I read the first version and thought it was fine, since it’s not uncommon for authors to write situations like that a bit over the top, but I will admit I like the new version better
10018841 Well there alot of yelling in this chapter and I put caps for words when characters are yelling. I feel like it makes feel more realistic but, I will try to step back on it a little.
10018826 No problem. I have money but no creativity when it comes to writing, so I like to show my appreciation for it. Like when people tip me when I cook for them.
10018992 Ah yes like most modern human adult he indeed does.
10019267 I wouldn't say they moslet him. In my previous Rarity did but, it more they didn't get how he feeling. Twilight thought he was finally really to date pony. He wasn't. Rarity wanted answer so she went a bit overboard.
Sure, let's run from things instead of talking them out like adults. Usually that stops at the metaphorical running instead of the actual one, but reality's often weirder than fiction.
Wonder when he'll stop being overly ridiculous about talking though.
Technically Spike would be considered an adult dragon in his own society. The second a dragon goes through its adolescent molt, it is promptly thrown out of the nest because of the smell and declared on its own. Once it has survived and gets its wings, it is considered pretty much a mature adult as far as others are concerned.
Yeah, I would say they ARE that ugly to him. Not in the conventional sense, but their actions make them undesirable. For one, they don't care what he wants and conti ue to try and press the issue rather than just going "Hey I SUPER have the hots for you lets have a very close platonic relationship first and see where we go from there."
As for Anon, I think his mother would voice her approval for his actions. He could be violent towards them or take advantage but doesn't. Plus that phrase implies that him not consenting makes him bad, and that he should always give consent to those who make advances on him. And ignores that like any other person, he has preferences on what he wants in a partner and he shouldn't be forced to discard them just because someone wants him badly enough.
And finally him not wanting to ruin their friendship or make them sad is admirable but he has no fault here. The Mane 6 are already ruining things and making HIM sad (which they don't care about) so them being sad is ultimately self-inflicted. In short, them not accepting no for an answer squarely makes this all their fault.
Alright, completely shallow Rarity averted, thank you.
I read the first version and thought it was fine, since it’s not uncommon for authors to write situations like that a bit over the top, but I will admit I like the new version better
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Thank you both. I thought this version was alot better in terms of their characters and how I can flow the story later.
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I never saw the original, but you have a patreon supporter now, keep up the good work.
Read both, like this one better.
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OOO WELL SHIT MAN. THANKS FOR THE SUPPORT.
Honestly, it feels like you’re overusing your caps lock
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Well there alot of yelling in this chapter and I put caps for words when characters are yelling. I feel like it makes feel more realistic but, I will try to step back on it a little.
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Not that caps are bad, but they lose their affect when overused
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No problem. I have money but no creativity when it comes to writing, so I like to show my appreciation for it. Like when people tip me when I cook for them.
It seems like anonymous have trust issues and low self-esteem
Hmm, maybe they'd have better luck talking to Anon if they didn't keep trying to molest him.
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Ah yes like most modern human adult he indeed does.
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I wouldn't say they moslet him. In my previous Rarity did but, it more they didn't get how he feeling. Twilight thought he was finally really to date pony. He wasn't. Rarity wanted answer so she went a bit overboard.
Sure, let's run from things instead of talking them out like adults. Usually that stops at the metaphorical running instead of the actual one, but reality's often weirder than fiction.
Wonder when he'll stop being overly ridiculous about talking though.
Technically Spike would be considered an adult dragon in his own society. The second a dragon goes through its adolescent molt, it is promptly thrown out of the nest because of the smell and declared on its own. Once it has survived and gets its wings, it is considered pretty much a mature adult as far as others are concerned.
Kinda funny how he yeeted himself out the window instead of facing his problems. In his situation, I don't know if I would or wouldn't do the same.
This is the better version.
Just a couple of grammar things, but otherwise very good.
make MOAR!!!
Yeah, I would say they ARE that ugly to him. Not in the conventional sense, but their actions make them undesirable. For one, they don't care what he wants and conti ue to try and press the issue rather than just going "Hey I SUPER have the hots for you lets have a very close platonic relationship first and see where we go from there."
As for Anon, I think his mother would voice her approval for his actions. He could be violent towards them or take advantage but doesn't. Plus that phrase implies that him not consenting makes him bad, and that he should always give consent to those who make advances on him. And ignores that like any other person, he has preferences on what he wants in a partner and he shouldn't be forced to discard them just because someone wants him badly enough.
And finally him not wanting to ruin their friendship or make them sad is admirable but he has no fault here. The Mane 6 are already ruining things and making HIM sad (which they don't care about) so them being sad is ultimately self-inflicted. In short, them not accepting no for an answer squarely makes this all their fault.
Hey everyone I am gonna try to get new chapter out today. So look forward to that..,.....Here a little bit of spoiler for it.
It will have certain apple farmer in it. <3
I can't wait for this to get sad when the ponies realize Anon considers himself unlovable and was used or abused by human females.
Ok, he made Rarity cry. That cad!
When can we expect chapter 4?
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ONE OF THESE DAYS I SWEAR
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Take your time. The last thing we want is for you to ruin your masterpiece by rushing to meet some deadline.
Sometimes a good story or in this case chapter just takes time.
And if you can't find anon just let me know and I'll get the blow dart gun again.
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Which one of these are we talking about? That one, that one, or this one?
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