When Twilight and Venom took down Riot, the rest of the symbiotes all agreed to take willing hosts and live new, peaceful lives. But one particular symbiote managed to escape Equestria. And he has no intention of joining the good side.
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Well damn. Shit just got real
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Carnage isn't a brute but he is basically the monster from a slasher film.
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If a romance involving a klyntar isn't a love triangle then you ain't writing your symbiote stories right.
It's like a married couple fighting over a pair of pants. Except the pants is alive and it wants to be worn by both.
Foreshadowing Toxin or Raze?
Twilight and Venom's situation on finding and killing Carnage has gotten worse on a whole new level. I hope they come back and stop him from destroying Twilight's Canterlot High friends and and save Sunset Shimmer, otherwise there'll be total chaos and unspeakable carnage, literally
Somehow I missed the notifications on this story. Everything's up and running now though. Looking forward to more.
Keep up the good work. Deus tecum.
damn, shit just got real
i wonder if sunset will be able to control carnage
nice work
Need some more
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Chaptaz or dakka, please let it be more da latta?
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SCORN TO! Don't forget Scorn!
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XD. CONTROL CARNAGE! Dude you are FUNNY! That's the funniest thing I've read yet!
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Unfortunately I took some artistic liberty, Scorn was just another member of Riot's team and she's in fact bonded with Celestia right now, they joined toward the end of the first fic.
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You know she's like one of the more broken symbiotes in terms of power right?
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I was about to mention Scorn but then remembered she's already been introduced. Don't know if the story is gonna consider her Carnage's offspring, but she's already established.
Incidentally it was as I was backspacing on Scorn that I remembered Carnage had a third child. That's how forgettable Raze is, lol.
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Theoretically she should be. Being siblings she should be on par with Toxin (who at the time was well established as the strongest of the klyntar) on top of her own unique power of technopathy.
But she never got any story to really show off in, and then Absolute Carnage happened and, amongst other things, Venom and Carnage got buffed god levels with their power ups in the story arc.
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I love that arc BTW. Absolute Carnage. Yeah sad we lost Scorn but hey at least we got something out of it.
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Just read up on her on the Marvel wiki. I did before while writing the first story but didn't go as in depth. Dang, she's pretty tough it looks like. Idk how much of that I'll keep for this universe but I'll definitely have to keep it in mind.
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Do so.
Prologue
2. The New Host
Wait. What?
Does this guy want to destroy Equestria or join the princesses in their alliance with the Klyntar?
10054924
Oh oof, good catch. That second part you quoted from this chapter was a late edit while I was attempting to further explain how Light's allegiance has shifted. I was imagining a sort of "he's willing to do a hostile takeover NOW to ensure future generations are prosperous" line of reasoning, but I think I need to rewrite some things. I'll do that once I get home from work in a few hours, thank you
10054924
Alright so an update, I changed the writing a bit.
In the prologue, instead of focusing on all of Equestria, Light starts to imply he would only focus on those who tried to stop their future plans, so his dialogue changed to,
The part in the second chapter now ends off with
Thus confirming that although he wants FUTURE peace he's okay with it taking extreme measures to get to that point. Hopefully that makes a little more sense. Thanks again for pointing out the contradiction, I can't believe I didn't notice that.
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i mean like with twilight and venom. now not necessarily romantically but at least where they see each other as equals.
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Oh that's still cute kid. That's really adorable.
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it is possible, there are versions of carnage where he/she starts as a good guy or becomes one.
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There's literally only one and the only other time in canon it happened was due to a morality flip. Carnage. Is not. And never will be. A good symbiote.
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well lets see how this story goes then. oh and they say the same thing about doomsday and there are good version of him.
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Yeah and then he got ERASED from the timeline.
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again let see where this story goes.
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Fair enough. Sorry for being an ass.
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no u brought up several good points. i just like to think of the possibilities.
If there isn't a body in Sunsets apartment tomorrow I shutter to think what happened to it!
10055671
I mean, outside of the AXIS event there's been 2 instances of a good boy Carnage. Both in alternate continuities, but then again we are talking about a fan fic so...
There was the Ultimate comic universe Ultimate Carnage who through a bunch of 'comic book plots' effectively turned into that verse's Gwen Stacy (before she got her symbiote portion removed), and the Ultimate Spider Man animated series where Mary Jane straight up reforms Carnage and becomes a part time superhero.
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Much more consistent and less confusing.
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Glad to hear it. Thank you again for pointing that out, somehow despite multiple rereadings before posting the prologue, I failed to notice how those two parts conflicted. I'll definitely have to pay more attention in the future.
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I get what you mean. So I went back into chapter 2 and had Sunset hesitate more before accepting Carnage, telling Light that she'd need some time to think about it before offering herself, but Light of course insists they don't have time (Carnage really doesn't want to wait) so she decides to go for it after that, since she feels she can trust someone Celestia holds in high esteem.
For chapter 3, I gave Sunset a little more focus, making it clearer that seeing Light's death drove her to tears, and she asks Carnage if hosts dying is normal (an understandable concern since he's in her now). And there's some more details scattered throughout, such as toward the end she still feels upset and nauseous thinking about Light instead of just "sometimes got nauseous remembering it" because there's no way it should only SOMETIMES distress her after only a week. Hopefully that improves things, but I don't mind continuing to tweak it. I know I need a lot more practice writing characters reacting to traumatic events like this so any criticism is welcome.