Celestia said with a sigh. And like Faust had heard her, she felt a familiar magic, followed by a bright purple blitz and a pop.
“Twilight?”
Celestia turned. What she saw next, no one could have prepared her for. There on the ground laid her faithful student. Bloody and bruised. Celestia was shocked beyond belief. She quickly galloped over to her student and sat down before her. She put her head in her hooves. She was about to carry her over to the bed when Twilight spoke.
“I... I...” Twilight barely seemed able to talk. “I... love you Tia.”
Before Celestia could even take in what she heard Twilight closed her eyes. Her chest stopped rising. She just laid there.
“No, no this is not happening,” Celestia said hugging the lifeless mare in her hooves. “No. This can’t be happening. It has to be a bad dream,” It hit her like a sonic rainboom. It was really happening. Her faithful student was gone. A tear fell from her cheek, followed by another.
Celestia was now crying openly. It felt like the world was falling apart. This was the worst moment of her life. She just wanted to go back and change it all. The pain she felt when she had banished her sister was nothing compared to this. Twilight was more special to the princess than she had ever imagined.
Over the thousands of years the princess had lived she had never felt true love. It’s said that the princesses only feel true love once. When they find their loves and marry them they become immortal. That way the princesses will never have to experience their loved ones die. Celestia had found this true love. The mare lying in her hooves was the one, but Celestia had been too late. How could she not have realized it earlier? Her true love, lost forever.
She should have seen the signs. She should have known. She knew that she knew all along. She was just too damn busy ruling the land. She would trade the whole Equestria just for another minute with Twilight. Just one more minute with the pony of her dreams. Of course that was not possible and Celestia knew that.
Giving up. Giving up is the easy way out. Celestia had never been the one to take the easy way out, but right now. Right now her willpower was beyond ruined. There was no way she was going to fight through this. To Tartarus with her subjects. They could rule their own land. Maybe her sister could do it. Now it was her turn to take the easy path.
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Killing an Alicorn requires two things. The first is a dagger made of pure gold. The second is an enchantment to the dagger only the Alicorn herself can cast. Due to this the only way an Alicorn can die is if they give in to their killer. This however is not known by a lot of ponies.
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Life was worthless now. Why would she want to continue down this road of pain? There was nothing waiting for her at the end. She had always stayed on this road, waiting for the small path leading her to joy. It had never been easy. Ponies she cared for died, times of chaos reigned and villains kept trying to take away what she had worked so hard for. For years the path she had been waiting for laid before her, she was just too blind to see.
She was so used to this pain that she had missed the train that would take her into paradise. Now there was only pain. Why would she keep living in pain for the rest of her endless life if there was nothing waiting for her at the end? Because she had a land of subjects to keep happy? That was now Luna’s new job. Celestia was going away. Far away.
She slowly laid down Twilight´s head on the ground. She trotted over to the bookshelf located on one of the walls. She pulled a book and the shelf glided open. Behind it was a small box. Celestia opened the box and grasped the contents in her magic. She levitated it over to her desk where she sat down.
She grabbed a quill and a paper from the drawers on the desk. She quickly wrote down some words before laying the note on her bed. She then moved back to the balcony where Twilight´s body was. She laid down before Twilight and gave her a soft kiss on the forehead. The pain was going away soon; all it took was a little concentration and a sting.
The sun goddess cast a spell on the object she was holding with her magic. It was softly glowing with yellow magic. She was ready for what was to come. She would soon be happy again. She would soon be reunited with her faithful student, with her love. All it took was a little sting. She lifted the knife up to her heart. Everything was finally going to go her way. She felt a small sting, and then the darkness came.
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“With the death of my student I could not take it anymore. From this day forth, Luna will rule the land of Equestria. I’m sorry I have failed you my subjects, but mostly I’m sorry that I have failed you, Luna. May the true love find its way to you one day.
Yours forever, Princess Celestia of Equestria.” Luna sighed.
“These were the final words of my sister. May the memory of her live on forever.” Luna finished her speech before unveiling a huge momentum. To the left was Twilight, proud as ever and to the right was Celestia. They were locked in a powerful hug. The statue was placed in the castle garden as a reminder of two of the greatest heroes Equestria had ever seen.
That was a good start of a sad fic. More stuff could have been an option (Explaining what happened to Twilight etc.) But it's up to you.
First fic is the hard one. The next one you will write will be much better and bigger. So keep on writing and you shall be surprised.
I remember my first sad fic. And I could say that you have a future on the sad part of this place
And I am currently editing this story. So if you want some grammar fixes, let me know
Your writing style is good, although you could have made the whole thing longer, like expanding Celestia's struggle after the unexpected event... Still, it was nice. Sad, but nice.
1135958 1135966 I kinda fall off quickly and get a writers block if I write any longer :/ Anyways it was kind of supposed to be a bit mysterious and philosophical, which is why I did not really focus too much on what happened to Twilight. Thanks for the feedback I really appritiate it :)
Good story, but it ended too quickly for my likes. It could really have been awesome if it was longer. A thumbs up nonetheless.
So, I am done with the grammar fixes.
If you want me to send the edited version to you, tell me.
1136069 I would love too. Thanks a lot! :D
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Is .txt ok?
1136082 Sure :)
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Here you go
1136096 Thanks again! :D
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No problem! I like helping n stuff
And it was not such a huge edit anyways. A few words here and there. A most welcome break of writing my story.
I'm being stalked? Paranoidmode activate!
1136120 I'll read your stories later, just had a lot of sad today so don't feel like adding more to it :)
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You will get used to the sad in time
Reading later, eh? Prepare yourself, The tale of the Slenderman is getting a 11K-words sequel chapter because it got requested. It's ready and will be published whenever I have the time to stalk the possible readers and commentators for a couple of hours.
Interesting concept, but incomplete. Also, I have a lot of problems with Twilestia ships; Celestia's love would be better placed in the mother/daughter category. And you can be vague about Twilight's maiming, but there still needs to be a context for it. Had Celestia sent her to help establish the trade route (being the superior planner that she is)? If so, perhaps Celestia would feel responsible for her death, and allow herself to become fatalistic as a result.
There also needs to be more dialogue; perhaps Celestia has that philosophical discussion with Luna, but does not openly announce her intentions. The method of her suicide also relies a bit much on the Deus ex Machina trope--I think most of us here believe that although the sisters are practically immortal in that they have a longevity comparable to dragons, they can still be maimed and killed with sufficient force, but it is difficult as the alicorn in question will most likely draw upon her huge magic reserves to defend herself from force.
With your permission, might I take a crack at expanding this idea to give it a bit more depth?
1136172 Go ahead! Also, I kinda wanted this to be a short fic revolving around Celestia loosing what she cares for the most before even realising how much she cares for her. I also wanted to keep it very open so that people may write sidestories and sequels. I tend to get a writers block after 2000 words so I wanted to do a very short fic to se how it worked out :)
Also I don't know why but I like the thought of a ritual being the only way of killing the demi goddes. I hope this explains my thought proccess somewhat. I'm kinda exhausted after little sleep and school and stuff so I'm sorry about phrasing my self horribly and explaining in weird ways. Gah I'm even rambling now.
Anyways feel free to expand the idea and bring more depth! :D
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Thanks! I'll be sure to give you credit when I get around to writing it.
1136232 Remember to PM me so I can put up a link to it :D
1136256 Alrighty! How about you leave a comment on my page so I'll remember? =3
Was I the only one getting a serious Shakespearean vibe from this whole story?
1137773 It seems so for now :P
Hnnnng!!
Right in the feels
This...wow. Short, but a masterpiece! Now, I can see you have a long journey ahead of you. So do I, so if you don't mind, could you check out my only story, and see what should be done? I tend to rush through, so please forgive
1149601 I would love to read it, but I'm not sure if I'm able to give you any decent feedback. My self I just write without thinking about the elements of my writing. I will read it tomorow or next week. Kinda got a lot of stuff to do this weekend :(
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I'm okay with this! Just no cussing, I for one do not like that.
1151038 Yeah I keep it proffesionally, I just meant like. I have no idea what elements of writing I use and stuff when i write xD
1151079 lol